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Comment from Azra Rahman Manzer
The subject matter is good no doubt.The poetry is good too.But I feel it can be improved in terms of rhyme and meter.Some words are repeated a little too often.I do not know whether this was deliberate attempt to emphasize the point or unintentionally.If you would want to improve it,it will become much better a poem than it is now.Because there is always roo for improvement.My best to you!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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The subject matter is good no doubt.The poetry is good too.But I feel it can be improved in terms of rhyme and meter.Some words are repeated a little too often.I do not know whether this was deliberate attempt to emphasize the point or unintentionally.If you would want to improve it,it will become much better a poem than it is now.Because there is always roo for improvement.My best to you!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Thanks for showing your like in my poem. Deffenatioly i try to improve my writting.
thanks
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You're welcome
Comment from MERRY1
I agree with you that there is nothing like the love and trust in a babies eyes. they seem to plead for your love. Thee are some spelling mistakes you/watching, watch you/desperately/ that should be those.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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I agree with you that there is nothing like the love and trust in a babies eyes. they seem to plead for your love. Thee are some spelling mistakes you/watching, watch you/desperately/ that should be those.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Thanks merry next time i take look before posting.
