The Machine Stops
When appliances break84 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Steve,
Thanks for the many chuckles with this delightful read. So many great lines, it's hard to say which is my fave. I really liked ... "and beggared off to Burma" , "my Kindle's eating porn" and "ate some terra firma", among others.
This was witty, clever and humorous all rolled into one. Great rhyme and flow with funny images (many relatable.. arrrgh!)created for the reader.
Best wishes for the contest!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Steve,
Thanks for the many chuckles with this delightful read. So many great lines, it's hard to say which is my fave. I really liked ... "and beggared off to Burma" , "my Kindle's eating porn" and "ate some terra firma", among others.
This was witty, clever and humorous all rolled into one. Great rhyme and flow with funny images (many relatable.. arrrgh!)created for the reader.
Best wishes for the contest!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Connie, thank you so much for reporting chuckles and the six stars, of course.
Steve
Comment from Spitfire
It does seem as if they all go at once! That's why you don't buy everything the same year. LOL A rolicking poem and proof of Murphy's Law. Love the kindle reading porm and the GPS hauling you off to Burma. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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It does seem as if they all go at once! That's why you don't buy everything the same year. LOL A rolicking poem and proof of Murphy's Law. Love the kindle reading porm and the GPS hauling you off to Burma. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you - it wasn't real porn, just 50 shades of Grey - must be a Kindless.
Steve
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello
boy
today just isn't your day (ha ha)
I can see all of you are having so much fun with this
your machines malfunction one after one
and the funniest part to match is the illustration
perhaps the cane will help put all in order
this entry truly is funny and well stated
I loved the flair and flow
it's nice to know we are not alone when these happen
it happens to others too
thank you for sharing
good luck with the contest
ann marie
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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hello
boy
today just isn't your day (ha ha)
I can see all of you are having so much fun with this
your machines malfunction one after one
and the funniest part to match is the illustration
perhaps the cane will help put all in order
this entry truly is funny and well stated
I loved the flair and flow
it's nice to know we are not alone when these happen
it happens to others too
thank you for sharing
good luck with the contest
ann marie
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Ann Marie - the unfortunate part is how much of this is true!
Steve
Comment from Rondeno
Excellent, Steve! You are a natural farceur, and your command of versification is second to none! I don't know if you put this in for the recent competition ... but it would have won by a mile (isn't that 1.6 kilometres to you?)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Excellent, Steve! You are a natural farceur, and your command of versification is second to none! I don't know if you put this in for the recent competition ... but it would have won by a mile (isn't that 1.6 kilometres to you?)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Mike.
It would be 1.6km except I'm still old-school enough to do the conversion every time!
Steve
Comment from elpsog
My greatest compliment to this excellent poem is to say I have nothing to say. It was perfectly crafted and I was laughing the whole way through. Write more, write more, write more!
Ray
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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My greatest compliment to this excellent poem is to say I have nothing to say. It was perfectly crafted and I was laughing the whole way through. Write more, write more, write more!
Ray
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you - no doubt there will be more and plenty that went before as well if you care to dip into my portfolio.
Steve
Comment from kiwijenny
I am not going to sue you. All these gadgets are wanna be appliances. I know the vacuum cleaner hankers to be a ride on lawn mower...the blue tooth wants more tooth ....the toaster wants to be an oven ....the bread gets fidgety standing up......No wonder they are on the blink....crikey ....do you know how hard it was for my iPad to write crikey? Thanks a lot you've infected me with what your appliances have got !!!!!!!!!!
God bless
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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I am not going to sue you. All these gadgets are wanna be appliances. I know the vacuum cleaner hankers to be a ride on lawn mower...the blue tooth wants more tooth ....the toaster wants to be an oven ....the bread gets fidgety standing up......No wonder they are on the blink....crikey ....do you know how hard it was for my iPad to write crikey? Thanks a lot you've infected me with what your appliances have got !!!!!!!!!!
God bless
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Jenny - lately I jut have to be around something for it to blow up!
Steve
Comment from Gungalo
I'd like to post this poem on-line
so all the world can read it,
but the Internet's gone Poof! Kaput!
just when I really need it!
Wouldn't ya know it? Hehee what a poem you have written and what a reception you have gotten. Great.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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I'd like to post this poem on-line
so all the world can read it,
but the Internet's gone Poof! Kaput!
just when I really need it!
Wouldn't ya know it? Hehee what a poem you have written and what a reception you have gotten. Great.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you - now I have other reviewers accusing me of inadvertently sabotaging their iPads, so beware.
Steve
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Smiling at you Steve.
Comment from JM daSilva
In other words, you are showing that you don't treat your stuff with love, so they break one after the other. You need a maintenance team by the sound of it. lol
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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In other words, you are showing that you don't treat your stuff with love, so they break one after the other. You need a maintenance team by the sound of it. lol
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Oh, no, I love all of my appliances equally - well, maybe not the cranky lawnmower, and the fridge is a bit..... frigid.
Thanks for reviewing.
Steve
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Welcome.
Comment from nancyjam
Very good, Steve. Love the clever
rhymes and fast paced meter as you
run through all the "fails" of your appliances.
I predict another win for you with this one.
So funny! good luck. Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Very good, Steve. Love the clever
rhymes and fast paced meter as you
run through all the "fails" of your appliances.
I predict another win for you with this one.
So funny! good luck. Nancy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, nancy - there are a couple of good ones in the mix so no chicken-counting.
Steve
Comment from krys123
Thank you very much Steve for sharing this humorous poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. I really enjoyed this poem quite a lot because of its fantastic originality and cleverness. Your writing was spectacular and neither of your rhymes were forced, and labored or strained. Your rhythm and tempo was very well done and made it very easy for me to read your poem. And I love your continued concept throughout the poem of the appliances mishaps. Good luck in the contest. You have a good one.
AK
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much Steve for sharing this humorous poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. I really enjoyed this poem quite a lot because of its fantastic originality and cleverness. Your writing was spectacular and neither of your rhymes were forced, and labored or strained. Your rhythm and tempo was very well done and made it very easy for me to read your poem. And I love your continued concept throughout the poem of the appliances mishaps. Good luck in the contest. You have a good one.
AK
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Krys - glad you enjoyed this piece of silliness.
Steve
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You are so welcome Steve and this silliness was much fun.
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You are so welcome Steve and this silliness was much fun.
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You are so welcome
