Waking Eyes
a nonet16 total reviews
Comment from Ben Colder
A goodie but see you? I just got back from the eye clinic and no I can not . Well not yet anyway. Throwing a little humor . Well done poet I will look for it in the booth.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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A goodie but see you? I just got back from the eye clinic and no I can not . Well not yet anyway. Throwing a little humor . Well done poet I will look for it in the booth.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Haha. Thank you Ben! You're the best. I'm so glad you liked this! Truly, thank you. Always a pleasure hearing from you.
Comment from SteveY
Man Greg this is so flipping good! I love it completely. Perfect picture that outlines your perfect description. I tell you what...you are an extremely talented writer/poet. I always look forward to your writings because I know they will always be good and won't disappoint me!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Man Greg this is so flipping good! I love it completely. Perfect picture that outlines your perfect description. I tell you what...you are an extremely talented writer/poet. I always look forward to your writings because I know they will always be good and won't disappoint me!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Steve that's gotta be the best compliment I've heard. Truly. You've just given me a good morning with that. I needed it. I'm so grateful. Thank you man, really. You are a great guy.
Comment from NicciFaye
Oh the relating nature of this poem has caught my sleepy eyes as I need some and wake with such great despair as the need of reflections breaking black! Excellent and perfect nonet. As I read down I said what is it leading up to......to something so well described. The opening is capturing. The nonet brings life to this already captivating picture.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Oh the relating nature of this poem has caught my sleepy eyes as I need some and wake with such great despair as the need of reflections breaking black! Excellent and perfect nonet. As I read down I said what is it leading up to......to something so well described. The opening is capturing. The nonet brings life to this already captivating picture.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Wow Nicci thank you. Always such a pleasure to hear from you. You're great. Thank you so much. It seems like you got the poem. That makes me happy. And THANK YOU for the six. That's so incredibly sweet of you. Truly thank you.
Comment from Gungalo
These memories crawl between my dreams
like threaded ivy barbed ~ fanged twists
Crying streams bleed salt wishes
and blind my morning hope ~
reflections break black...
Can you see me?
Waking eyes
plead for
sleep
A very good looking Nonet Greg. It has some beauty to it because it had you taking the time for the right words and not just throwing in any old word. Awesome done guy.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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These memories crawl between my dreams
like threaded ivy barbed ~ fanged twists
Crying streams bleed salt wishes
and blind my morning hope ~
reflections break black...
Can you see me?
Waking eyes
plead for
sleep
A very good looking Nonet Greg. It has some beauty to it because it had you taking the time for the right words and not just throwing in any old word. Awesome done guy.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Thank you. Your reviews are always cherished. I'm really glad you liked it and could see the depth.
Comment from country ranch writer
fitful dreams bring tears of sorrow and you wish they would stop happening and end so you can go back to sleep again but these dreams keep coming and going where you are trying to sleep
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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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fitful dreams bring tears of sorrow and you wish they would stop happening and end so you can go back to sleep again but these dreams keep coming and going where you are trying to sleep
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Very insightful as always. Thank you so much for this kind review. I really appreciate it :)
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welcome my dear ffriend
Comment from IndianaIrish
Powerful and moving nonet, Greg. I love the words you select to describe the emotions. I do have two suggestions...nonet poetry is centered on the page to dramatize the decreasing lines. Also, I wonder if twist should be twists because there is more than one barb wire.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
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Powerful and moving nonet, Greg. I love the words you select to describe the emotions. I do have two suggestions...nonet poetry is centered on the page to dramatize the decreasing lines. Also, I wonder if twist should be twists because there is more than one barb wire.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
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You did it. I think you fixed the shape with that fix! "Twists". Does it look right?
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It looks beautiful like a nonet should, Greg : )
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Thank you for your help!! As always ;)
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Anytime ... My pleasure!!
