From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Mesmerized."Mostly romance.
17 total reviews
Comment from Louanne
A mostly beautifully expressed
poem recalled with nostalgia the
unforgettable bliss of being with
someone whom you so loved
and trusted that to him you
"scattered my life
through the palms
of your long hands,
absorbed
in the wisdom
of your mind,
drinking
your thoughts,
mesmerized.
Beautiful!
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A mostly beautifully expressed
poem recalled with nostalgia the
unforgettable bliss of being with
someone whom you so loved
and trusted that to him you
"scattered my life
through the palms
of your long hands,
absorbed
in the wisdom
of your mind,
drinking
your thoughts,
mesmerized.
Beautiful!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2005
Comment from ShadowKatmandu
What has gone before
May never come again
But sweet memories
Give us a place to begin
So easy it is
To let yourself be lost
In happy memories
Always free of cost. :)
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What has gone before
May never come again
But sweet memories
Give us a place to begin
So easy it is
To let yourself be lost
In happy memories
Always free of cost. :)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2005
Comment from Mrs Jones
As I fall asleep
in a down quilt
of weeded moss,
I like ............And I fall asleep
Lovely verse Pili with a smooth flow.
Cheers
Rose
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As I fall asleep
in a down quilt
of weeded moss,
I like ............And I fall asleep
Lovely verse Pili with a smooth flow.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 08-Jul-2005
Comment from Dyan J. Cocchi
The structure and flow to this poem are excellent. I love the words you chose for this message. The picture enhances the presentation; while setting the tone for the poem.
Great job.
Dyan
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The structure and flow to this poem are excellent. I love the words you chose for this message. The picture enhances the presentation; while setting the tone for the poem.
Great job.
Dyan
Comment Written 08-Jul-2005
Comment from spazmasterr
Very moving. Sense captivating. Surrendering to status, and growing from the experience. Bravisimo. The kind of poetry that inspires paintings!!
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Very moving. Sense captivating. Surrendering to status, and growing from the experience. Bravisimo. The kind of poetry that inspires paintings!!
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2005
Comment from sengwriter
Beautiful, Past memories so nicely remembered and expressed, the mind on the other side must have rather must be in a same sequel again to have your pain as his own.
How sad and lone your soul might be, your lamentation have reached its target, I'm sure. Nicely written and well maintained style to make the reader comfortable to reach you and your mood.
How long would you just want to belong in this teritory of your solitude surrounded by your loving memories, that is to be seen, let time take over and make you jubilant to write some joyous poems again.
Good luck my dear. Gautam.
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Beautiful, Past memories so nicely remembered and expressed, the mind on the other side must have rather must be in a same sequel again to have your pain as his own.
How sad and lone your soul might be, your lamentation have reached its target, I'm sure. Nicely written and well maintained style to make the reader comfortable to reach you and your mood.
How long would you just want to belong in this teritory of your solitude surrounded by your loving memories, that is to be seen, let time take over and make you jubilant to write some joyous poems again.
Good luck my dear. Gautam.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2005
Comment from TR Stagner
Good one Pili, I love the imagery and it flows majestically. I actually like this one the best of all yours that I have read. Very fluid and entertaining. Nice job.
TR
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Good one Pili, I love the imagery and it flows majestically. I actually like this one the best of all yours that I have read. Very fluid and entertaining. Nice job.
TR
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2005
