Comment from 24chas

Excellent

Whenever I read one of your poems, they make me want to write something. This one was one of those especially. Thanks for the great poem.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2005

Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

When you write some poem on your fantasies within, it reaches such a great height that sometimes it becomes highly spiritual too. This poem is no exception to that.

so nicely written about your traversing path of your mind, with a strong soul and enlightened by the strength gathered from the past memories. Good and really highly classical attempts have been brought forward by you in the way of this poem. I like this poem as of others written by you so far, may be more so to find you in the world of fantasy where you float so often.

Gautam

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2005

Comment from ShadowKatmandu

Excellent

Dreams are reality
Life is unreal
Leave facts behind
Focus on feel

Your poetry is pleasant
I picture a stream
Made from two lovers
While they dream. :)

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2005

Comment from spazmasterr

Excellent

I really love reading your work! This is the third piece I have read and I am eager to get to the next thing.

Dare I say, this poem is fluid. You keep everything together so well.

It is easy to create imagery in everything I have read of yours. You even supply words that carry you to the next word-

Flowing through
life's journey,

You consistently instill hope in your work...

I trust the echoes
of my soul,
and move on
and on...

You supply giving and learning...what more can I say?

Hoping to take you to the top of the chart!!

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2005

Comment from suneagle

Excellent

This is good, Pili. It has a sure sensuousness that pervades the imagery of the stream and its flow.

enfold
(I suggest:
enfolds )

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2005

Comment from Aleksandramarie

Good

tottaly, should be totally

scent of your thoughts.... ??? needs a different word to go with your imagery

how about (spill of your thoughts)

otherwise, gorgeous, visual and provocative, thankyou mspotter

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2005

Comment from Lainee

Excellent

Pili this is wonderful! The flow of thoughts gives wonderful imagery throughout and the parallel of the river brings a peaceful quality to your words.

tottaly = totally...lol.

PM me when you adjust this.

Goodluck,
Lainee :O)

Ok, I have adjusted :O)

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2005

Comment from Lisloh

Good

As a poem, this is excellent. The read is smooth, to a point. The imagery is sublime. The emotion is strong. Overall, this is highly provocative. Excellent work.

I love the scene you create here. It could be because of a significant other or a spiritual encounter. Either way, there is much going on here.

My mind
draws images
and gives them life

I trust the echoes
of my soul

A very wise woman wrote these lines.
Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

Spelling typo >> S2, L3 >>tottaly should be totally

S3, L7 >>enfold >>
Try [ I enfold } on for size and see how it fits.
This is where it became bumpy for me.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2005

Comment from Seancuig

Excellent

A smooth and gentle read for day's end.
It would be nice, to just let loose and drift in the current.
Your work is always very evocative, and this is no exception.

One nit:
Tottaly
Totally

Cheers,
Sean

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2005

Comment from Helvi2

Excellent

Hi Pili,
I love the soft gentle ease of this poem. Flowing couldn't be more fitting
a name."Flowing through life's Journey" is my favorite stanza. I was totally
swept away.
Helvi

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2005