Bungy Spider
Arachnid adrenalin junkie21 total reviews
Comment from jgirlie152
This is a wonderfully amusing poem of the spider (arachnid).
You have a great imagination and your abab is excellent. If I can laugh out loud at such a poem, you know it is done very well. Thanks for the lol.
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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This is a wonderfully amusing poem of the spider (arachnid).
You have a great imagination and your abab is excellent. If I can laugh out loud at such a poem, you know it is done very well. Thanks for the lol.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Joan. You are right, the laugh is my best review. Thanks for all the stars.
Steve
Comment from Debbie7
I like Bungy spider. It's very clever and funny. Lots of really good alliteration. I found it easy to read even with the quickening pace you set. I thought it was cool you noticed the web on your car and wrote about it.
Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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I like Bungy spider. It's very clever and funny. Lots of really good alliteration. I found it easy to read even with the quickening pace you set. I thought it was cool you noticed the web on your car and wrote about it.
Debbie
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Debbie, thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Yoo-nat Hamal
this poem is a great one but still being a reader i felt something missing in this poem...though the poem is able to sketch out the feelings of a spider in a poetry form, the words used seem unable to express their original feeling.so, i would love to have some more poems from you with simple but more effective words...in summary i loved this poem and wishing for some more works from the poet.
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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this poem is a great one but still being a reader i felt something missing in this poem...though the poem is able to sketch out the feelings of a spider in a poetry form, the words used seem unable to express their original feeling.so, i would love to have some more poems from you with simple but more effective words...in summary i loved this poem and wishing for some more works from the poet.
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks for reviewing and welcome to FanStory.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
Hmmm. I happy the web was still relatively in tact. But I see no reference to Bungy-Spider himself (or herself) in your notes. Merely an oversight, no doubt.
Has anyone ever counted AJ Hackett's legs?
Very cute, Steve.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Hmmm. I happy the web was still relatively in tact. But I see no reference to Bungy-Spider himself (or herself) in your notes. Merely an oversight, no doubt.
Has anyone ever counted AJ Hackett's legs?
Very cute, Steve.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Well, the web was fixed by next morning - but today, I washed the car! Wouldn't put it past the little critter to be a swimmer as well. :o)
Steve
Comment from krys123
What a marvelous great concept in topic and a marvelous story to boot. The way you've written your poem it was easy to assess that inspired her was riding around but I thought, not in a cardboard in a truck. An old tattered truck. Very well penned an easy to read your poems rhymes were done very well in neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. Thank you for sharing this with everyone. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
PS: Nice job. Kiwi
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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What a marvelous great concept in topic and a marvelous story to boot. The way you've written your poem it was easy to assess that inspired her was riding around but I thought, not in a cardboard in a truck. An old tattered truck. Very well penned an easy to read your poems rhymes were done very well in neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. Thank you for sharing this with everyone. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
PS: Nice job. Kiwi
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Krys. Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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You are so welcome
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Outstanding, Steve! I loved being along for the ride. Excellent word choices and a rhythm that makes me sway around corners. Love it. :) nancy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Outstanding, Steve! I loved being along for the ride. Excellent word choices and a rhythm that makes me sway around corners. Love it. :) nancy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Nancy, thanks for the kind words and all the stars.
Steve
Comment from SaluteDobby
This was wonderful-true to your particular style of writing! :) My fav line" I'm in strife with the wife cos the web needs repairs ..LOL. this one made me smile, as I pictured an angry arachnid (complete with an apron and a rolling pin in her many feet) glaring at her errant husband. :)
Not surpirised that the web retained its structure despite the long ride- webs are apparently stronger than steel...
Have a great day! :)
Regards,
Namratha
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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This was wonderful-true to your particular style of writing! :) My fav line" I'm in strife with the wife cos the web needs repairs ..LOL. this one made me smile, as I pictured an angry arachnid (complete with an apron and a rolling pin in her many feet) glaring at her errant husband. :)
Not surpirised that the web retained its structure despite the long ride- webs are apparently stronger than steel...
Have a great day! :)
Regards,
Namratha
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Namratha - loved the image you conjure up of the angry spider housewife - multiple rolling pins! :o)
Yes, apparently spider silk is such a valuable resource that they have genetically modified goats to produce the protein for it in their milk. Seems spiders are a tad difficult to farm! now that is really bizarre science!
Steve
Comment from Tessa Kay
I didn't know that about the bungee sport. Thanks for sharing this interesting fact. Spider webs are amazing. Did you know, that a spider thread is 1/100 the size of a human hair, flexible enough to stretch 30% before breaking and 2-3 times the strength of high quality steel? In fact, it's ten times stronger than Kevlar, used for bulletproof vests.
It's a marvel of creation and well deserving of a beautiful poem.
:) Tessa
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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I didn't know that about the bungee sport. Thanks for sharing this interesting fact. Spider webs are amazing. Did you know, that a spider thread is 1/100 the size of a human hair, flexible enough to stretch 30% before breaking and 2-3 times the strength of high quality steel? In fact, it's ten times stronger than Kevlar, used for bulletproof vests.
It's a marvel of creation and well deserving of a beautiful poem.
:) Tessa
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks, TK
Yes I did know about the properties of webs.
Apparently spider silk is such a valuable resource that they have genetically modified goats to produce the protein for it in their milk. Seems spiders are a tad difficult to farm! now that is really bizarre science!
Steve
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Isn't it just!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Steve, this is really fun and clever. You are so imaginative...don't know how you come up with these flights of fancy, but it's a hit!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Steve, this is really fun and clever. You are so imaginative...don't know how you come up with these flights of fancy, but it's a hit!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Phyllis.
In this case, just looking around me - I'm not usually that observant.
Steve
Comment from clbritch
I really like your poem. It is fun and descriptive. It reads really well will good rhyme. I love your picture choice as it fits perfectly with your poem. When I see a spider and web attached to my car, I have to admit, I hope he will fly off. Funny how they never seem to though. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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I really like your poem. It is fun and descriptive. It reads really well will good rhyme. I love your picture choice as it fits perfectly with your poem. When I see a spider and web attached to my car, I have to admit, I hope he will fly off. Funny how they never seem to though. Nice job.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
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Thank you.
I washed the car yesterday - let's see if the little daredevil knows how to hold his breath.... :o)
Steve
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your welcome
