Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

great picture choice for this poem
good luck in the 5-7-5 contest
you have all the right components for this
the three lines
the first and second have the correct five syllable count
the second has the required seven syllable count
the image is portrayed well in this short poem
flows well
cheers SC

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013

Thanks for the very w0nderful c0mment.

reply by Smoothiecool on 15-Dec-2013

welcome

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, meryme, you did an excellent job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the heart that cries out for company, great picture, infused with emotion. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013

Thanks for the w0nderful review.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

A sense of love lost and the aftermath is well conveyed in this 5-7-5 - the pain of a broken is almost tangible in the lines 'cries out loud.'

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013

Thanks for the w0nderful review.

Comment from Waishali Deshmukh

Excellent

The loneliness of a woman is depicted so well in the poem. The picture suits too. i like the image of clouds for the state of mind in loneliness...drifting away with no control..helpless.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013

Thanks for the w0nderful review.

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Lonely as dark clouds
This heart of mine cries out loud
Drifted, torn apart.

This is a moving 5-7-5 poem about loneliness.
Great simile with lonely as dark clouds.
Nice personification of the heart crying out loud
Perfect picture for the imagery of your words Drifted, torn apart. Nice job! BG 8-)

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013

Thanks f0r the w0nderful review.

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

On a lonely night and the stillness of the sir and darkness comes to our mind.
A lonely heart will cry out and feeling the sadness in the dark.
Drfiting aimlessly and tearing the minds, this feeling of gloom can be felt in our hearts.
Good write and well penned.
Cheerio, hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
Have a great and lovely weekend.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks f0r the w0nderful review.

reply by 9999pool on 08-Dec-2013

Welcome, cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

A very effective overall presentation which really supports the chosen theme of loneliness.
Thoughtful word choices portray the sentiments of loneliness
perfectly.
the poem adheres to the syllable count for a 5-7-5 poem well.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks for the w0nderful review.

Comment from MERRY1

Excellent

This was a great poem and picture depicting loneliness. I hope she didn't intend to jump off the bank!Your 5-7-5 count was correct and the words flowed with no hesitation. Well done

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thanks for the w0nderful review.

Comment from B. Diehl

Excellent

I love this. Personally, I am horribly at writing haikus because I have yet to learn how to convey a message with such a small amount of words. However, this is very inspiring for me. Thank you for sharing.

-B Diehl<3

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2013

Thank you for such w0nderful w0rds.

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

they will come to pass Lonely as dark clouds
This heart of mine cries out loud
Drifted, torn apart and the sun will shine golden again

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013

Thank you darkh0use, the piece of mine was an entry of a 575 p0em. Thanks f0r c0mpleting it anyway.