Our Fortress Love
A sonnet92 total reviews
Comment from marion
Hi Kiwisteve
Beautiful. Beautiful. Beautiful. Congratulations of third. There's something about a sonnet, isn't there?
Marion
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Hi Kiwisteve
Beautiful. Beautiful. Beautiful. Congratulations of third. There's something about a sonnet, isn't there?
Marion
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Marion, thanks so much for your kind words and the six stars. Of, course I felt it deserved better than a measly third place! :o)
Steve
Comment from emjaihammond
A wonderful poem. It has the elements of hope and faith and in believing in the future no matter the storm that rages without. I believe this too. I loved the temperament used in this writing.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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A wonderful poem. It has the elements of hope and faith and in believing in the future no matter the storm that rages without. I believe this too. I loved the temperament used in this writing.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, MJ, for the kind comments and the six stars.
Nice to see a positive view of relationships sometimes.
Steve
Comment from JM daSilva
This is a great declaration of love. Imagine, love as an impregnable castle that keeps all its enemies on the outside. She or he could ask for nothing better.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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This is a great declaration of love. Imagine, love as an impregnable castle that keeps all its enemies on the outside. She or he could ask for nothing better.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks!
Steve
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Welcome.
Comment from justmarly
Love is a thing that is so strong and healthy for the soul. This poem shows that. I like it very much and thanks for sharing. JM
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Love is a thing that is so strong and healthy for the soul. This poem shows that. I like it very much and thanks for sharing. JM
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, JM!
Steve
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Welcome. JM
Comment from GWHARGIS
ooh, I loved this. It had such an old feel to it. I liked the alliteration and the flow to this. The imagery and descriptions were great. nicely done.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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ooh, I loved this. It had such an old feel to it. I liked the alliteration and the flow to this. The imagery and descriptions were great. nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This lovely, sekiifully-written sonnet is both idealistic--conveying the strongest message about enduring love--and realistic--acknowledging that challenges and difficulties will naturally arise.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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This lovely, sekiifully-written sonnet is both idealistic--conveying the strongest message about enduring love--and realistic--acknowledging that challenges and difficulties will naturally arise.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Janice - not sure how that happened - your comment didn't appear, but thank you for the five stars!
Steve
Comment from MizKat
Hi kiwisteveh,
I really like your sonnet poem. It reads well and is one of the best that I've read. Although I don't know much about sonnet poetry it seems that this one has perfect sound and rhythm to it.
MizKat
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Hi kiwisteveh,
I really like your sonnet poem. It reads well and is one of the best that I've read. Although I don't know much about sonnet poetry it seems that this one has perfect sound and rhythm to it.
MizKat
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks, MizKat.
Steve
Comment from Poetofheart2013
I thought your poem was really pretty and very romantic
I like use a fortress and the drawbridge and everything.
Good Job
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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I thought your poem was really pretty and very romantic
I like use a fortress and the drawbridge and everything.
Good Job
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Brocha1
absolutely fabulous. I haven't checked all the iambic meter and I don't intend to-I'll leave that for the nitpickers.
I do want to say that this is abundantly rich in exquisite language."shudder at the gale', " our fortress love"
the enjambment is silky smooth and I noticed here fit perfectly into iambic meter. "oaken beams and granite blocks"-loved theses powerful metaphors to describe the strength of love.
and those last two lines are outstanding. eminently publishable.seriously.
I don't think I've read your work before . I'm so glad I did.
Brocha
I actually got here by reading your review on Tonulak. it piqued my curiosity.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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absolutely fabulous. I haven't checked all the iambic meter and I don't intend to-I'll leave that for the nitpickers.
I do want to say that this is abundantly rich in exquisite language."shudder at the gale', " our fortress love"
the enjambment is silky smooth and I noticed here fit perfectly into iambic meter. "oaken beams and granite blocks"-loved theses powerful metaphors to describe the strength of love.
and those last two lines are outstanding. eminently publishable.seriously.
I don't think I've read your work before . I'm so glad I did.
Brocha
I actually got here by reading your review on Tonulak. it piqued my curiosity.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you - even the nitpickers can't find too much wrong with this one!
I appreciate your kind comments about the language. I believe a sonnet deserves serious attention and should reflect its classic nature, although, of course, there are great modern sonnets as well.
These are about twenty times harder than my usual slapdash, humorous efforts - take a peek into my portfolio if you like and you'll see what I mean.
Steve
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I can see the incredible effort that went into this one. I daren't even attempt it. I am too much of a fresh writer with too little experience.
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I'd love to try a sonnet, where do I start?
Comment from kiwijenny
Secure in love, we'll brave the wildest night
Yes love is a fortress....sometimes we take that for " granite"
Sorry couldn't resist
I love this sonnet and wish I had a six left
God bless
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Secure in love, we'll brave the wildest night
Yes love is a fortress....sometimes we take that for " granite"
Sorry couldn't resist
I love this sonnet and wish I had a six left
God bless
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Oooh! What an awful pun.
Thanks for the virtual six.
Steve
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:o)
