Bungy Spider
Arachnid adrenalin junkie21 total reviews
Comment from xotic flotsam
Yours is much happier than my "Seven Legged Tragedy". Now I know what they're thinking while speeding along in the wind. Wouldn't that be cool, being self-equipped with a personal bungy deployment system? I always thought they climbed so well because they had eight chalk bags and free rope. Hackett was a genius like Jeb Corliss is to BASE jumping. A well rhymed perfectly rhythmic romp. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
  |
Yours is much happier than my "Seven Legged Tragedy". Now I know what they're thinking while speeding along in the wind. Wouldn't that be cool, being self-equipped with a personal bungy deployment system? I always thought they climbed so well because they had eight chalk bags and free rope. Hackett was a genius like Jeb Corliss is to BASE jumping. A well rhymed perfectly rhythmic romp. Nicely done.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
-
Thanks for the warm review and the six stars.
Alas for Bungy Spider, the car had to be washed eventually! :o)
Steve
Comment from Gladness
Fun ride! I get spider webs on my car side mirror too. Those little spidies just don't give up.
Goodness! 25 years for bungy jumping, wow. My husband wanted to try that when it came out, but I convinced him I liked his face the way it was, ha ha.
Thanks for the fun read, my friend,
Anita
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
 |
Fun ride! I get spider webs on my car side mirror too. Those little spidies just don't give up.
Goodness! 25 years for bungy jumping, wow. My husband wanted to try that when it came out, but I convinced him I liked his face the way it was, ha ha.
Thanks for the fun read, my friend,
Anita
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013
-
Thanks, Anita
You're never too old to try new things - maybe the two of you could try a tandem jump....
Steve
Comment from G L Bertin
Fantastic fun...
I love the "within the line" rhymes of all the third lines, it adds even more to the silliness throughout...
Never thought of a spider flying around as a bungee jumper, but the analogy is perfect...
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2013
|
Fantastic fun...
I love the "within the line" rhymes of all the third lines, it adds even more to the silliness throughout...
Never thought of a spider flying around as a bungee jumper, but the analogy is perfect...
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2013
-
And yes, this one is a slightly different kettle of fish - these fanciful rhyme and meter pieces come much easier to me than the more serious poems like Redemption.
Steve
Comment from mfowler
Your poem is as amusing as it is well written. The rhyme, rhythm, and verse structure allow an easy flowing read, while features such as the questions, alliteration, and great word choice add up to a great read.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
|
Your poem is as amusing as it is well written. The rhyme, rhythm, and verse structure allow an easy flowing read, while features such as the questions, alliteration, and great word choice add up to a great read.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
-
Thank you!
Washed the car yesterday, let's see how the little daredevil survives that....
Steve
Comment from strandregs
Who put the devil in devil-may-care?
Those who don't care how many reviews they get.
Who put the hang in hang-glider?
Those who let it glide when they get three stars . Say hang it. And bounce back.
Can you hack it? Yes said Hackett.
This would have given a bounce to the abab contest.
Exhilerating write mate .Z.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
|
Who put the devil in devil-may-care?
Those who don't care how many reviews they get.
Who put the hang in hang-glider?
Those who let it glide when they get three stars . Say hang it. And bounce back.
Can you hack it? Yes said Hackett.
This would have given a bounce to the abab contest.
Exhilerating write mate .Z.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
-
Ha! But I won that contest anyway....
Thanks for the fun review.
Steve
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Steve,
Isn't it funny what can inspire a great write?! In this case, a spider and it's nice web.
Hehehehe ... I thought this was terrific write. So very creative and fun. I laughed out loud. Alliterations galore with all of the fabulous 'f' words, and with "surfing so spunky". It started out great right from the get go, and kept on going all the way through. Highly entertaining. This one should be entered into some kind of a contest.
Great, great job!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
|
Steve,
Isn't it funny what can inspire a great write?! In this case, a spider and it's nice web.
Hehehehe ... I thought this was terrific write. So very creative and fun. I laughed out loud. Alliterations galore with all of the fabulous 'f' words, and with "surfing so spunky". It started out great right from the get go, and kept on going all the way through. Highly entertaining. This one should be entered into some kind of a contest.
Great, great job!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
-
Thanks, Connie - yes, I had a bit of fun with this.
He came to town again yesterday, but then I washed the car... :o(
Steve
-
He might be back tomorrow! hehehe
Comment from KG Writes
kiwisteveh I guess it was an "Arachnid adrenalin junkie". Fun story. Well done. Cute illustration to compliment your piece. Enjoyable read. KG Writes
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
|
kiwisteveh I guess it was an "Arachnid adrenalin junkie". Fun story. Well done. Cute illustration to compliment your piece. Enjoyable read. KG Writes
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
-
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
-
kiwisteveh You are most welcome. Enjoy your Tuesday. KG Writes
Comment from nancyjam
Wow Steve this deserves a six from me for the entertainment
value alone. But is is also so well crafted with great rhyme, word-play
fun images and excellent meter.
I loved "world -is-my=Web Bungy Spider" So clever.
Thanks for making me laugh this morning. Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
|
Wow Steve this deserves a six from me for the entertainment
value alone. But is is also so well crafted with great rhyme, word-play
fun images and excellent meter.
I loved "world -is-my=Web Bungy Spider" So clever.
Thanks for making me laugh this morning. Nancy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
-
Thanks, nancy - the laugh is my finest review, but thanks for all the stars as well.
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow! Your imagination was in overdrive Steve. I an not an adrenalin junkie,far from it but I could imagine that little spider hanging on for dear life around the corners. LOL Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
|
Wow! Your imagination was in overdrive Steve. I an not an adrenalin junkie,far from it but I could imagine that little spider hanging on for dear life around the corners. LOL Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
-
Thanks, Nancy.
Alas, I had to wash the car yesterday.... :o(
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ha, poor little spider, it's never a good thing to be in trouble with the wife, but especially if you happen to be a spider. We all know, all too well, what frequently happens to male spiders after mating with the female of the species. They get their heads ripped off then eaten...
Excellent poem, both in rhyme and meter. The words you've chosen flowed quite smoothly, Steve, making for a very enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
|
Ha, poor little spider, it's never a good thing to be in trouble with the wife, but especially if you happen to be a spider. We all know, all too well, what frequently happens to male spiders after mating with the female of the species. They get their heads ripped off then eaten...
Excellent poem, both in rhyme and meter. The words you've chosen flowed quite smoothly, Steve, making for a very enjoyable read!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013
-
Thanks, Dean
I think, all I was imagining was her standing there with multiple rolling pins - your scenario is way too NASTY for this bit of fun.
Steve
-
Hah, yeah...probably.
