A Golden Dawn
A Pantoum51 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely Pantoum for the contest and a worthy entry. Not having attempted one myself, your poem makes me want to try. The words are beautiful - Good luck and Merry Christmas. All the best for you and yours for the New Year. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This is a lovely Pantoum for the contest and a worthy entry. Not having attempted one myself, your poem makes me want to try. The words are beautiful - Good luck and Merry Christmas. All the best for you and yours for the New Year. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Smoothiecool
great picture choice
good luck in the contest
you Pantoum has fulfilled the required criteria for this contest
the four line stanzas and the repeated lines also the rhyme your words allow the reader to feel and see your spiritual
poem
your correlation with the dawn works for this poem
how confused and battered souls can find peace in the birth of Jesus
cheers SC
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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great picture choice
good luck in the contest
you Pantoum has fulfilled the required criteria for this contest
the four line stanzas and the repeated lines also the rhyme your words allow the reader to feel and see your spiritual
poem
your correlation with the dawn works for this poem
how confused and battered souls can find peace in the birth of Jesus
cheers SC
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
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welcome
Comment from elchupakabra
This was a really nice pantoum. I thought it was perfect, especially with the stormy weather these days, to remind people to look to the dawn :) This was an excellent write all around, thank your for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This was a really nice pantoum. I thought it was perfect, especially with the stormy weather these days, to remind people to look to the dawn :) This was an excellent write all around, thank your for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Zue65
Another poem celebrating the love and hope brought to mankind by the sacrifice of our Lord Jesus.The last stanza says it all as follows," afraid and crushed by doubt on stony ground, neglected souls that faced the dark forlorn, can celebrate with joy, a peace profound: there shines a golden dawn- the Son is born" . God bless poet.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Another poem celebrating the love and hope brought to mankind by the sacrifice of our Lord Jesus.The last stanza says it all as follows," afraid and crushed by doubt on stony ground, neglected souls that faced the dark forlorn, can celebrate with joy, a peace profound: there shines a golden dawn- the Son is born" . God bless poet.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Nosha17
Where there's life there's hope, and with faith in God all things are possible. Lovely choice of words and rhymes to convey your well-written poem.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Where there's life there's hope, and with faith in God all things are possible. Lovely choice of words and rhymes to convey your well-written poem.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Sylvia Page
This poem has fulfilled all the requirements of a Pantoum. It also flowed very well with good rhythm and imagery.
I loved reading it.
Merry Christmas and best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This poem has fulfilled all the requirements of a Pantoum. It also flowed very well with good rhythm and imagery.
I loved reading it.
Merry Christmas and best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good complimentary photo. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with shines/sun...which/warm...faced/forlorn...battered/by...we/where...can/celebrate...peace/profound. Good, clear message that is thought provoking and contains no errors.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Good complimentary photo. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with shines/sun...which/warm...faced/forlorn...battered/by...we/where...can/celebrate...peace/profound. Good, clear message that is thought provoking and contains no errors.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Thank you for this Christmas offering. Indeed that Son is the light. Light seems to be the theme for me this season. I wish you blessings.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you for this Christmas offering. Indeed that Son is the light. Light seems to be the theme for me this season. I wish you blessings.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from MoIronE13
There shines a golden dawn. The sun is borne
on burnished rays which comfort, feed and warm
neglected souls that faced the dark forlorn,
confused and battered by the raging storm.
**This stanza sets the tone for the whole of the poem.
I absolutely love the message and flow.
The scattered seeds never quite take hold on stony ground
But by Faith, anything is possible
We may get battered and torn but the storms of life
will eventually pass by, and then the sun will shine on Us again.
Yes, the Son is born out of Hope for a better day!
Thanks and good luck in contest.
You have my vote!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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There shines a golden dawn. The sun is borne
on burnished rays which comfort, feed and warm
neglected souls that faced the dark forlorn,
confused and battered by the raging storm.
**This stanza sets the tone for the whole of the poem.
I absolutely love the message and flow.
The scattered seeds never quite take hold on stony ground
But by Faith, anything is possible
We may get battered and torn but the storms of life
will eventually pass by, and then the sun will shine on Us again.
Yes, the Son is born out of Hope for a better day!
Thanks and good luck in contest.
You have my vote!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
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Indeed...(:~:)
Comment from in777wr#
This was a well written poem. All of the elements of a "Pantoum" poem are in place. I like the consistent rhyming scheme. The second stanza stood out to me. Nicely written.
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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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This was a well written poem. All of the elements of a "Pantoum" poem are in place. I like the consistent rhyming scheme. The second stanza stood out to me. Nicely written.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
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You're welcome.
