Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Me and Spiggo-Thingo"A collection of my poems
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Comment from misscookie
I love, I love it
I feel the same way I think every time I leave the doctors I go home with a new sickness I think it's part of the doctors plan.
Thank you for sharing and I do understand. LOL
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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I love, I love it
I feel the same way I think every time I leave the doctors I go home with a new sickness I think it's part of the doctors plan.
Thank you for sharing and I do understand. LOL
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your kind review.
Steve
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You're very welcome.
Until next time.
Comment from krys123
Such a great poem about a trip to the hospital or to the doctors. Your double couplet rhyming quatrains were done so well that neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. The many multiple imagery sources made it so much fun to read and easy to picture the many characters and places and this poem. Thank you for sharing this with everyone including myself. You have a good one and God bless.
Alex
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Such a great poem about a trip to the hospital or to the doctors. Your double couplet rhyming quatrains were done so well that neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. The many multiple imagery sources made it so much fun to read and easy to picture the many characters and places and this poem. Thank you for sharing this with everyone including myself. You have a good one and God bless.
Alex
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Krys, thanks a lot for the kind words and the six stars.
Steve
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You are so welcome
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets in your quatrains
vivid and hysterically funny descriptive detail of the folks in the doctor's waiting room LOL
love the internal rhyme in sneezing wheezing
great alliteration in happy healthy hall of horrors
lots of fun internal rhyme adds to the bouncy cadence
I am still laughing :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets in your quatrains
vivid and hysterically funny descriptive detail of the folks in the doctor's waiting room LOL
love the internal rhyme in sneezing wheezing
great alliteration in happy healthy hall of horrors
lots of fun internal rhyme adds to the bouncy cadence
I am still laughing :-) Brooke
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Brooke - glad you got a laugh out of this.
Steve
Comment from TOMORAL
Oh, I loved this so much, and I am smiling from ear to ear. You have nailed waiting rooms to a tee. I see a lot of doctors and you are spot on! This is a six or maybe an eight! What a beat you have to this one.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Oh, I loved this so much, and I am smiling from ear to ear. You have nailed waiting rooms to a tee. I see a lot of doctors and you are spot on! This is a six or maybe an eight! What a beat you have to this one.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind words and the six stars - glad you got a laugh - that's the best medicine after all.
Steve
Comment from GracieAnn
kiwi, this is filled with humorous and universal fears we all must endure when being in the hot bed of germs-clinic or hospital. (Thank you for explaining to a Yank, like me, some of the terminology. Though "Yank" is usually spit out and reserved for those not from the southern US. They'd be really offended if they knew they were Yanks, by world standards, too! LOL) I found it well rhymed and I love made up words that serve the purpose. My son once was in a hospital for a week with severe athsma and when I took him back a little over a week later for a follow-up, I asked the doc what the red spots were on his neck, and he said "chickenpox". So he caught it while in the place that is suppose to make you well. This write is way too accurate. :0 GracieAnn
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kiwi, this is filled with humorous and universal fears we all must endure when being in the hot bed of germs-clinic or hospital. (Thank you for explaining to a Yank, like me, some of the terminology. Though "Yank" is usually spit out and reserved for those not from the southern US. They'd be really offended if they knew they were Yanks, by world standards, too! LOL) I found it well rhymed and I love made up words that serve the purpose. My son once was in a hospital for a week with severe athsma and when I took him back a little over a week later for a follow-up, I asked the doc what the red spots were on his neck, and he said "chickenpox". So he caught it while in the place that is suppose to make you well. This write is way too accurate. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, GA
Of course this is exaggerated for effect, but yes, hospitals are full of sick people so I avoid them like the plague.
Steve
Comment from amahra
LOL your author notes are as funny as your poem. I loved the poem, rather true or fantasy. And maybe those things didn't happen to you, but I'll bet an apple and an aspirin it happened to someone.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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LOL your author notes are as funny as your poem. I loved the poem, rather true or fantasy. And maybe those things didn't happen to you, but I'll bet an apple and an aspirin it happened to someone.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from bloomingsun
Well, that was fun. I understand the cringe-worthy references to all the dreadful germs and bugs that await those waiting on the doc. It is said not to touch anything with your hands like the chair, the magazines, the doorknobs, etc... Cute and imaginative write about a common thing. I recently had a physical and got a good report except for BP being slightly high. Not high enough to take a pill yet, but that may be down the line. Stay well. Nice write!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Well, that was fun. I understand the cringe-worthy references to all the dreadful germs and bugs that await those waiting on the doc. It is said not to touch anything with your hands like the chair, the magazines, the doorknobs, etc... Cute and imaginative write about a common thing. I recently had a physical and got a good report except for BP being slightly high. Not high enough to take a pill yet, but that may be down the line. Stay well. Nice write!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you - keep an eye on that BP - my doctor has scared the wits out of me with possible consequences of ignoring it.
Steve
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I have entered this contest, but you have got the winner here! What an amazing bunch of words, and you are so right, my mother always said, she goes to hospital with a headache, and is sent home with pneumonia! There are more germs in hospital and the doctors waiting rooms, then anywhere else in the world! Good luck with this winning entry! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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I have entered this contest, but you have got the winner here! What an amazing bunch of words, and you are so right, my mother always said, she goes to hospital with a headache, and is sent home with pneumonia! There are more germs in hospital and the doctors waiting rooms, then anywhere else in the world! Good luck with this winning entry! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Sandra - don't give away your chances in the contest so easily - I have never seen a humorous poem win one of these things.
Yes, hospitals are full of sick people, keep away from them if you can.
Steve
Comment from goompa
Yep! An absolutely delightful poem with perfect rhyme and meter which tells it like it is. Stay away from doctors and hospitals unless absolutely necessary. That's where the sick people are. Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Yep! An absolutely delightful poem with perfect rhyme and meter which tells it like it is. Stay away from doctors and hospitals unless absolutely necessary. That's where the sick people are. Great job!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Goompa, for the kind words and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very entertaining... laughed out loud at some of the lines! I had a doc tell me I had hbp, and I swore the nurse who took my bp was a nincompoop. He said "take the pills and come back next month" so I did NOT take the pills, and next month my bp, with a diff nurse, was normal. I don't trust those spiggo or the nurses that use 'em!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Very entertaining... laughed out loud at some of the lines! I had a doc tell me I had hbp, and I swore the nurse who took my bp was a nincompoop. He said "take the pills and come back next month" so I did NOT take the pills, and next month my bp, with a diff nurse, was normal. I don't trust those spiggo or the nurses that use 'em!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Phyllis
They took my blood pressure three times so I'm pretty sure they got it right! Then scared me with what could happen - the pill is a minor inconvenience.
Steve
