Grey Geese
This is my poem mixing alliteration into a Haiku2 total reviews
Comment from in777wr#
This was an interesting poem. Very good that each word begins with the letter g. My only question is your first line. I believe you have four syllables. Otherwise good poem.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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This was an interesting poem. Very good that each word begins with the letter g. My only question is your first line. I believe you have four syllables. Otherwise good poem.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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sorry must be my accent I made it five Ga bbl ing must have a look at a rewrite thank you for your review
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You're welcome.
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Let me know when you rewrite, and I will update my review. It is pretty good.
Comment from rjuselius
"Grey geese gabbling
Goslings greedily gouging
Gardens green grass gone"
this is a witty piece of poetry! use of alliteration is good, atleast I like it.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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"Grey geese gabbling
Goslings greedily gouging
Gardens green grass gone"
this is a witty piece of poetry! use of alliteration is good, atleast I like it.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thank you I am new to Haiku form but thought to add some spice by using alliteration. I am glad you liked it. Thank you for your kind review
