The Never Starting Story
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "The Greatest: Part 1"A collection of things that fit nowhere else.
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Comment from Spitfire
I think you need to break your posts up. This could be two short ones. For me, the opening was tedious. I didn't get interested until you started on Muhammed Ali's story. I love that you followed it with a satiric poem too. Too much use of There were or was or just plain was. I get the feeling this is a first draft with the thoughts tumbling out with no attempt at revisison. Sorry, Mikey, but I have to be honest. A bit of rambling here ( same as this review) LOL
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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I think you need to break your posts up. This could be two short ones. For me, the opening was tedious. I didn't get interested until you started on Muhammed Ali's story. I love that you followed it with a satiric poem too. Too much use of There were or was or just plain was. I get the feeling this is a first draft with the thoughts tumbling out with no attempt at revisison. Sorry, Mikey, but I have to be honest. A bit of rambling here ( same as this review) LOL
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Yes. The whole opening is unnecessary now that you mention it. You are correct about first draft too. I am falling victim to my own hype. hahaha. There really is no reason I have to post a chapter every night. I just got into the habit of seeing it on the front page and people asking what the next chapter is about etc. Great points. Thank you. mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
excellent piece mikey these words draw out a challange smiling I do realize you have superior skills But, I must warn you, you will not have a chanceIt is not possible to defeat me
I never lose, I can't even tell you why ha ha really very enjoyable read mikey beautifully crafted
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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excellent piece mikey these words draw out a challange smiling I do realize you have superior skills But, I must warn you, you will not have a chanceIt is not possible to defeat me
I never lose, I can't even tell you why ha ha really very enjoyable read mikey beautifully crafted
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Oh no!! I think this is how the universe ends! mikey
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ha ha goodness gracious mikey sounded better a challange smiling
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh yes the fight of all times. And he was still the greatest even when he fought the health problem that took his dignity. He was still a fighter.
Diddley, spiddley spit? Okay
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Oh yes the fight of all times. And he was still the greatest even when he fought the health problem that took his dignity. He was still a fighter.
Diddley, spiddley spit? Okay
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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My idol. The only one really. I am not a big follower. But, this man, I take my hat off to. mikey
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, I remember watching Muhammad Ali fight...It was a true boxer...he had a skill...and he did it well...Michael this writes are truly so great...you put so much detail into them...I love them...so very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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HI Michael, I remember watching Muhammad Ali fight...It was a true boxer...he had a skill...and he did it well...Michael this writes are truly so great...you put so much detail into them...I love them...so very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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I had to really hold back. I could write forever about him. It is all so clear to me. This is all off the top of my head. I wonder why I can't remember last week? ha! You are so encouraging. Glad you are enjoying. mikey
Comment from ravenblack
Ali was a true great. Sure, he had a big mouth, but he was a showman. And boy, did they hate him when he changed his name, when he spoke up about Viet Man, stuck to his convictions even though it nearly cost him his career. And now with Parkinson's, does he hide himself away? No. The man has guts and truly is one of the greatest sports icons.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Ali was a true great. Sure, he had a big mouth, but he was a showman. And boy, did they hate him when he changed his name, when he spoke up about Viet Man, stuck to his convictions even though it nearly cost him his career. And now with Parkinson's, does he hide himself away? No. The man has guts and truly is one of the greatest sports icons.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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My one idol, I must admit. Part 2 tonight. Probably a part 3 down the line somewhere. This is more about what you are speaking about. Changing his name, the draft and the general perceptions at the time. Parkinson's and the Olympic torch and his later life I am sure I will touch on at some point. mikey
Comment from RedGryffyn
Interesting. A great idea for a book. I liked the mixture of content and how each piece is different. Great write. Good flow and an educational and fun read. Thanks for sharing.
RG
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Interesting. A great idea for a book. I liked the mixture of content and how each piece is different. Great write. Good flow and an educational and fun read. Thanks for sharing.
RG
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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I knew if I lived long enough I would become educational. hahaha. Glad you are enjoying it. I love that there is no format. Lets me write about what I wish. Fresh for me and hopefully the reader too. mikey
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I knew if I lived long enough I would become educational. hahaha. Glad you are enjoying it. I love that there is no format. Lets me write about what I wish. Fresh for me and hopefully the reader too. mikey
Comment from c_lucas
I am surprise you did not mention the fictional Joe Palooka and his world famous manager Knobby Walsh. (I trust I spell the names correctly. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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I am surprise you did not mention the fictional Joe Palooka and his world famous manager Knobby Walsh. (I trust I spell the names correctly. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Glad you liked it. Trying to keep myself from really rambling on and on. Certain subjects are hard to reign myself in on. Thank you, mikey
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Glad you liked it. Trying to keep myself from really rambling on and on. Certain subjects are hard to reign myself in on. Thank you, mikey
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I remembered my youth when I read your post. You're welcome, Michael. Charlie
Comment from tbacha58
Then there are others that simply live life in a way that appears to me to be larger than others and with gusto and fun. I like heart and courage. I like people that go out on a limb. I like true sportsmanship. I like humor and excitement. I love when someone can take something ordinary and make something extraordinary out of it.
This is my favorite verse. Its about You, and that verse shows who you are, and by writing , you are doing an extraordinary dream come true.
Because you had a self made up bringing, what lays in your heart, you are sharing them with all of us, and later with the world.
You are the most important individual in those stories, because without you, we would have never been able to admire and read your writings, taking us backwards and keeping us in Now, and tomorrow you will still be here to give us more gifts through your writing.
You are a stranger to me, but now I know YOU. The old lady loves you. Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Then there are others that simply live life in a way that appears to me to be larger than others and with gusto and fun. I like heart and courage. I like people that go out on a limb. I like true sportsmanship. I like humor and excitement. I love when someone can take something ordinary and make something extraordinary out of it.
This is my favorite verse. Its about You, and that verse shows who you are, and by writing , you are doing an extraordinary dream come true.
Because you had a self made up bringing, what lays in your heart, you are sharing them with all of us, and later with the world.
You are the most important individual in those stories, because without you, we would have never been able to admire and read your writings, taking us backwards and keeping us in Now, and tomorrow you will still be here to give us more gifts through your writing.
You are a stranger to me, but now I know YOU. The old lady loves you. Terry xoxo
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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I love all of these wonderful words that the young lady tells me. I will let you know when you are old. not till I say so!! besides, I read your poetry. old ladies don't write like that. they write about tulips. hahaha. Thank you for all of these wonderful words. I love you back, mikey
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I love all of these wonderful words that the young lady tells me. I will let you know when you are old. not till I say so!! besides, I read your poetry. old ladies don't write like that. they write about tulips. hahaha. Thank you for all of these wonderful words. I love you back, mikey
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I adored cassius Clay, I would sit and listen with my parents at unearthly hours of the morning, on the radio. Living in the UK we had to stay up late to listen. Loved part one, so have to read part two now. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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I adored cassius Clay, I would sit and listen with my parents at unearthly hours of the morning, on the radio. Living in the UK we had to stay up late to listen. Loved part one, so have to read part two now. xsx sandra
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Your man Henry Cooper gave my man a scare and put Mr. Ali on his bottom when he was clowning around one time. ha! Ali came back to win. But, he did the UK proud. Part two tonight. Trying to keep it to that. But, I am sure that later his name will pop up again. He is my idol after all, mikey
Comment from Max Edon
I enjoyed reading this article. It had me laughing all the way through it. Today's boxers just can't match the excitement of Ali.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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I enjoyed reading this article. It had me laughing all the way through it. Today's boxers just can't match the excitement of Ali.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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So true. It has been awhile since anyone has had me interested at all. And now the best don't contest each other anyway. Glad you liked it. Rather fun to write about actually. mikey
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You are welcome
