A Golden Dawn
A Pantoum51 total reviews
Comment from vkmack
I thought this was a lovely pantoum with a great message and a wondrous sense of the early dawn of Christmas morn. Your rhyme scheme is great, and you use excellent word choice. I thought your best use of phrasing, in a work filled with excellent language, was "On stony ground there flourishes new life that's strong, and good can celebrate with joy a peace profound." That sums up the hope of Christmas right there is such simple words.
Lovely work; excellent job.
Good luck!
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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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I thought this was a lovely pantoum with a great message and a wondrous sense of the early dawn of Christmas morn. Your rhyme scheme is great, and you use excellent word choice. I thought your best use of phrasing, in a work filled with excellent language, was "On stony ground there flourishes new life that's strong, and good can celebrate with joy a peace profound." That sums up the hope of Christmas right there is such simple words.
Lovely work; excellent job.
Good luck!
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
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You are so welcome.
Have a wonderful New Year.
Vista Kay
