'Twas the Night After Christmas
a parody in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Good message executed in the correct rhythm to "'twas the night". In Christmas excess, we do forget that many have nothing. Even so though, I think I would grumble about a pink paisley tie.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Good message executed in the correct rhythm to "'twas the night". In Christmas excess, we do forget that many have nothing. Even so though, I think I would grumble about a pink paisley tie.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Obviously, you are just not on the cutting edge of fashion. LOL Thanks so much, ravenblack :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a modern classic for our time. I'm sure that Clement Moore would approve of this version as a call to us all to minimize the pettiness and maximize the charity in our hearts for those in true need. Really liked your poem.
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This is a modern classic for our time. I'm sure that Clement Moore would approve of this version as a call to us all to minimize the pettiness and maximize the charity in our hearts for those in true need. Really liked your poem.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Bill, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your gracious and generous response to this poem. Brooke
Comment from goompa
HOw very insightful Brooke. Somewhere along the way I guess many of us have come to associate Christmas with receiving gifts. It's troublesome when I see my grandchildren grow dissatisfied because they only have last years model of their favorite technological gadget. Great job!
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HOw very insightful Brooke. Somewhere along the way I guess many of us have come to associate Christmas with receiving gifts. It's troublesome when I see my grandchildren grow dissatisfied because they only have last years model of their favorite technological gadget. Great job!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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goompa, thank you so much -yes, it amazes me that items that cost hundreds of dollars are made obsolete by a new model a year or two later. Brooke :-)
Comment from lizabethrita
My dear Pearlie,
your poem touched me as well. What a great concept and so contemporary. Your prose was silky as an unloved scarf .Hurrah for you and your audience too.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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My dear Pearlie,
your poem touched me as well. What a great concept and so contemporary. Your prose was silky as an unloved scarf .Hurrah for you and your audience too.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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lizabethrita, thank you for your gracious, encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
As I saw the photo, I too thought of my many grandchildren around the tree this years receiving their presence. Very well worded and flows with excitement. Well done grandmother. Happy New Year to you and your family. Well done Sawyer. Blessings
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As I saw the photo, I too thought of my many grandchildren around the tree this years receiving their presence. Very well worded and flows with excitement. Well done grandmother. Happy New Year to you and your family. Well done Sawyer. Blessings
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Ben, for your generous response to this poem. Happy New Year to you, too :-) Brooke
Comment from ragamuffin
Rarely do I finish reading poems of this length because they usually just fail to keep my attention; such was not the case with this. Your words fit extremely well into the 'Twas the Night Before Christmas pattern which made your piece easy to follow as I was thinking about the pattern of the original poem while reading this. Excellent thoughts and message. Hopefully it's one many will consider and take to heart. So easy to forget all we do have and that so many have so little. Never can have enough reminders such as this.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Rarely do I finish reading poems of this length because they usually just fail to keep my attention; such was not the case with this. Your words fit extremely well into the 'Twas the Night Before Christmas pattern which made your piece easy to follow as I was thinking about the pattern of the original poem while reading this. Excellent thoughts and message. Hopefully it's one many will consider and take to heart. So easy to forget all we do have and that so many have so little. Never can have enough reminders such as this.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, ragamuffin - I so appreciate your taking the time to read this through :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
I hope you didn't mean this to be completely serious from start to finish because I found some of the lines really funny.
This is a great line: The five-day-old snow sucked the light from the moon
I already have a few gifts which I plan to drop off at Goodwill. Am wondering if they'd take a HUGE box of un-opened candy. I could eat just some of it and dump the rest in the yard for the wildlife, but it's got caramel in it and I'd feel guilty for causing tooth decay in the poor squirrels, rabbits possum and raccoons. Ya want me to mail you some, hee hee.
Hugs,
Lou
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Hi Brooke,
I hope you didn't mean this to be completely serious from start to finish because I found some of the lines really funny.
This is a great line: The five-day-old snow sucked the light from the moon
I already have a few gifts which I plan to drop off at Goodwill. Am wondering if they'd take a HUGE box of un-opened candy. I could eat just some of it and dump the rest in the yard for the wildlife, but it's got caramel in it and I'd feel guilty for causing tooth decay in the poor squirrels, rabbits possum and raccoons. Ya want me to mail you some, hee hee.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Yes, the funny lines are intended to be funny, like the one you quote :-) Thanks so much, Lou. Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Yes, we forget in our own good fortune, those with nothing to celebrate, or without the means to do so.
I like your version of the 'Night before Christmas' - a good reminder to appreciate what we have, and to perhaps share it more readily.
Patrick
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Hi Brooke,
Yes, we forget in our own good fortune, those with nothing to celebrate, or without the means to do so.
I like your version of the 'Night before Christmas' - a good reminder to appreciate what we have, and to perhaps share it more readily.
Patrick
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Patrick, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
AHHH
This was a delightful poem to read
And the message touched my heart.
Let do this all year round.
don't hide it dived it yes let all share.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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AHHH
This was a delightful poem to read
And the message touched my heart.
Let do this all year round.
don't hide it dived it yes let all share.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Miss Cookie, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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Your very welcome.
Until next time.
Comment from Rondeno
Great poem, Brooke! This comes closer to expressing what Christmas is about than anything I've read. And, as usual, it's organized in meticulous versification.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Great poem, Brooke! This comes closer to expressing what Christmas is about than anything I've read. And, as usual, it's organized in meticulous versification.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Michael, thank you so much :-) Brooke
