The Never Starting Story
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Duality & Devastation"A collection of things that fit nowhere else.
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Comment from cinderbella
Another wonderful piece of writing. What I like is that you are really opening up to the reader and letting us 'inside your head', so to speak.
"Eighty-Five Days" is beautiful in its simplicity. It says everything you needed to say, and it will not be misunderstood, it is crystal clear.
Your perspective throughout is interesting. I laughed at the line "What if your beloved sweetheart goes to Vietnam and dies a virgin knowing you could have easily prevented it?"
Cheeky? Maybe... but sweet just the same when it from the perspective of a very young man. LOL :) Sandra
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Another wonderful piece of writing. What I like is that you are really opening up to the reader and letting us 'inside your head', so to speak.
"Eighty-Five Days" is beautiful in its simplicity. It says everything you needed to say, and it will not be misunderstood, it is crystal clear.
Your perspective throughout is interesting. I laughed at the line "What if your beloved sweetheart goes to Vietnam and dies a virgin knowing you could have easily prevented it?"
Cheeky? Maybe... but sweet just the same when it from the perspective of a very young man. LOL :) Sandra
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Yes. Cheeky true, but considering some of the lame lines that guys came up with back then, that is a pretty good one!! So glad you are enjoying this. I wouldn't even know how to make any of it up so, I can only really tell it as I remember it. mikey
Comment from Brocha1
This was truly excellent. The pieces fit together seamlessly. You don't analyse for the sake of analyzing, you feel with your heart and you let us into your heart too.
I love these lines."Once said, they could never return to a whispered desperation hidden in a dark alley somewhere."
The combination of poetry and prose is working very very well.
"The Family Tree" -a poem that makes you think, hiding behind the facade of everyday was the reality you lived with.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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This was truly excellent. The pieces fit together seamlessly. You don't analyse for the sake of analyzing, you feel with your heart and you let us into your heart too.
I love these lines."Once said, they could never return to a whispered desperation hidden in a dark alley somewhere."
The combination of poetry and prose is working very very well.
"The Family Tree" -a poem that makes you think, hiding behind the facade of everyday was the reality you lived with.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Such lovely words to hear. I truly appreciate these wonderful compliments and am most humbled by them. I am trying to right strictly from my feelings and stay true to that and leave the analysis to others. I have my own theories of course but, that is not what this is about. Just events and how people feel when they happen. I am so encouraged by your input. Thank you so very much, mikey
Comment from Spitfire
Another insightful write. I especially like the passage on Martin Luther King. I remember my husband for some reason to do with work had to cover a civil rights rally. At the last minute I put a silver dollar in his pocket right over his heart, just in case...I'd say these were dangerous times, but so is today. Sigh.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Another insightful write. I especially like the passage on Martin Luther King. I remember my husband for some reason to do with work had to cover a civil rights rally. At the last minute I put a silver dollar in his pocket right over his heart, just in case...I'd say these were dangerous times, but so is today. Sigh.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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That is a rather chilling story. Sadly the politicians of today aren't in as much danger because they aren't doing any thing to anger anyone anyway. They aren't doing anything. mikey
Comment from Sasha
This made me cry. I remember also feeling comfortable calling Robert Kennedy, "Bobby". I loved him too and cried for a long time. I still cry when I think about that day. I remember the death of JFK, Martin Luther King Jr., Bobby Kennedy, Malcom X, Anwar Sadat, and John Lennon. I felt as though the world was falling apart and there was nothing I could do but cry. I still cry. Once again this is another superb chapter and I would not change a thing.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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This made me cry. I remember also feeling comfortable calling Robert Kennedy, "Bobby". I loved him too and cried for a long time. I still cry when I think about that day. I remember the death of JFK, Martin Luther King Jr., Bobby Kennedy, Malcom X, Anwar Sadat, and John Lennon. I felt as though the world was falling apart and there was nothing I could do but cry. I still cry. Once again this is another superb chapter and I would not change a thing.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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That is so encouraging to hear. It is so sad and impossible to understand. The list is so long and heartbreaking to read. All wonderful people that wanted to do good things. Well, we can only learn and carry on. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
I is sad he had to go out the way he did it wasn't right what happened to him as you once said we all have our opinions but nothing but here say to back it up
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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I is sad he had to go out the way he did it wasn't right what happened to him as you once said we all have our opinions but nothing but here say to back it up
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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I don't think I will ever quite get over it. Sad and senseless. It altered where we might have gone I believe. At least they listened back then. They don't even do that now.
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got that right
Comment from bob cullen
This is a superb piece of writing. It tells of a great man.
I particularly like the two poems as they display differing emotions, the second the innocence of childhood while the first portrays the adult questioning of despair.
If I may, I'd like to paraphrase the quote of Robert Kennedy. 'I read the words of some writers and ask, why published. And I see others and ask, why not published' This writing falls into the second category.
Just one minor note. I always thought the 'F' in Robert's name was 'Fitzgerald' just like his brother John.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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This is a superb piece of writing. It tells of a great man.
I particularly like the two poems as they display differing emotions, the second the innocence of childhood while the first portrays the adult questioning of despair.
If I may, I'd like to paraphrase the quote of Robert Kennedy. 'I read the words of some writers and ask, why published. And I see others and ask, why not published' This writing falls into the second category.
Just one minor note. I always thought the 'F' in Robert's name was 'Fitzgerald' just like his brother John.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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What a most exciting and complimentary review to receive. That is very encouraging to hear the word 'published' in conjunction with one of my pieces. With this kind of encouragement perhaps I should add it to my list of dreams. You are most kind to say that. Positive about Francis though. ha! Thank you most kindly for these appreciated words, mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
from a high profile family Why did he have to go leaving only hope how can we go on alone now that Bobby's gone really loved reading this mikey excellent piece
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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from a high profile family Why did he have to go leaving only hope how can we go on alone now that Bobby's gone really loved reading this mikey excellent piece
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. A personal hero to me over here. A real tragedy. He would have done things differently that is for sure. mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good, both prose and poetry. I remember that moment. I was in the country at my aunt's farm watching it on tv. I was a big fan of both John and Bobby. I'd seen Dr. King speak at my college. I was involved with it all, and it broke my heart, as it did yours. The good die young, they say. Three great leaders all murdered. Hard for a young woman like me to comprehend. I grew up fast after that, never again to trust the world to be a good place, and it's only getting worse as I grow older.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Very good, both prose and poetry. I remember that moment. I was in the country at my aunt's farm watching it on tv. I was a big fan of both John and Bobby. I'd seen Dr. King speak at my college. I was involved with it all, and it broke my heart, as it did yours. The good die young, they say. Three great leaders all murdered. Hard for a young woman like me to comprehend. I grew up fast after that, never again to trust the world to be a good place, and it's only getting worse as I grow older.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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It sounds as though you were right in the heart of it as was I. You make a beautiful point about growing up fast. That is so very true. Our whole childhood was accelerated by extraordinary events. A unique generation I believe. Sadly, I agree, it is getting worse. As bad as times were, our voices were at least listened to. Wonderful insights. I thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi Mikey,
This is a wonderfully written post. You have shared a time in history that was in constant flux and change. I think for most, not just American's but all of North America, Bobby Kennedy held that magical light and promises of better times. I was a child during this time, but can still recall the surprise and shock of my parents at his demise.
This was truly a sad day in history, but like all the good Martin Luther King had done, so did Bobby Kennedy. They were two exceptional men, who helped break down the walls and barriers.
You mentioned that your song 85 Days was written long ago. Your words speak loudly. One line that stands out for me, "his sinking banner must not fall his hopes and his dreams are left with us all." This gives hope,to remember and live by his wisdom. Great post.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Hi Mikey,
This is a wonderfully written post. You have shared a time in history that was in constant flux and change. I think for most, not just American's but all of North America, Bobby Kennedy held that magical light and promises of better times. I was a child during this time, but can still recall the surprise and shock of my parents at his demise.
This was truly a sad day in history, but like all the good Martin Luther King had done, so did Bobby Kennedy. They were two exceptional men, who helped break down the walls and barriers.
You mentioned that your song 85 Days was written long ago. Your words speak loudly. One line that stands out for me, "his sinking banner must not fall his hopes and his dreams are left with us all." This gives hope,to remember and live by his wisdom. Great post.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Yes. I wrote it the night he was assassinated after watching it all unfold. I never showed it to anyone until now. I always thought it was too simple and should have been deeper and more grand I suppose. I am so happy you liked it. Wonderful comments and insights. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a very nice tribute to "Bobby" Michael..
It was a very sad time for the nation. Still can't understand why that could happen back then and the
jokers today are slowly destroying America and all it stands for and they are getting by with it.. Not fair. Nancy
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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This is a very nice tribute to "Bobby" Michael..
It was a very sad time for the nation. Still can't understand why that could happen back then and the
jokers today are slowly destroying America and all it stands for and they are getting by with it.. Not fair. Nancy
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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It makes such little sense. Even us kids were listened to and made some little difference back then. Now it is like nothing anybody thinks matters. mikey
