Steve's Story-Poems
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Comment from Titanx9
You're right, folks should be mindful of their health and get check ups, but believe me going to the hospital today gives one about a fifty-fifty chance of coming out alive. Your satirical piece is funny indeed, but there's much truth to it. I'd advise anyone to take along some antibacterial wipes when he or she sees their health care provider. There are many of those working in the hospital these days that simply don't practice clinical hygiene, but Americans aren't facing that fact.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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You're right, folks should be mindful of their health and get check ups, but believe me going to the hospital today gives one about a fifty-fifty chance of coming out alive. Your satirical piece is funny indeed, but there's much truth to it. I'd advise anyone to take along some antibacterial wipes when he or she sees their health care provider. There are many of those working in the hospital these days that simply don't practice clinical hygiene, but Americans aren't facing that fact.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from pipersfancy
Hmmm... I had a similar experience recently... while working out of town, I too quite ill with tonsils that decided to abscess and was taken to the local ER. First thing they did was to check the BP and the nurse nearly fainted when the reading came up at 218/112... I left the hospital with 5 meds... and instructions to see my regular doctor immediately upon my return home.
PF
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Hmmm... I had a similar experience recently... while working out of town, I too quite ill with tonsils that decided to abscess and was taken to the local ER. First thing they did was to check the BP and the nurse nearly fainted when the reading came up at 218/112... I left the hospital with 5 meds... and instructions to see my regular doctor immediately upon my return home.
PF
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, PF..... and I thought my BP was high!
Steve
Comment from ELumpkins
The good humor man. This is a very good piece even though it takes some effort to keep up with the Authors' word usage. I enjoyed reading it and went so far as to read the Authors'notes. That wasn't much help. I am kidding, the piece is a very good read.
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The good humor man. This is a very good piece even though it takes some effort to keep up with the Authors' word usage. I enjoyed reading it and went so far as to read the Authors'notes. That wasn't much help. I am kidding, the piece is a very good read.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the review - I'll try not to use such a multitude of polysyllabic vocabulary items next time! :o)
Steve
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a funny poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The writer tells the reader about a nasty experience and the bath at the end more than made up for it. Good luck with the contest.
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This is a funny poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The writer tells the reader about a nasty experience and the bath at the end more than made up for it. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Tomes.
Steve
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My pleasure.
Comment from Lynette Marie
This reminds me of my husband. For years he refused to go to the doctor, and when he finally did was diagnosed with high blood pressure and diabetes, both easily controllable, thank God!
I love the lilt, flow, and humor of this piece. "There's petulance and flatulence and verbal diarrhoea;" and "She's far from well and by the smell, she's maybe passed away." are hilarious! I enjoyed every word! Good luck in the contest.
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This reminds me of my husband. For years he refused to go to the doctor, and when he finally did was diagnosed with high blood pressure and diabetes, both easily controllable, thank God!
I love the lilt, flow, and humor of this piece. "There's petulance and flatulence and verbal diarrhoea;" and "She's far from well and by the smell, she's maybe passed away." are hilarious! I enjoyed every word! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
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Thanks, LM
Yes, it is good that the high BP can be controlled with a tablet and there are no associated health problems.
Steve
Comment from Merriweather
Your poem is exceptionally clever. I love the references to medical diseases, and I do not feel your visit to the doctor and the waiting room is exaggerated. I recognize it well. You have made it totally humorous. Going to print your poem and read it to my husband tonight. Kudos to your "sweet pet" for encouraging you to go anyways. Those blood pressure readings were especially high, and you needed that little pill to right the wrong. You deserve six stars for this wonderful poem. It needs publication so everyone can enjoy it.
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Your poem is exceptionally clever. I love the references to medical diseases, and I do not feel your visit to the doctor and the waiting room is exaggerated. I recognize it well. You have made it totally humorous. Going to print your poem and read it to my husband tonight. Kudos to your "sweet pet" for encouraging you to go anyways. Those blood pressure readings were especially high, and you needed that little pill to right the wrong. You deserve six stars for this wonderful poem. It needs publication so everyone can enjoy it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the kind words - glad you got a smile out of it.
Steve
Comment from S.Yocom
I love it, Steve. Your meter is perfect, as are your inner and ending rhymes, and you told a great story. It looks to me as if this poem is a sure winner in the contest.
Sally
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I love it, Steve. Your meter is perfect, as are your inner and ending rhymes, and you told a great story. It looks to me as if this poem is a sure winner in the contest.
Sally
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Sally.
As for the contest - I don't know if I've ever seen a poem of this type win one, so I won't be holding my breath. Something much more serious and grand will occupy the top spot I fear.
Steve
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Hi there,
This made me laugh out loud, it really did. Having been a nurse in my dim and distant past, I can confirm that this hits the mark on so many levels.
Thanks for sharing.
PS. Glad the BP is okay now.
Laurie
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Hi there,
This made me laugh out loud, it really did. Having been a nurse in my dim and distant past, I can confirm that this hits the mark on so many levels.
Thanks for sharing.
PS. Glad the BP is okay now.
Laurie
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Laurie - glad you enjoyed my little tale.
Steve
Comment from joneau2
Say, this is very humorous, but at the same time, true. I often have those same feelings when I visit a doctor's office and hear the hacking and sneezing, and get a whiff of what the hell smells. Thankfully, office visits are infrequent. Very entertaining story by the way.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Say, this is very humorous, but at the same time, true. I often have those same feelings when I visit a doctor's office and hear the hacking and sneezing, and get a whiff of what the hell smells. Thankfully, office visits are infrequent. Very entertaining story by the way.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind words - yes, there is often a little truth behind the humour.
Steve
Comment from Green Lake Girl
So cleverly written. Absolutely love the rhyming scheme. You are so creative with the language, which I love. It fits the mood of your poem perfectly. A good reminder to go the doctor. Glad you did. Now take those pills!
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So cleverly written. Absolutely love the rhyming scheme. You are so creative with the language, which I love. It fits the mood of your poem perfectly. A good reminder to go the doctor. Glad you did. Now take those pills!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thanks, GLG
The reviews are about 50/50 between those who say 'go to the doctor' and those who confirm they are too scared to!
Steve
