My Erroneous Journey
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Rating of Chapter 1 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 1
Hello Jumbo J
Now I can see why that tbacha58 (Terry) asked me to read your entry for the contest
I know one thing. I don't have anything to pick apart
a nerve wracking scene to read,
Done very well.
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Hello Jumbo J
Now I can see why that tbacha58 (Terry) asked me to read your entry for the contest
I know one thing. I don't have anything to pick apart
a nerve wracking scene to read,
Done very well.
Gert
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Hi Gert,
how kind of you for coming to read and review this on a recommendation from one beautiful lady... Thank you so much for your kind comments, they are most appreciated as is this fine review. Have a great weekend.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
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You are s welcome James
Gert
Comment from watergirl
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
This story moves from a factual tale onto thoughts and ideas flowing through the writers mind. This works well, as it tends to move along nicely. You tell a tale with believability and a human tone which the reader relates to.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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This story moves from a factual tale onto thoughts and ideas flowing through the writers mind. This works well, as it tends to move along nicely. You tell a tale with believability and a human tone which the reader relates to.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Hi Watergirl,
thanks so much for the kind review and the excellent rating, most appreciated... If you get time one day you might want to go back and see how this started in part 1... It's only about 1000 words but it explains the journey and will give greater understanding to the story. Take care and have a great weekend.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from Darkhorse555
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
from the title such an amazingly beautiful piece of writing a delight and beauty to read so much light in is warmness excellent piece
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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from the title such an amazingly beautiful piece of writing a delight and beauty to read so much light in is warmness excellent piece
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the kind words and the great review my friend, most appreciated... Read you soon,especially if they are anything like your last post, I wish I could have sixed it... It was a damn powerful write.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from MM lives on :)
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
WOW JAMES...WOW...what a story from the first great read of a favorite author of mine :) to some other heartfelt writers like MM and the like. That young man adopted you my brother and knew you were something special...now I wonder if you still feel the affects of that hydrochloride acid. I had an issue where I did not wear a mask and was handling musty mold laden carpeting...man it makes you think about shit like this buddy. Hope symptoms one day subside.
BRAVO- BINGO- A 77777 WE A GO! :)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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WOW JAMES...WOW...what a story from the first great read of a favorite author of mine :) to some other heartfelt writers like MM and the like. That young man adopted you my brother and knew you were something special...now I wonder if you still feel the affects of that hydrochloride acid. I had an issue where I did not wear a mask and was handling musty mold laden carpeting...man it makes you think about shit like this buddy. Hope symptoms one day subside.
BRAVO- BINGO- A 77777 WE A GO! :)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Hi Christopher,
firstly let me thank you for having to go through my portfolio page to review this, that was legendary.
Tammy was my first fan as I was hers... Well obviously not her first fan, but you get the idea. Her poetry just blew my mind... I'd never read poetry before, and now you know the whole story to how I came to be on fanstory. I was a newborn to this social media stuff, and definitely didn't know the in's and outs of f/s... But that's where Mark stepped in and set me on the right path... For without his friendship and guidance, I don't know how long I would have survived.
So you can see how your family has started me off on what has become a very different journey for me, one I never thought I'd be on... But now I don't think I could live without it in my life.
Well about the poisoning, the effects are still lingering... Whilst there not as dramatic as they were, my body has never been as bad... Just can't seem to get on top of that part... Hope it ends soon... It's been dragging on way too long! Didn't think that doing something that dumb could have these effect for such a prolonged period... As for the carpet, my old man laid the stuff all his working life, so I am very familiar with the effect of decomposing glues and molding backings... Definitely not good stuff to inhale... That shit can be a silent killer for sure!
Anyway my brother, know how much this review means to me and I hope that Tammy and Mark know what they've done for me!
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment from Jackarrie
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
Hi James,
You really have been to hell and back. I know hindsight is a wonderful thing, and I am sure you have berated yourself for not going to the hospital, so I will refrain from stating the obvious. You have written a brilliant account of your ordeal, and thankfully you lived to tell the tale. Not only to tell the tale, but to write fantastic works here on fanstory. Also meeting friendly helpful people on the site.
I found it interesting about how your wife became the carer instead of you. In my own life, my husband is a natural carer, and I have suffered with depression and anxiety also.
Through our married life, when ever he has had any health problems I was always the strong one looking after him.
I guess this is called love and marriage goes together like a horse and carriage.
But seriously, your story is a great read and a well deserved six,I wish you all the best with it. It is a pity it did not go to the inbox's of your fans.
Well done Mary x
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi James,
You really have been to hell and back. I know hindsight is a wonderful thing, and I am sure you have berated yourself for not going to the hospital, so I will refrain from stating the obvious. You have written a brilliant account of your ordeal, and thankfully you lived to tell the tale. Not only to tell the tale, but to write fantastic works here on fanstory. Also meeting friendly helpful people on the site.
I found it interesting about how your wife became the carer instead of you. In my own life, my husband is a natural carer, and I have suffered with depression and anxiety also.
Through our married life, when ever he has had any health problems I was always the strong one looking after him.
I guess this is called love and marriage goes together like a horse and carriage.
But seriously, your story is a great read and a well deserved six,I wish you all the best with it. It is a pity it did not go to the inbox's of your fans.
Well done Mary x
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi Mary,
it's truly amazing how all our lives seem to intertwine. We have different experiences, yet have the same reaction and outcome.
I thank you so much for going into my portfolio to find this and review it after the debacle of not having released to my friends, no matter, I'm not going to stress the small stuff.
I am truly grateful for this magic review and the stars you humbled me with... Thank you my good friend.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
Dear James,
As I was reading this two things happened. First I wanted to shake you silly for not getting immediately to the hospital for poison control. Burning layers off your lungs and throat - you're lucky to be alive!
Secondly I reached for the Kleenex box! Both a humbling and honour to read this, it touched me deeply to know I played a small part in your healing through this ordeal.
Writing to me has never been about the stars, ribbon, ATB or even rank. Those "gifts" are not the true reward of writing and sharing. At least not for me - I just like to write what comes from deeper within me and then share it freely.
A part of me also hoped my words would reach out to who needed them most. So many times I've posted and known it will go where it needs too. Thus your words in this story really have great impact for me....my words reached you, and they helped.
This story reminds me of the power words have. And the community we are all part of. FS was built from an idea and its foundation then built....But it is us, the members themselves, that create the energy within it. To support and guide, to nurture and be nurtured, to be both student and teacher and allow all of those parts to help us learn and grow our own writing.
Your story is not just a challenge of your health in recovery. But for me as I read this it very much felt like connecting to that "deeper seed" of life within you.
A well penned post with lots of positive energy sharing words with your friends on this site.
However - next time any thing goes wrong go to the bloody hospital right away!!
Thanks for sharing your story. I'm really humbled with your words.
Maureen
Edit checks:
"And even though my body might not be (going) that well,..."// I think you mean 'doing'
"you just have to (be) willing to see it." // Add 'be'
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Dear James,
As I was reading this two things happened. First I wanted to shake you silly for not getting immediately to the hospital for poison control. Burning layers off your lungs and throat - you're lucky to be alive!
Secondly I reached for the Kleenex box! Both a humbling and honour to read this, it touched me deeply to know I played a small part in your healing through this ordeal.
Writing to me has never been about the stars, ribbon, ATB or even rank. Those "gifts" are not the true reward of writing and sharing. At least not for me - I just like to write what comes from deeper within me and then share it freely.
A part of me also hoped my words would reach out to who needed them most. So many times I've posted and known it will go where it needs too. Thus your words in this story really have great impact for me....my words reached you, and they helped.
This story reminds me of the power words have. And the community we are all part of. FS was built from an idea and its foundation then built....But it is us, the members themselves, that create the energy within it. To support and guide, to nurture and be nurtured, to be both student and teacher and allow all of those parts to help us learn and grow our own writing.
Your story is not just a challenge of your health in recovery. But for me as I read this it very much felt like connecting to that "deeper seed" of life within you.
A well penned post with lots of positive energy sharing words with your friends on this site.
However - next time any thing goes wrong go to the bloody hospital right away!!
Thanks for sharing your story. I'm really humbled with your words.
Maureen
Edit checks:
"And even though my body might not be (going) that well,..."// I think you mean 'doing'
"you just have to (be) willing to see it." // Add 'be'
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi Maureen,
firstly thanks for the edit checks... That sounds so much better than 'spags'
and now it should make sense to you, why I may have been over exuberant at times with your postings. You did guide me through dark times through your courage and bravery. But your words resonated and went to that deep point in your mind, where miracles are performed... You were my angel, my voice of perspective and for that I will be eternally grateful.
Thank you for your beautiful review and your further words of wisdom, and that's why you are my Queen. You are always there to reinforce the truths about the things that count... Sharing, caring and not being caught up in the allusions of ego. You never fail to inspire... Your sage like qualities having me waiting for your next breath and what words will be attached.
I am just glad I got to write this story, if only to let you in on the way that you have transported my life... Thank you!
Love, light and healing,
James xxxxx
Comment from Jade Lawson
Rating of Chapter 1 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 1
Good luck for this contest. I really liked the first paragraph. I can see myself in it. That scene with the hydrochloric acid was intense and agonizing. What a terrible situation! Your question at the end is hard to say. I wonder what you did. This was an excellent entry for this contest.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Good luck for this contest. I really liked the first paragraph. I can see myself in it. That scene with the hydrochloric acid was intense and agonizing. What a terrible situation! Your question at the end is hard to say. I wonder what you did. This was an excellent entry for this contest.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi Angel,
thanks so much for the review on this one... Hope you catch up to the conclusion of the story... I don't know with the mess up with the messages not going out, if I will have the reviews required to even have a look-in, in the contest. But thanks anyway, it was a kind thought... I will miss you!
Kindest respect,
James xx
Comment from lorijean
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
Fan-bloody-tastic, well done James a brilliant job all you have done to tell it as it is, it was so bad a situation, and you tried so hard to cope on your own and not worry others, when is the movie coming out? Brill brill brill...... Lorijean 100 xxxx's
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Fan-bloody-tastic, well done James a brilliant job all you have done to tell it as it is, it was so bad a situation, and you tried so hard to cope on your own and not worry others, when is the movie coming out? Brill brill brill...... Lorijean 100 xxxx's
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi Lori J,
what a wonderful review! Thank you so much for sharing the kind heart that resides in your chest... Yeah, I don't think it will make for entertaining viewing... More like a comedy of error's!
Thank you sweet lady you humble me with your STARS!!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
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You are so welcome...
Comment from NicciFaye
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
A amazing and overcoming triumph James! First, I must say, it REALLY amazes me how some men just deal and deal without saying not one word! You will literally sat up there suffering and causing your own anxiety for absolutely nothing..... just like my husband! LoL
BUT! As I taught a lesson in my adult Sunday school one day, about choices and consquenses, which is a domino effect, not only on our lives, but the lives of others, this story here reminds me of the lesson that was taught.
You love your wife so; your pride was partially in the way, BUT you loved her so that you couldn't bare for her to go through any additional emotional stress, while you bared the burdens. In turn, she did exactly what you did (HELLO), she put her anxitey and emotions to the side in order to care and tend to your physical and mental needs, so you can better yourself.
I tell you God is amazing. You know why? I will tell you...because love conqueros all! - this was your healing my friend. You know a lot of times, when we are sick, it can be something serious, but not as serious as we think it is; typically a sickness can be intensified by what we think it is, thereby making us more sick.
God used her to redirect your thoughts to somthing positive. The human mind is the strongest part of our well being. It can hinder us or keep us at peace.
I will be praying for your full recovery James, for any aliments that may still be hurting.
After the storm always comes Gods bow (rainbow) in the sky...God showed me love when I read this scripture...
1 Corthinathians 13:4-7, "Love is patient and kind; love does not envy or boast; it is not arrogant or rude. It does not insist on its own way; it is not irritable or resentful;it does not rejoice at wrongdoing, but rejoices with the truth. Love bears all things, believes all things, hopes all things, endures all things.
1 Corthinathians 13:13,"So now faith, hope, and love abide, these three; but the greatest of these is love."
When you look at your wife - always remember, LOVE keeps no record of wrongs and it bears all things.
I loved this story and I would give it a six, but I have no more to give my friend.
Many blessings! Sorry for it being so long, but I am drawn to tribulations and TRIMUPH!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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A amazing and overcoming triumph James! First, I must say, it REALLY amazes me how some men just deal and deal without saying not one word! You will literally sat up there suffering and causing your own anxiety for absolutely nothing..... just like my husband! LoL
BUT! As I taught a lesson in my adult Sunday school one day, about choices and consquenses, which is a domino effect, not only on our lives, but the lives of others, this story here reminds me of the lesson that was taught.
You love your wife so; your pride was partially in the way, BUT you loved her so that you couldn't bare for her to go through any additional emotional stress, while you bared the burdens. In turn, she did exactly what you did (HELLO), she put her anxitey and emotions to the side in order to care and tend to your physical and mental needs, so you can better yourself.
I tell you God is amazing. You know why? I will tell you...because love conqueros all! - this was your healing my friend. You know a lot of times, when we are sick, it can be something serious, but not as serious as we think it is; typically a sickness can be intensified by what we think it is, thereby making us more sick.
God used her to redirect your thoughts to somthing positive. The human mind is the strongest part of our well being. It can hinder us or keep us at peace.
I will be praying for your full recovery James, for any aliments that may still be hurting.
After the storm always comes Gods bow (rainbow) in the sky...God showed me love when I read this scripture...
1 Corthinathians 13:4-7, "Love is patient and kind; love does not envy or boast; it is not arrogant or rude. It does not insist on its own way; it is not irritable or resentful;it does not rejoice at wrongdoing, but rejoices with the truth. Love bears all things, believes all things, hopes all things, endures all things.
1 Corthinathians 13:13,"So now faith, hope, and love abide, these three; but the greatest of these is love."
When you look at your wife - always remember, LOVE keeps no record of wrongs and it bears all things.
I loved this story and I would give it a six, but I have no more to give my friend.
Many blessings! Sorry for it being so long, but I am drawn to tribulations and TRIMUPH!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi Nicci,
well this is take two for me on this reply. I tried this morning, and I had written a little story back , of which you were number seven... And then the power went out and I lost everything... Something definitely suspect with this story, from start to finish.
So, I was just reading Jade your beautifully written review and got all the way to the Corinthians 13:13, and boom!... Didn't know if it was a message or not.
And ,I do know that our Creator is amazing, and never doubt the hidden lesson behind any action... It's just deciphering the actual meaning, that's the tricky part.
Thank you so much for another truly amazing review. Your reviews are great little stories all on their own, and I enjoy them so much.
So, take care and love to you and your husband. Your hubby sounds like my kind of man!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment from adewpearl
Rating of Chapter 2 - My Erroneous Journey ~~ Part 2
You're been gone - You've been
Surly this would ease my mind - Surely
her need to care for her husband, became - drop comma
What a thoughtful closing :-)
I'm glad things are getting better after such a scare, which you describe in great detail and with intense emotion :-)
Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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You're been gone - You've been
Surly this would ease my mind - Surely
her need to care for her husband, became - drop comma
What a thoughtful closing :-)
I'm glad things are getting better after such a scare, which you describe in great detail and with intense emotion :-)
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Hi Brooke,
sorry I have to say this, but thank you for the edit, I do appreciate your keen eye... And who knows, I might actually get through one day without you finding anything... Oh well, a man can dream, can't he?
Thanks Brooke, you are appreciated!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
