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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Minor Myths"
Poems written using the pantoum form

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Comment from Glasstruth
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Myth is so powerful that it eventually becomes a fact. Sort of a security blanket for fear. Believing vs the unknown usually wins out over reason. Very thought provoking. Written well under the restrictions you had as in a pantoum. Very enjoyable! Les

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for your kind review and comments Les. Much appreciated!
Comment from amada
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I'm not acquainted with the work of Joseph Campbell, but it must be very good to serve as an inspiration to this great Pantoum. The line repetition gives it that special touch.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for your kind review and comments Amada. Much appreciated!
Comment from boxergirl
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This is a good pantoum poem that you
have created for the contest. I also like
the message that we are blind a lot of
time of God's purpose and try to figure
it out on our own which our minds are
incapable of doing. BG

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for your kind review and comments BG. Much appreciated!
Comment from Nuad1
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I liked this work; you certainly could not be uneducated or unfamiliar with Author Campbell's words in order to comprehend your take on it. I like him, too; now I like your work as well. It always amazes me when an author is inspired to write WELL because of another author's work: this is called paying it forward in the most creative of ways.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for your very kind review and comments Nuad1. Much appreciated! I like your idea of paying forward the writing of another author. In a sense that is what keeps the classics alive.
Comment from mountainwriter49
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Good Evening, Tony

The pantoum is not an easy poetic form to master, but you have done so beautifully. The repeating lines seem to take on a slightly different connotation with each stanza, and more importantly, they feel natural as the read of the poem progresses. The message of your poem is superb.

Well done, my friend. Thanks for sharing.
Ray

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for your very kind review and comments Ray. Much appreciated!
Comment from Smoothiecool
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great to have someone that inspires ones writing
you have entered a Pantoum good luck in the contest
you have the right repetitive lines even though you broke it up out of stanzas (I prefer to stay with the stanza)
as poems follow in context any way
you take the reader through the myths and thoughts of ones mind your words allow the reader to see and feel this
flows well easy read
cheers SC

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for taking the time and trouble to review my poem, SC. Very much appreciated. Thank you, too, for your thoughts about the presentation. I am still in two minds about that. Although I think it makes the meaning a bit clearer, you are probably right that it would be better presented in quatrains.
reply by Smoothiecool on 09-Dec-2013
    your most welcome
    only my thoughts
    cheers SC
Comment from elchupakabra
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I like this piece. I'm not a religious person by any means, but I thought that your piece here was well constructed within the guidelines of the contest requirements. Really excellent work overall on this piece, best of luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for taking the time and trouble to review my poem, Elchupakabra. Very much appreciated.
Comment from ericawrites
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This is an excellent quatrain poem,
very well constructed, cleverly
thought out.

The quatrain is a difficult form to
create, but you have nailed it here.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for taking the time and trouble to review my poem, Erica. Very much appreciated.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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"We now believe with simple faith These minor myths that fill our mind." These last two lines certainly do sum up the current state of affairs nicely. I think you executed the contest requirements brilliantly and have a strong contender here. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for taking the time and trouble to review my poem, Mystic Angel. Very much appreciated.
Comment from ronnie k
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A dazzling placement of words that that without my full understanding took me on a wonderful poetic read, in reviewing I was captured by the mystery of meaning

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
    Many thanks for taking the time and trouble to review my poem, Ronnie. Very much appreciated as is your generous six-star rating!