Our Private Orchestra
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Comment from Spitfire
Sounds like a bad case of writer's block to me. Actually, that's how I feel after five hours of reviewing. :-( Great images:
A dying body sinks into this tattered sofa
a busted marionette tossed within spinning concrete
Toes pull in, as fingers would to crush a rotting plum
Are you still in pain from withdrawal?
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Sounds like a bad case of writer's block to me. Actually, that's how I feel after five hours of reviewing. :-( Great images:
A dying body sinks into this tattered sofa
a busted marionette tossed within spinning concrete
Toes pull in, as fingers would to crush a rotting plum
Are you still in pain from withdrawal?
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you for reading. Yes I am. Its a weird medicine. Fine for a week then withdrawal out of nowhere. I'm getting through it though. I really think you're sweet for asking. And thank you for this.
Comment from SteveY
Thinking doesn't solve our problems it creates them. Seek to get beyond words into pure awareness without judgement of any kind. Just awareness itself! The bliss of the soul lies there. Thanks I think I'll maybe write about that next!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thinking doesn't solve our problems it creates them. Seek to get beyond words into pure awareness without judgement of any kind. Just awareness itself! The bliss of the soul lies there. Thanks I think I'll maybe write about that next!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Please do please do. So don't think too much then?
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I have written it, and it's called "False Identity" I'll be posting it when I get some more points and cent pumps. Either later today or tomorrow. Thinking isn't bad, but to get too identified with those thoughts is the bad thing. They are not you and never have been, so why believe them, especially when they tell you bad things? It's a lie!
Comment from NicciFaye
Yes...words can't express this feeling of being trapped inside your (my) mind. I believe this is a trap that only the mind can unlock its own self from out of...this is a detailed and descriptive poem that I really love. Staring at the screen...trapped in my mind...I mostly stare at a blank sheet of paper in my notebook until whats trapped comes out in black and white, then another trap is setup upon realizing am still in the world that stimulates millions of thoughts that get trapped upon its own pleasure. Well written.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Yes...words can't express this feeling of being trapped inside your (my) mind. I believe this is a trap that only the mind can unlock its own self from out of...this is a detailed and descriptive poem that I really love. Staring at the screen...trapped in my mind...I mostly stare at a blank sheet of paper in my notebook until whats trapped comes out in black and white, then another trap is setup upon realizing am still in the world that stimulates millions of thoughts that get trapped upon its own pleasure. Well written.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Your review is poetic, as it often is. you know what I am referring to in this piece it seems. I really like your response. I just try to ease my mind and focus on the good things. Just tough sometimes. Truly thank you for reading this. Really.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Gregory, I think for some of us who have been there can tell you how it feels...When your sick and can't move or feel like you don't want to...Broke my angle...casted it twice...had to watch TV for 2 months...drove me nuts...A great write and a cool picture...Luff Linda xxxoo
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Hi Gregory, I think for some of us who have been there can tell you how it feels...When your sick and can't move or feel like you don't want to...Broke my angle...casted it twice...had to watch TV for 2 months...drove me nuts...A great write and a cool picture...Luff Linda xxxoo
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you Linda. Yeah it can be tough for sure. I'm glad you are healed. I'm getting better too. Have a great weekend. Thank you.
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Hi Gregory, I am so glad you are getting better...you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Gregory, I beg to differ with you a bit on that point, my friend. Words...eloquently placed, deftly subtle in their heartache and misery... can express the way it feels to be trapped in such a way. You've just done so, right here, with this beautifully elegant piece of work...
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Well, Gregory, I beg to differ with you a bit on that point, my friend. Words...eloquently placed, deftly subtle in their heartache and misery... can express the way it feels to be trapped in such a way. You've just done so, right here, with this beautifully elegant piece of work...
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you Dean. That's really nice of you to say. Makes me feel like I have talent at this, always tough on myself. Truly thank you. I know you understand more than most. Have a great weekend my good friend.
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You do the same.
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting poem and well worded. Like a bird caught in a snare, the mind can rule the void. Very good my poet friend. Glad you shared this.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Interesting poem and well worded. Like a bird caught in a snare, the mind can rule the void. Very good my poet friend. Glad you shared this.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you Ben. You nailed it. It can be tough for sure. Thank you though.
Comment from country ranch writer
BECOMING FEEBLE OF BODY AND ONE MIND IS NO MATINEE, IT IS THE HELPLESSNESS THAT EATS AWAY, LIKE A DOG CHEWING ON AN OLD BONE. TO FEEBLE TO SIT WITH OUT PAIN IT IS EXCRUCIATING TO SAY THE LEAST. ALL THE BONES CLACKING TOGETHER OUT OF TUNE
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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BECOMING FEEBLE OF BODY AND ONE MIND IS NO MATINEE, IT IS THE HELPLESSNESS THAT EATS AWAY, LIKE A DOG CHEWING ON AN OLD BONE. TO FEEBLE TO SIT WITH OUT PAIN IT IS EXCRUCIATING TO SAY THE LEAST. ALL THE BONES CLACKING TOGETHER OUT OF TUNE
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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That's poetic in and of itself! Thank you so much for the review! It means a lot that you read it.
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WELCOME
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Well, I think that your words really have conveyed what it is like to stare vacantly ahead and think of nothing that would bring you joy!
"a marble plopped atop stale pudding" ..... where do you come up with these things? .... brilliant! Who else would ever think to say something like that? ... nobody ... nobody, but you, GregoryCody!
The repetition of "staring at a screen, trapped inside my mind" pretty much says it all, doesn't it. Our minds can be our best friends or our worst enemies.
A really good write!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Well, I think that your words really have conveyed what it is like to stare vacantly ahead and think of nothing that would bring you joy!
"a marble plopped atop stale pudding" ..... where do you come up with these things? .... brilliant! Who else would ever think to say something like that? ... nobody ... nobody, but you, GregoryCody!
The repetition of "staring at a screen, trapped inside my mind" pretty much says it all, doesn't it. Our minds can be our best friends or our worst enemies.
A really good write!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you again Connie! I wrote this at 3:00am and fell asleep luckily. But yeah I was doing just that, sitting and staring at a screen. Been pretty sick the past few months. But I'm getting better. I can't tell you how much your words mean to me. It makes me feel like I have something. Like I'm a good writer. Truly, thank you so so very much. I am really grateful.
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Not "like I'm a good writer" .... repeat after me ... "I, GregoryCody, am a GREAT writer!". You really are! Not that I am an expert by any means. But I sure know what I like when I read it.
I'll send some 'white light' your way in hopes that you will soon be feeling top notch.
I have a very close friend who does that too sometimes. He sits and stares at the TV screen, and isn't really even aware afterwards of what he has watched. He calls it 'zoning out', and he does it on a regular basis. It's all a part of what he calls his 'hermitting'. At times he is the life of the party (literally ... he is a musician and is on stage ... a lot). At other times he needs to hermit away from everyone in order to recharge.
So, I guess you are in very good company. But I sincerely hope that you soon will feel 100%.
Connie
