The Heart of Poetry
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Comment from amanda98653
A beautiful poem you've written there, Carolyn:)
The title is lovely: Come Morning.
The symbolic meaning of "morning" is significant.
Mornings suggests the notions of illumination and hope, the beginning of a new day and thus a chance for happiness and improvement.
Sunrise is a symbol of birth and of awakening. The coming of light, resurrection
The first stanza is lovely:
"The night and the blackness of it
has finally passed into the beyond
into that mysterious place
called the other side of the world
where twilight, moon and stars dwell"
The blackness of night differs from mornings. Darkness is largely associated with death and destruction (opposing the positive connotations which mornings signify)
"has finally passed"- foreshadowing the arrival of dawn.
beautiful use of personification- "where twilight, moon, and stars dwell"
The LOVE the second stanza:
"Yet in its place
a fabulous transformation occurs
morning breaks with a glorious
burst of color on the horizon
and the soft wispy fog dissipates
like sleepy-time sweetness from
the eyes of an awakening child"
The transition from a bleak darkness to the glorious sunrise, it's very effective.
A beautiful imagery is conveyed here "glorious burst of color on the horizon"- one of the five sense: sight
"and the soft wispy fog dissipates"
Fog refers to obscurity, it fades
love the simile here- "like sleepy-time sweetness from
the eyes of an awakening child"
child suggests hope and innocence
Morning light comes, hope arises.
Words of optimism and wisdom here:
"stretch your arms, elevate your spirit
embrace yourself and who you are
prepare yourself well, night is over
today, this new day, is your day to shine "
verbs like "stretch", "elevate", and "embrace"-suggest a positive connotation- this links well with "your day to shine"
Very beautiful, Carolyn
Free verse- strong, hopeful emotions flowing out
God bless,
Amanda
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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A beautiful poem you've written there, Carolyn:)
The title is lovely: Come Morning.
The symbolic meaning of "morning" is significant.
Mornings suggests the notions of illumination and hope, the beginning of a new day and thus a chance for happiness and improvement.
Sunrise is a symbol of birth and of awakening. The coming of light, resurrection
The first stanza is lovely:
"The night and the blackness of it
has finally passed into the beyond
into that mysterious place
called the other side of the world
where twilight, moon and stars dwell"
The blackness of night differs from mornings. Darkness is largely associated with death and destruction (opposing the positive connotations which mornings signify)
"has finally passed"- foreshadowing the arrival of dawn.
beautiful use of personification- "where twilight, moon, and stars dwell"
The LOVE the second stanza:
"Yet in its place
a fabulous transformation occurs
morning breaks with a glorious
burst of color on the horizon
and the soft wispy fog dissipates
like sleepy-time sweetness from
the eyes of an awakening child"
The transition from a bleak darkness to the glorious sunrise, it's very effective.
A beautiful imagery is conveyed here "glorious burst of color on the horizon"- one of the five sense: sight
"and the soft wispy fog dissipates"
Fog refers to obscurity, it fades
love the simile here- "like sleepy-time sweetness from
the eyes of an awakening child"
child suggests hope and innocence
Morning light comes, hope arises.
Words of optimism and wisdom here:
"stretch your arms, elevate your spirit
embrace yourself and who you are
prepare yourself well, night is over
today, this new day, is your day to shine "
verbs like "stretch", "elevate", and "embrace"-suggest a positive connotation- this links well with "your day to shine"
Very beautiful, Carolyn
Free verse- strong, hopeful emotions flowing out
God bless,
Amanda
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Dear Amanda, this is such a wonderful and overwhelming review from you. The time you have taken, the insightful comments, and the general enjoyment of the read is awesome. Thank you so much, Carolyn
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My pleasure:) Hugs Amanda
Comment from jmdg1954
energize in the rapture of the mornings light
bathe in the abundant opportunities
that await you
confirmed anew for you and you alone
stretch your arms, elevate your spirit
embrace yourself and who you are
prepare yourself well, night is over
today, this new day, is your day to shine
Awesome, written with feeling and emotion, giving one hope in the new day, for a new day. Carolyn, this is great. Your choice of words magnify the meaning to the start of a new day.
Sorry I have not read and reviewed sooner, but I've been working crazy long hours. Getting here to FS when I can. John
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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energize in the rapture of the mornings light
bathe in the abundant opportunities
that await you
confirmed anew for you and you alone
stretch your arms, elevate your spirit
embrace yourself and who you are
prepare yourself well, night is over
today, this new day, is your day to shine
Awesome, written with feeling and emotion, giving one hope in the new day, for a new day. Carolyn, this is great. Your choice of words magnify the meaning to the start of a new day.
Sorry I have not read and reviewed sooner, but I've been working crazy long hours. Getting here to FS when I can. John
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I'm glad you liked this John. I have wondered what you were up too. (Take care of yourself John. I have been grieving for you since the Yankees did not make the playoffs, sniff, sniff, like the Cardinals did, hehehe.... smirk, choke, cough on my own lie....:-) Now, that is said and done, cheer for us OK? Go Cards, love, Carolyn
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Yikes, your Cards are down 2-1 now. Ohhhhh, my poor Yankees! Questions at every position. This never would have happened if George were alive...
I'm Dodger rooting. The only reason is because my all time favorite ball player is there manager!!
Later, John
Comment from GracieAnn
notesandmore, this free Verse Poetry Contest entry utilizes vivid metal imagery of the characteristics of the movement from dusk to dawn. Solid word choices that convey the ambiance desired. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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notesandmore, this free Verse Poetry Contest entry utilizes vivid metal imagery of the characteristics of the movement from dusk to dawn. Solid word choices that convey the ambiance desired. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks GracieAnn for the great review and well wishes. It would be nice to win, however, the wonderful peer reviews of this one makes me feel like a winner already. :-) Carolyn
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Yes, in reality, the peer reviews tell a deeper story. :0 GracieAnn
Comment from mfowler
You've used wonderfully evocative language in this well composed free verse. Your metaphorical stance on the positivity of new mornings/new opportunities is very well develop and quite inspiring.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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You've used wonderfully evocative language in this well composed free verse. Your metaphorical stance on the positivity of new mornings/new opportunities is very well develop and quite inspiring.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Well thank you so very much for this wonderful review. Have a good night, Carolyn
Comment from emjaihammond
This is a beautiful thought to start the day with. You have brought your thoughts together in a beautiful way and one in which the reader of your work can understand your point and enjoy it too.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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This is a beautiful thought to start the day with. You have brought your thoughts together in a beautiful way and one in which the reader of your work can understand your point and enjoy it too.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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I am so happy you enjoyed this one, thanks for the great review and rating, :-) Carolyn
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to create flow of thought from line to line
vivid descriptive detail of place
I particularly like the imagery in the passage about the fog's dissipating
opportunities that awaits you - opportunities that await
You deliver a most thoughtful message in good poetic form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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excellent use of enjambment to create flow of thought from line to line
vivid descriptive detail of place
I particularly like the imagery in the passage about the fog's dissipating
opportunities that awaits you - opportunities that await
You deliver a most thoughtful message in good poetic form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 06-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Thanks Brooke for the wonderful review and the edit. We are both up late, have a wonderful Sunday, :-) Carolyn
Comment from zanya
A poetic celebration of the the dawn of another new day. If only we could approach each new day with this invigorating freshness.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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A poetic celebration of the the dawn of another new day. If only we could approach each new day with this invigorating freshness.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thank you zanya (I love your pen-name) for the wonderful review and stars. I am so glad you enjoyed Come Morning. Carolyn
Comment from Benny Beeharry
I was so entranced by this poem. I just love. Gives me a new hope after trying to find why I am frustrated.now and then this feeling of frustration catches up with me.
You deserve a six.
Well done
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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I was so entranced by this poem. I just love. Gives me a new hope after trying to find why I am frustrated.now and then this feeling of frustration catches up with me.
You deserve a six.
Well done
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks Bennie for the comments and the awesome award. I am so glad you possibly found a ray of hope to get rid of your frustration. I appreciate you so much, Carolyn
Comment from Sagnik Das
Ah! this is HAUNTING, dear Carolyn (no lesser word shall suffice)! The way you unleash your descriptive prowess in the first stanza (marked by rhetorical overtones) is HAUNTING, & made me feel as though I were reading a work by Frost, or even -- De La Mare!
The select choice of aphorisms (along with the similes) you employ, deserve boundless appraisal ; lends to the work an intrinsic appeal of its own .... much akin to what one finds in the Pre-Raphaelites (Rossetti, Swinburne etc.) ..... and I quote :
"each morning is new
fresh, invigorating like the very first
that ever emerged to grace the earth
with its beauty, its vibrancy
grand and bold, a testimony to life
a new beginning, a new day" -- the metaphoric effect throughout this entire paragraph is remarkable, & made me feel as though I had been carried away to some desolate realm of enchantment.
Like a picturesque rendition by Rembrandt, your emotions flow ceaselessly in an astute array -- marked by ease & dignity -- capturing as though, with the stroke of a pen, the very essence of life's vigorous optimism.
I might go on for hours with my eulogizing review; yet fail to the slightest justice to your profundity. This is just OUTSTANDING (& were I the judge, you might as well have won!)...
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Ah! this is HAUNTING, dear Carolyn (no lesser word shall suffice)! The way you unleash your descriptive prowess in the first stanza (marked by rhetorical overtones) is HAUNTING, & made me feel as though I were reading a work by Frost, or even -- De La Mare!
The select choice of aphorisms (along with the similes) you employ, deserve boundless appraisal ; lends to the work an intrinsic appeal of its own .... much akin to what one finds in the Pre-Raphaelites (Rossetti, Swinburne etc.) ..... and I quote :
"each morning is new
fresh, invigorating like the very first
that ever emerged to grace the earth
with its beauty, its vibrancy
grand and bold, a testimony to life
a new beginning, a new day" -- the metaphoric effect throughout this entire paragraph is remarkable, & made me feel as though I had been carried away to some desolate realm of enchantment.
Like a picturesque rendition by Rembrandt, your emotions flow ceaselessly in an astute array -- marked by ease & dignity -- capturing as though, with the stroke of a pen, the very essence of life's vigorous optimism.
I might go on for hours with my eulogizing review; yet fail to the slightest justice to your profundity. This is just OUTSTANDING (& were I the judge, you might as well have won!)...
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Dear Sagnik, I awaited your review like a mere fledgling awaits the coming of the sumptuous meal provided by the caregiving parent. All reviewers comments are important to me, and I appreciate each one of them, but your remarks invigorate my heart and soul. You inspire me to reach higher, to do better, to excel, and in some small way, pay homage to the greats of old That you refer to as though they were your dearest friends. You are the awesome one, love, Carolyn
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Carolyn,
To divulge the truth the bounty is all thine,
For, I am naught save a trifle to your fine
and sublime prowess with wit & astute grace;
Your appraisal of my effort lights my face! :)
You know, Carolyn, my plight is exactly akin! I love your responses more than any other, & await them like a hopeless mendicant awaiting the benevolence of a Saintly Soul.
As for the rest, you know very well -- I consider you all as being none other than an integral part of my family itself. You people (along with these departed Gentlemen of yore).... are my life.
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smile :-)
Comment from Spitfire
Way to go, girl. First thing I'll do tomorrow morning (after getting dressed) will be to open the door and breathe in the sun and fresh air--eyes and ears and arms wide open. You convinced me this is the best time of day.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Way to go, girl. First thing I'll do tomorrow morning (after getting dressed) will be to open the door and breathe in the sun and fresh air--eyes and ears and arms wide open. You convinced me this is the best time of day.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Oh what a delightful review. Thank you Shari, have a wonderful evening, and enjoy the bounty of the morning. Love, Carolyn
