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Love Poem Poetry Contest28 total reviews
Comment from Emeka13
A sudden rise in a crescendo. Then boom, the anti-climax and .no one remembers'. It comes to those who are lucky if that's any consolation. By the way, Dad should not be any where near the porch. Neighbours? It is anti-social behaviour round where I live. Remain blessed. Emeka
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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A sudden rise in a crescendo. Then boom, the anti-climax and .no one remembers'. It comes to those who are lucky if that's any consolation. By the way, Dad should not be any where near the porch. Neighbours? It is anti-social behaviour round where I live. Remain blessed. Emeka
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Dad probably had his ear pressed to the door! Neighbours need to get a life of their own!
Thanks for the fun review.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent use of abab rhyming
I love the imagery of love and passion so hot that it threatens to burn down the porch LOL
Great reactions to the carrying on by dad and the neighbors
fun progression to the stage in life when kids interrupt the hanky panky
and the final stage of life - that has me laughing my head off
Really great use of imagery throughout in this wonderfully upbeat and warmly funny look at love through the stages of life :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Excellent use of abab rhyming
I love the imagery of love and passion so hot that it threatens to burn down the porch LOL
Great reactions to the carrying on by dad and the neighbors
fun progression to the stage in life when kids interrupt the hanky panky
and the final stage of life - that has me laughing my head off
Really great use of imagery throughout in this wonderfully upbeat and warmly funny look at love through the stages of life :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Brooke - it's the next stage we should really be worried about!
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
You've entered the contest with wit and style
as you trace your love life through the years.
Humorous lines, strong rhyme and excellent meter.
Good luck in the contest. Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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You've entered the contest with wit and style
as you trace your love life through the years.
Humorous lines, strong rhyme and excellent meter.
Good luck in the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Nancy!
Steve
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Not being a "love poetry" person, I really enjoyed your summary of my love life. I suspect I'm not alone. Well done, sir. Made me laugh. :) nancy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Not being a "love poetry" person, I really enjoyed your summary of my love life. I suspect I'm not alone. Well done, sir. Made me laugh. :) nancy
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Nancy
I started off pretending I could write love poetry, but then reality took over!
Steve
Comment from brentman99
A nice poem that is so true! You have to steal moments when you are young and then when you are older and have the time, nothing but embers. I enjoyed your poem and the picture fits quite well. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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A nice poem that is so true! You have to steal moments when you are young and then when you are older and have the time, nothing but embers. I enjoyed your poem and the picture fits quite well. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, brent.
Steve
Comment from Debra White
Oi, Steve!! I'm with you all the way up to stanza 3 at least lol! I hope by the time I get to stanza 4's stage of life, Shaun and I remember!
I loved this poem, it's warm and witty and very appealing. The format of the first line in each stanza is great, I enjoyed the uniformity. Perfect rhyme and meter as always and the presentation works really nicely.
I wish you well in the contest :) Kindest regards, Debra
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Oi, Steve!! I'm with you all the way up to stanza 3 at least lol! I hope by the time I get to stanza 4's stage of life, Shaun and I remember!
I loved this poem, it's warm and witty and very appealing. The format of the first line in each stanza is great, I enjoyed the uniformity. Perfect rhyme and meter as always and the presentation works really nicely.
I wish you well in the contest :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Debra
I am pretty sure this won't feature in the top few for this contest, but I was quite happy with it. Glad you spotted my attempts at uniformity in the stanzas. I did want to have someone crying, "Oi!" in each stanza but couldn't keep it going....
Steve
Comment from Pili Pubul
Regardless of your last stanza, you seem to remember very well lol.
This is such a delightful poem not difficult to relate for those of us that had gone trough those stages. Love the style , great imagery and sense of humor. Good luck in the contest , is terrific. Pili
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Regardless of your last stanza, you seem to remember very well lol.
This is such a delightful poem not difficult to relate for those of us that had gone trough those stages. Love the style , great imagery and sense of humor. Good luck in the contest , is terrific. Pili
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Well they say it's like riding a bicycle - you never really forget - though I may forget where the bedroom is....
Thanks, Pili!
Steve
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Lol.. Hope not.. You very welcome Steve. Big smile. Pili
Comment from poetbear
Enjoyed everything except the last line because I disagree.
I can't write or speak for you but I am married 33 years and I do remember.
Those are our gifts and I treasure every single one of them and hold them dear.
It is a wonderful and powerful write.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Enjoyed everything except the last line because I disagree.
I can't write or speak for you but I am married 33 years and I do remember.
Those are our gifts and I treasure every single one of them and hold them dear.
It is a wonderful and powerful write.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Ah, you see you are still in stage 3 while I have been married seven more years than you and have clearly progressed to stage 4 - what were we talking about again?
Steve
Comment from krys123
A very well written piece and easy to read also. I found it quite amusing at the end of your poem which you state that now they had the time in their lives to do some woopee but they just can't remember how. The poem throughout was written very well. Your double rhyming quatrains were grinding very well in neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. Rhythm of the poem flowed very well which made it easy to read and understand. Thank you for sharing this with everyone. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
PS: Thank you for making me laugh
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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A very well written piece and easy to read also. I found it quite amusing at the end of your poem which you state that now they had the time in their lives to do some woopee but they just can't remember how. The poem throughout was written very well. Your double rhyming quatrains were grinding very well in neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. Rhythm of the poem flowed very well which made it easy to read and understand. Thank you for sharing this with everyone. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
PS: Thank you for making me laugh
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, krys. I am always happy to hear that one of my poems has made someone laugh.
Steve
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You are so very welcome Steve. In your poem captured a feeling that was inside me
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Steve,
Ain't it the bitter truth. Just when one finds out what it's all about, it is too late to put into practice. Excellent write, my friend. Great rhyme and metre an, Lord knows, a moving message.
Reg
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Dear Steve,
Ain't it the bitter truth. Just when one finds out what it's all about, it is too late to put into practice. Excellent write, my friend. Great rhyme and metre an, Lord knows, a moving message.
Reg
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Reg - probably a message that applies to a few othr things in life too....
Steve
