Corky Cooters
haiku15 total reviews
Comment from suep
This is a great 5-7-5. Nice alliteration. Fun and entertaining read. Wonderful image goes perfectly with your words. Love 'Corky Cooters' and 'turtle tots'. Great work! :)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
This is a great 5-7-5. Nice alliteration. Fun and entertaining read. Wonderful image goes perfectly with your words. Love 'Corky Cooters' and 'turtle tots'. Great work! :)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Hi Sue, Please accept my apologies for a delayed reply. A special thank you for dusting this one off along with utmost appreciation for your most meaningful comments and positive rating. All of the best to you! Take Care, JR
Comment from livelylinda
Author: very cute, made me chuckle. You have written a fresh, creative piece that is so noticeable amongst the norm. You are a contender for the contest. Good luck with it. livelylinda
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
Author: very cute, made me chuckle. You have written a fresh, creative piece that is so noticeable amongst the norm. You are a contender for the contest. Good luck with it. livelylinda
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi Linda, I'm delighted that you found the poem enjoyable. My sincere appreciation for your charming comments and positive rating. Take care and blessed be :)
Comment from Smoothiecool
your picture complements your writing
you have entered a 5-7-5 Witty Animal contest good luck
you have all the right components for this contest
the three lines
the first and third lines have the correct syllable count
also the second line the seven syllable count
the pun is good
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
your picture complements your writing
you have entered a 5-7-5 Witty Animal contest good luck
you have all the right components for this contest
the three lines
the first and third lines have the correct syllable count
also the second line the seven syllable count
the pun is good
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi Smoothiecool, My utmost gratitude for your cordial comments and positive rating. I'm delighted that you found the poem enjoyable. Happy Holidays!
Comment from FrannyG
I like this one. It's a lovely picture and a perfectly written 5-7-5. Great alliteration in the first line and again in the second. It's a gentle appealing piece. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
I like this one. It's a lovely picture and a perfectly written 5-7-5. Great alliteration in the first line and again in the second. It's a gentle appealing piece. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi FrannyG, I'm delighted that you found the poem enjoyable. My sincere appreciation for your charming comments and positive rating. Happy Holidays!
Comment from Sueellen11
Well done,, excellent,, love turtles,,nice picture to accompany your poem,, your count is correct and good entry into the contest,,very nicely done,,good luck,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
Well done,, excellent,, love turtles,,nice picture to accompany your poem,, your count is correct and good entry into the contest,,very nicely done,,good luck,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi Sueellen, I'm delighted that you found the poem enjoyable and I greatly appreciate your courteous comments and generous rating. Happy Holidays!
Comment from tfawcus
Sweet picture and poem to go with it. I like the play on words with your 'life preserving shells'. Good luck with the contest. You have a good entry here!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
Sweet picture and poem to go with it. I like the play on words with your 'life preserving shells'. Good luck with the contest. You have a good entry here!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi tfawcus, I'm delighted that you found the poem enjoyable and I greatly appreciate your obliging comments and generous rating. Happy Holidays!
Comment from AnonymousWisdom
Perfect 5-7-5 syllable count.
I liked the simile of buoyant cork and the image it created.
Good alliteration in the first line.
Even though this was a good poem, it wasn't humorous, which sadly was one of the contest guidelines. :(
Still, I enjoyed it and I wish you the best in the contest :)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
Perfect 5-7-5 syllable count.
I liked the simile of buoyant cork and the image it created.
Good alliteration in the first line.
Even though this was a good poem, it wasn't humorous, which sadly was one of the contest guidelines. :(
Still, I enjoyed it and I wish you the best in the contest :)
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi AnonymousWisdom, Thank you so much for your obliging comments and positive rating. I've been using pre-existing verse during an intermittent absence, stopping in occasionally to submit where applicable and hopefully will be returning soon. I agree with you. This entry is focused more on word play and fun alliteration, having a cutesy effect but is not a humorous play on words. Nevertheless, I don't regret the decision and am delighted that you enjoyed the read. Happy Holidays
Comment from MarjorieAnne
This sweet poem describes the photo cleverly with pleasing alliteration and assonance. I would add an S to cork and hyphenate life-preserving. Also capitalize tiny and life. A bit of humor or a stronger pun would help since bob, buoyant and cork are close in meaning, as are tiny and tots.
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
This sweet poem describes the photo cleverly with pleasing alliteration and assonance. I would add an S to cork and hyphenate life-preserving. Also capitalize tiny and life. A bit of humor or a stronger pun would help since bob, buoyant and cork are close in meaning, as are tiny and tots.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi MarjorieAnne, Thank you so very much for your cordial comments and positive rating. There is no capitalization in nature haiku. I beg to differ regarding closely related word choices. The definitions are dissimilar, while each word helps to create a more detailed visual. Happy Holidays
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You're welcome
Comment from l.raven
Oh How cute they are...it funny how nature works...I love the picture and the poem is perfect...this is going to be a hard contest...a lot of great writes...
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
Oh How cute they are...it funny how nature works...I love the picture and the poem is perfect...this is going to be a hard contest...a lot of great writes...
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi l.raven, There is a rush of strong competition and my best wishes go out to all of the entrants. I'm delighted that you found the poem enjoyable and I greatly appreciate your obliging comments and generous rating. Happy holidays!
Comment from RYME4U
Well done and well presented. They do look like bobbing corks floating. Very good analogy!Th poem is well written and keeps to the rules of the contest
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
Well done and well presented. They do look like bobbing corks floating. Very good analogy!Th poem is well written and keeps to the rules of the contest
Comment Written 29-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
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Hi RYME4U, Thank you very much for your courteous comments and generous rating. Happy Holidays!