The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Destiny's Cradle"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
29 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
Along the river banks with its serene beauty and nature, we can feel so much peace.
As we moved along this challenging and peaceful stream, there is a spiritual calling as we remember the time of our Saviour who came to atone for ous sins.
In Him we find the feeligns and the hopes for mankind. Travelling further down, within the deep waters, we can see life at its best when we learn to care and share more with others.
Great write and well done!
Cheeerio, hugs and luv, bro Ritchie, :))
Have a great Christmas and stay safe over the mad rush. Smiles.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Along the river banks with its serene beauty and nature, we can feel so much peace.
As we moved along this challenging and peaceful stream, there is a spiritual calling as we remember the time of our Saviour who came to atone for ous sins.
In Him we find the feeligns and the hopes for mankind. Travelling further down, within the deep waters, we can see life at its best when we learn to care and share more with others.
Great write and well done!
Cheeerio, hugs and luv, bro Ritchie, :))
Have a great Christmas and stay safe over the mad rush. Smiles.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2013
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Just had to say hello and thank you for this inspiring review. Loved it. I can always count on you to get the gist of the write. Smile, Love you, Carolyn
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This is a very inspiring write and a time for us to ponder and contemplate especially during the season of Christmas. Smiles.
Cheerio, luv and hugs, Ritchie. :))
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smiling at you from AZ.. love, Carolyn
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Hi Carolyn,
It's the holiday season and everyone is having a busy and great time, so all of us are late, smiles.
Today will be the last day here in Asia, now 12 pm on 31st Dec 2013. As we leave behind 2013, may our hearts be filled with renewed hope for the comking new year. We have to make it better somehow and life will be a good journey ahead.
Happy new year 2014 to you and your family.
Best wishes, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Merriweather
Hi Carolyn, A fine poem. There is a spirit embodied in your poem that is absolutely healing to the reader. There is a calm acceptance of the ups and downs of our life journey with the promise of a safe journey and reward at the end. I like your analogy of the river trip with our life journey. For those who worry about death and perhaps think there is a nothingness on the other side, you offer hope and a witness that there is a God, and a life hereafter. You have fulfilled your mission as a poet, to help others find their way. Your words flow like the river you describe. Beautiful imagery.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Hi Carolyn, A fine poem. There is a spirit embodied in your poem that is absolutely healing to the reader. There is a calm acceptance of the ups and downs of our life journey with the promise of a safe journey and reward at the end. I like your analogy of the river trip with our life journey. For those who worry about death and perhaps think there is a nothingness on the other side, you offer hope and a witness that there is a God, and a life hereafter. You have fulfilled your mission as a poet, to help others find their way. Your words flow like the river you describe. Beautiful imagery.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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I appreciate your kind thoughts and wonderful review, and I'm delighted you enjoyed Destiny 's Cradle. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Brocha1
I like the way you have carried the metaphor all the way through this spiritual poem. I especially liked the first verse. It was a wonderful opening to the poem."Destiny's cradle" is a powerful metaphor. I feel that perhaps it could have been even better had you used uniform meter throughout. I found it a little stilted which was a shame.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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I like the way you have carried the metaphor all the way through this spiritual poem. I especially liked the first verse. It was a wonderful opening to the poem."Destiny's cradle" is a powerful metaphor. I feel that perhaps it could have been even better had you used uniform meter throughout. I found it a little stilted which was a shame.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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I'm sorry the poem was difficult for you to read but I am happy you liked the general meaning, Thank you for taking the time to comment. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Azra Rahman Manzer
The rhythm is continuous and helps the poem to flow freely.The nature has been beautifully combined with the simple meanings of life.A simple yet naturally beautiful piece of work.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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The rhythm is continuous and helps the poem to flow freely.The nature has been beautifully combined with the simple meanings of life.A simple yet naturally beautiful piece of work.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013
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Most of my work is rather simple, I am glad you liked it. :-) Carolyn
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I am glad you wrote it! :)
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi Carolyn
This is a beautiful writing and I like it very much. Good language and style and message, to true.
Will be away for a while. To tunisia. May not from me
Keep well.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Hi Carolyn
This is a beautiful writing and I like it very much. Good language and style and message, to true.
Will be away for a while. To tunisia. May not from me
Keep well.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Dear Benny, thank you so much for the wonderful review. Have a great and safe trip to Tunisia, we are leaving for Phoenix, AZ tomorrow, through the end of year. I'll miss you, :-) Carolyn
Comment from adewpearl
You took a lovely photo :-)
solid use of rhyming couplets
nice touches of alliteration
such as River rushes, twist and turn
banks embraces - banks embrace
His heart's delight - add apostrophe for possessive
river's bank - add apostrophe
at it's best - drop the apostrophe
gorgeous descriptive detail
wonderful flow when read aloud
a thoughtful message of appreciation in this poem of faith
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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You took a lovely photo :-)
solid use of rhyming couplets
nice touches of alliteration
such as River rushes, twist and turn
banks embraces - banks embrace
His heart's delight - add apostrophe for possessive
river's bank - add apostrophe
at it's best - drop the apostrophe
gorgeous descriptive detail
wonderful flow when read aloud
a thoughtful message of appreciation in this poem of faith
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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What a wonderful review and edit help you have given me on this one. I appreciate you Brooke, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written Carolyn it is original and reads so well taking the reader on the journey of a lifetime we enjoyed well done regards Jill and Erick
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Yes this is well written Carolyn it is original and reads so well taking the reader on the journey of a lifetime we enjoyed well done regards Jill and Erick
Comment Written 15-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the great review, Jill and Erick, hope you two are doing well. :-) Carolyn
Comment from tbacha58
For the rivers bank on either side
of sparkling waters deep and wide
Portray a life-scene at it's best
Oh faithful one, you've earned your rest
Hi Carolyn, I do congratulate you for this outstanding poem and view, you rhyming turns the poem in a sweet melody, the subject transforms into words of doctrine. So well done. Bless you Happy Holidays. Terry
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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For the rivers bank on either side
of sparkling waters deep and wide
Portray a life-scene at it's best
Oh faithful one, you've earned your rest
Hi Carolyn, I do congratulate you for this outstanding poem and view, you rhyming turns the poem in a sweet melody, the subject transforms into words of doctrine. So well done. Bless you Happy Holidays. Terry
Comment Written 15-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Happy Holidays to you Terry, I am delighted you enjoyed Destiny's Cradle. :-) Carolyn
Comment from jmdg1954
Life takes us on a roller coaster at times. The rushing waters of daily trials to live life to its fullest and simply to live life, with our families safety.
This was an excellent piece of writing. Your rhyming pattern was spot on and easy to read.
Great photo depicting your story...
John
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Life takes us on a roller coaster at times. The rushing waters of daily trials to live life to its fullest and simply to live life, with our families safety.
This was an excellent piece of writing. Your rhyming pattern was spot on and easy to read.
Great photo depicting your story...
John
Comment Written 15-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Thanks John, I have been thinking about you. Two jobs is a lot to handle and still write and review as much as you do. Take care, I admire your 'spunk'. :-) Carolyn
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I write and review in between jobs when I can. Hopefully in 6-7 years I can retire. Sooner if I can just be the next Jeffrey Archer!!! Haha.
Comment from angelface2
What a beautiful poem this is, Carolyn. I so enjoyed reading it and thinking about my own life. I especially like the last stanza. Your rhyming and rhythm is great, making this an easy read, that flows along just like that river. Nicely done. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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What a beautiful poem this is, Carolyn. I so enjoyed reading it and thinking about my own life. I especially like the last stanza. Your rhyming and rhythm is great, making this an easy read, that flows along just like that river. Nicely done. Miss Sally
Comment Written 14-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thanks so very much for this beautiful review. I am happy you related to the poem. :-) Carolyn
