'Twas the Night After Christmas
a parody in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is one wonderful Christmas poem, Brooke. It has everything that makes it so magic. I wonder just how much will be binned this Christmas. It is so sad to think of all those children who have lost their homes and some of their family in the storms and fires this year, some won't be getting Christmas presents, or share a lovely Christmas dinner with their family. We must remember them. Good luck in the contest, Brooke, this poem really does make one think. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is one wonderful Christmas poem, Brooke. It has everything that makes it so magic. I wonder just how much will be binned this Christmas. It is so sad to think of all those children who have lost their homes and some of their family in the storms and fires this year, some won't be getting Christmas presents, or share a lovely Christmas dinner with their family. We must remember them. Good luck in the contest, Brooke, this poem really does make one think. xsx sandra
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Sandra, thank you so very much, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
You did a good job of editing the original poem to give it a very important lesson about the meaning of Christmas. It is more for giving than receiving and that you should think of the less fortunate all the time. Helping others always makes a person happy.
It is a cute picture.
Merry Christmas.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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You did a good job of editing the original poem to give it a very important lesson about the meaning of Christmas. It is more for giving than receiving and that you should think of the less fortunate all the time. Helping others always makes a person happy.
It is a cute picture.
Merry Christmas.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Dragonpoet :-) Merry Christmas to you, too. Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from jaliscomel
A superb parody. You have kept the rhythm of the original and given the poem new meaning and insight. You might have used that were wasteful instead of oh so wasteful. It would keep the rhythm and rhyme and eliminate the break caused by oh. I liked the line The five-day-old snow sucked the light from the moon. Very well done
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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A superb parody. You have kept the rhythm of the original and given the poem new meaning and insight. You might have used that were wasteful instead of oh so wasteful. It would keep the rhythm and rhyme and eliminate the break caused by oh. I liked the line The five-day-old snow sucked the light from the moon. Very well done
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, jaliscomel, for your generous rating and thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
Comment from Joy Graham
What a beautiful story poem. We have many homeles folk here and it is so true that they push their carts around and are v ery efficient at sorting through the garbage. I love the idea of a homeles santa gathering up the unwanted treasures for those in need. This is a keeper, Brooke! Awesome picture of Miranda and Sawyer reading your story. Is that a chair cover protector behind them? I love crafty things.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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What a beautiful story poem. We have many homeles folk here and it is so true that they push their carts around and are v ery efficient at sorting through the garbage. I love the idea of a homeles santa gathering up the unwanted treasures for those in need. This is a keeper, Brooke! Awesome picture of Miranda and Sawyer reading your story. Is that a chair cover protector behind them? I love crafty things.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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I think it's just a baby blanket draped over the back of the sofa in Sawyer's play room. :-) That sofa is my bed when I stay with them. Thank you so very much, Joy :-) Merry Christmas!!! Brooke
Comment from in777wr#
This was a very touching poem. So often we do not appreciate what we receive, and to others they are gold. I liked the message of your poem, and how it flows. Being thankful is always a good message. Well written.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This was a very touching poem. So often we do not appreciate what we receive, and to others they are gold. I liked the message of your poem, and how it flows. Being thankful is always a good message. Well written.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
It's a thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme and giving the message of benevolence.
Wording is simple and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth flow throughout the poem.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
Had it been a little shorter, it would have been much better. I think so.
On the whole, Impressive and worth enjoying. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Hello Brooke,
It's a thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme and giving the message of benevolence.
Wording is simple and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth flow throughout the poem.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
Had it been a little shorter, it would have been much better. I think so.
On the whole, Impressive and worth enjoying. Good Luck!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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RP, thank you for your thoughtful feedback. Brooke :-)
Comment from Liz Dunbee
A truly lovely Christmas story. You have a strong message here. As I was cooking and baking today, I thought of all the waste at Christmas and you put my exact thoughts into your poem. A wonderful lesson here. Have a happy day!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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A truly lovely Christmas story. You have a strong message here. As I was cooking and baking today, I thought of all the waste at Christmas and you put my exact thoughts into your poem. A wonderful lesson here. Have a happy day!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Liz, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the selfish nature we sometimes have at Christmas and for showing us those who would be grateful.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the selfish nature we sometimes have at Christmas and for showing us those who would be grateful.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for your generous sixth star and gracious comments, sweetwoodjax. Merry Christmas :-) Brooke
Comment from Enrique28
This fine poem is a true pastiche of reality, in that there is always someone poorer than you. The old man collecting what others discard is an excellent example of this. I love the happy conclusion, and the way it reads and rhymes. Great work, wonderfully apt for Christmas!! Enrique
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This fine poem is a true pastiche of reality, in that there is always someone poorer than you. The old man collecting what others discard is an excellent example of this. I love the happy conclusion, and the way it reads and rhymes. Great work, wonderfully apt for Christmas!! Enrique
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Enrique, thank you so very much, my friend, and Merry Christmas :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
I don't know of any homeless who would shun an apparel because a button was missing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Wishing you and yours a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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I don't know of any homeless who would shun an apparel because a button was missing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Wishing you and yours a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Charlie. Merry Christmas, my friend :-) Brooke
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You, too. Brooke. Thank you
