'Twas the Night After Christmas
a parody in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
This is such a good poem for this moment, right here. Excess gifting, conspicuous consumerism, and left over spirit are all aspects of the passing of Christmas. Your beautifully written poem teaches, amuses, and touches the heart.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is such a good poem for this moment, right here. Excess gifting, conspicuous consumerism, and left over spirit are all aspects of the passing of Christmas. Your beautifully written poem teaches, amuses, and touches the heart.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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mfowler, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Your poem touched my heart. The spirit of Christmas is giving and we are such a wasteful society that takes so much for granted. I think you are on a winner with this marvellous poem. Our Salvation Army have a Wishing Tree and folks place gifts (asked for) under the tree for those less fortunate. I loved your story/poem and wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Your poem touched my heart. The spirit of Christmas is giving and we are such a wasteful society that takes so much for granted. I think you are on a winner with this marvellous poem. Our Salvation Army have a Wishing Tree and folks place gifts (asked for) under the tree for those less fortunate. I loved your story/poem and wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Kay, thank you so very much :-) Our church has one of those trees in our fellowship hall with wishes from folks served by Upper Merion Emergency Aid. I appreciate your generous six stars, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from fairy77
I think that was the best poem I've read on fanstory:)Well done and to follow those footsteps amazing and enjoyable:)Good one and I'm sure you have many sixes. CONGRATS!!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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I think that was the best poem I've read on fanstory:)Well done and to follow those footsteps amazing and enjoyable:)Good one and I'm sure you have many sixes. CONGRATS!!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Beth, thank you so much for your wonderfully encouraging comments and generous sixth star. Merry Christmas!! :-) Brooke
Comment from TELLER OF TALES
Wow! Hilarious and enjoyable, this is a very wonderful and touching piece by the author, it demonstrates love and kindness and shows what a true writer the author is, the rhyme is excellently composed and driven, it is a very lovely work of art.....FROM THE TELLER OF TALES....
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Wow! Hilarious and enjoyable, this is a very wonderful and touching piece by the author, it demonstrates love and kindness and shows what a true writer the author is, the rhyme is excellently composed and driven, it is a very lovely work of art.....FROM THE TELLER OF TALES....
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Teller of Tales, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
What a treat for treat for Christmas Eve! So much fun in the beginning and then you ease us in to the beautiful messages and the warm feelings. Thank you so much. There have been some strange things appearing the last couple days. hahaha. This is more like it. Great poetry from a great poet. Merry Christmas!! mikey
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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What a treat for treat for Christmas Eve! So much fun in the beginning and then you ease us in to the beautiful messages and the warm feelings. Thank you so much. There have been some strange things appearing the last couple days. hahaha. This is more like it. Great poetry from a great poet. Merry Christmas!! mikey
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Mikey, thank you so very much for your generous and gracious response to this poem. Merry Christmas!! :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Verrry clever twist on the classic, Brooke. I found (gasp) two errors. Here they are, along with the pertinent rule:
list for the day after sale
list for the day-after sale. << should be like this
The five day old snow
The five-day-old snow << should be like this (just like "five-year-old" boy)
Rule, pasted from my post called "Grammar Rules 1":
Hyphens
1. Hyphenate two-word modifiers that come before the noun, and do not hyphenate them if they come after the noun.
Correct Examples
He died of self-inflicted wounds.
The soldier's wounds were self inflicted.
The well-endowed girl was popular.
The girl was well endowed.
Obviously you know this rule, proven by the correct use of other hyphenated modifiers in the poem, but we all get careless when in a hurry... believe me, I should know! :)
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Merry Christmas! :)
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Verrry clever twist on the classic, Brooke. I found (gasp) two errors. Here they are, along with the pertinent rule:
list for the day after sale
list for the day-after sale. << should be like this
The five day old snow
The five-day-old snow << should be like this (just like "five-year-old" boy)
Rule, pasted from my post called "Grammar Rules 1":
Hyphens
1. Hyphenate two-word modifiers that come before the noun, and do not hyphenate them if they come after the noun.
Correct Examples
He died of self-inflicted wounds.
The soldier's wounds were self inflicted.
The well-endowed girl was popular.
The girl was well endowed.
Obviously you know this rule, proven by the correct use of other hyphenated modifiers in the poem, but we all get careless when in a hurry... believe me, I should know! :)
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Merry Christmas! :)
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you, Phyllis, for your thoughtful review. You are, of course, right about the hyphens and I've fixed the problems. I'm not sure after the many hours I put into this poem I would characterize my actions as being in a careless hurry, but definitely an oversight. Merry Christmas to you too :-) Brooke
Comment from Opal H.
What a lovely Christmas poem! With a great moral too :) One person's trash is another person's treasure. When we get a lot, we become picky.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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What a lovely Christmas poem! With a great moral too :) One person's trash is another person's treasure. When we get a lot, we become picky.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Opal, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is too cute for words! I loved that you wrote it for the night after Christmas. The lesson gained that we should be so thankful for what we have as some have very little.
A delightful read, Brooke!
Connie :)
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is too cute for words! I loved that you wrote it for the night after Christmas. The lesson gained that we should be so thankful for what we have as some have very little.
A delightful read, Brooke!
Connie :)
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much, Connie. Merry Christmas! Brooke :-)
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Merry Christmas Brooke! Wishing you a wonderful day and a happy and healthy 2014!
Connie :)
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Absolutely a wonderful piece to enjoy on this season. Sure tobe a hit with the little guy later on. Sure was with me. You made my day. Loved the rhyme and take off from a favorite
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Absolutely a wonderful piece to enjoy on this season. Sure tobe a hit with the little guy later on. Sure was with me. You made my day. Loved the rhyme and take off from a favorite
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Barb, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
This is such a delightful poem and made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. I was hoping you were going to post something before I went to bed. Thanks for the present. I just love this one, beautifully written and one I plan to put on my favorite list.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is such a delightful poem and made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. I was hoping you were going to post something before I went to bed. Thanks for the present. I just love this one, beautifully written and one I plan to put on my favorite list.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Valerie, thank you so much :-) I very much appreciate your lovely response to this poem, my friend :-) Brooke
