Beware the Pumpkins on Halloween
Halloween night is full of surprises.40 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in perched on the porch and in ghoulish glee
good consonance in spooky carvings and clock strikes
vivid descriptive detail of things we all associate with Halloween
I love the mood-creating details - a fun Halloween read :-) Brooke
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solid use of abcb rhyming
good alliteration in perched on the porch and in ghoulish glee
good consonance in spooky carvings and clock strikes
vivid descriptive detail of things we all associate with Halloween
I love the mood-creating details - a fun Halloween read :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Brooke, thanks, I'm really happy that you found it a fun read. Jerri
Comment from c_lucas
This is a well written poem in the Spirit of Halloween. It has a good rhyming scheme. There's a smooth flow of words, making for a Devilish read. Good luck in your contest.
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This is a well written poem in the Spirit of Halloween. It has a good rhyming scheme. There's a smooth flow of words, making for a Devilish read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
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C - Charles, thanks. Good to hear from you and appreciate the comments and review. Jerri
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You're welcome, Jerri. Charlie
Comment from Cajungirl
Beware indeed. Pumpkins can be just as scary as a ghost or witch. You have an excellent contest entry. I would like to suggest that you maybe change the color of your font. Some of us are a little older and have trouble seeing.
Ezcellent job.
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Beware indeed. Pumpkins can be just as scary as a ghost or witch. You have an excellent contest entry. I would like to suggest that you maybe change the color of your font. Some of us are a little older and have trouble seeing.
Ezcellent job.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
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Cajungirl, happy that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you.
Comment from Gungalo
A great pumpkin write and plenty of scares for the little ones. A great entry for the contest you. I particularly liked this:
As the clock strikes midnight on Hallow's Eve
Beware the mischief that soon begins.
Jack-o-lanterns sway and dance;
Their carved up smiles now devilish grins.
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A great pumpkin write and plenty of scares for the little ones. A great entry for the contest you. I particularly liked this:
As the clock strikes midnight on Hallow's Eve
Beware the mischief that soon begins.
Jack-o-lanterns sway and dance;
Their carved up smiles now devilish grins.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Gungalo, thank you. I'm happy you liked it.
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It was fun.
Comment from Nosha17
This was wonderful, super imagery, excellent rhyming techniques. You have made good use of language and your poem flowed along well Commendable.
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This was wonderful, super imagery, excellent rhyming techniques. You have made good use of language and your poem flowed along well Commendable.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
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Nosha17, thank you. I'm happy you liked my poem.
Comment from wiljacro
HI! gramalot8. This is a great tale of the unsung Pumpkins, and you have done them proud,I just hope they realise what you have done for them and that they all gather outside your window on Halloween and sing the Pumpkin song. A great read, I hope it does well in this Comp. wiljacro.
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HI! gramalot8. This is a great tale of the unsung Pumpkins, and you have done them proud,I just hope they realise what you have done for them and that they all gather outside your window on Halloween and sing the Pumpkin song. A great read, I hope it does well in this Comp. wiljacro.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Wiljacro, thank you, (I think... LOL) for the well wishes. And, thanks for loving the poem as well.
Comment from stacym
Loved it! It reminded me of last night carving two pumpkins with my brother. I printed some pictures to use to cut out on the pumpkins. One was a scary warewolf and the other a vampire. Love pumpkin carving. I just hope they don't get smashed on Hallows eve. Happy Halloween.
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Loved it! It reminded me of last night carving two pumpkins with my brother. I printed some pictures to use to cut out on the pumpkins. One was a scary warewolf and the other a vampire. Love pumpkin carving. I just hope they don't get smashed on Hallows eve. Happy Halloween.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Stacym, thank you so much for that incredible 6 star rating. And, yes, I love to carve pumpkins as well! Have a great day!!
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Have a great day as well and a safe Halloween
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Jerri. Very nice entry for the contest. I liked this stanza the best:
"They come alive with ghoulish glee
Howling and singing songs of fright
Happy to indulge in a brief taste of life
They celebrate throughout the night"
I would strongly suggest you not double space however...It will be much more professional-looking and more "reader-friendly if single spaced with double between stanzas.
Great job...Good Luck...Bob ps. I have a new chapter posted also if you have time.)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi, Jerri. Very nice entry for the contest. I liked this stanza the best:
"They come alive with ghoulish glee
Howling and singing songs of fright
Happy to indulge in a brief taste of life
They celebrate throughout the night"
I would strongly suggest you not double space however...It will be much more professional-looking and more "reader-friendly if single spaced with double between stanzas.
Great job...Good Luck...Bob ps. I have a new chapter posted also if you have time.)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you Bob, for the comments review and suggestion. I will check out your post as well. :) Jerri
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Thank you so much, Jerri...Bob
Comment from krys123
First of all good luck in the contest with this entry you have a good chance to win. And thank you gramalot8 for sharing this particular and provocative poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. Your rhymes were done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. The rhythm was fine and made it very easy for me to read and understand your poem easily. I enjoyed the picture and music was complemented your poem very much and vice a versa. Your poem was very well done and added everything necessary for a good entry into the contest. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
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First of all good luck in the contest with this entry you have a good chance to win. And thank you gramalot8 for sharing this particular and provocative poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. Your rhymes were done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. The rhythm was fine and made it very easy for me to read and understand your poem easily. I enjoyed the picture and music was complemented your poem very much and vice a versa. Your poem was very well done and added everything necessary for a good entry into the contest. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
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Krys, thank you for your wonderful comments and review. It is greatly appreciated. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.
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You are so welcome
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You are so welcome
Comment from RodG
What a delightful, unique look at Halloween!
I liked how we see the characters being carved into Jack-o-lanterns in stanza 2. Then they come to life for one grand night.
I really think children would like this poem because of the imagery, rhyme, and super-natural qualities.
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What a delightful, unique look at Halloween!
I liked how we see the characters being carved into Jack-o-lanterns in stanza 2. Then they come to life for one grand night.
I really think children would like this poem because of the imagery, rhyme, and super-natural qualities.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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RodG, thank you for liking my poem. It was fun to create. Appreciate your comments and review very much.
