Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A very well written and beautifully scripted message of hope on Christmas. A slight switch of sun and Son adds great meaning to it all. very well executed. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello Friend,
Nice piece of poetry in the form of 'Pantoum' fulfilling all the required norms.
It beautifully depicts its theme.
Wording is simple and impressive.
Smooth flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Its last stanza, moreover the last line, is particularly worth noting.
Good Luck in the Contest!

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from TELLER OF TALES

Excellent

No other touching piece as this one by the author, his words penetrate even the saddest of souls, its wonderfully written, you can feel the words of the author as you go through it's words, I enjoyed reading it very much......Merry Christmas......From The Teller of tales.....

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Afraid and crushed by doubt, on stony ground,
neglected souls that faced the dark forlorn,
can celebrate with joy a peace profound:
There shines a golden dawn - the Son is born.

Wonderful write with the best of words to be found. Great quatrains here.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

reply by Gungalo on 25-Dec-2013

Smile.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This lovely, uplifting spiritual poem vividly conveys the theme that only Jesus offers peace and assurance in this world. "The sun is borne" . . . "The Son is born"--beautiful!

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Janice, Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from mickbey

Excellent

A nice job of meeting the requirements of the form and creating rewards for the reader, the poem has a spiritual and philosophical touch that creates an atmosphere, seems warm although very deep, nice work, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a good pantoum entry for the contest. next to last line - joy a peace - should it be joy and peace? Merry Christmas;)
~Teresa~

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from Matoshka

Excellent

Praise God, for such a powerful message in this form. It is a hard form for me, but you have made it graceful and tells a story of the souls that were lost and neglected, finding hope and love in the Son of God. I truly loved it. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Merry Christmas

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

reply by Matoshka on 26-Dec-2013

So welcome and wonderful to read. Blessings

Comment from Siouxsun

Excellent

I like the way the first line announces both the beginning of the poem and the beginning of a new day. You picked the perfect imagery to go with. I don't really know everything there is to know about this type of poem. You did well with the abcb rhyme scheme. Some of the punctuation changed with a few of the lines, and the first and last line are supposed to be the same. I don't know if or how exact it needs to be but I think it worked well.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.

Comment from ELumpkins

Excellent

A very pleasing piece. It has a smooth flow from stanza to stanza whicvery expreh makes it a very easy read. The poem is
very expresive and a joy to read. Excellent work

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013

Thanks for the kind words.