Comment from amaranthblue

Excellent

Such longing and sweetness swirled with beauty of soul and emotions... The images surrounded the pulsing tremors of the oceans heartbeat as the most perfect backdrop to paint the longings on...

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2005

Comment from lerkun

Excellent

what a beautiful verse Pili,
it is a very emotional piece with a warm liquid flow.
the grammar is wonderful, and a brilliant pic to match...... great work.......
lerk

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

lol, when I read the title to this poem, the first thing I thought as an answer was 'heart'...and then you have the middle stanza that contains the same- just perfectly.

Well done, great poem.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2005

Comment from Jewell McChesney

Excellent

As I long for you,
in a certain
hidden way,
in that quiet darkness
between night and soul
where I feel my love...
Without knowing how
or know any
other way to love...


Wow, is this about dreaming of the ocean, a love...?
I am feeling out of sync...
Beautiful nevertheless.
Jewell

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2005

Comment from Lpspider

Excellent

I think this is the best poem you've written in quite a while. It really stands out. Fantastic description and word choice/usuage. Very strong. Great comparisions in the wording. Good flow and imagery as well. I espeically liked the phrase, "the silence of the sand". It stood out.

Well done!

Lpspider

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2005

Comment from Black Wren

Excellent

Once again you astound me with the way you describe your emotions and weave them with the scene.
Well done and beautiful work.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2005

Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

A serene composition for an oceanic beauty that pervades your mind and impressing thoughts of your mind get deeply mingled with the wavy motion of the imortal ocean's throbing.
waves move
like throbbing petals,
trembling pulsations
caressing my body. That's what your openning stanza of your poem deals with.

Rest remains with your depressed mood as you seem to be dislocated or time splitted and getting your love curtained behind a gross miscommunication. Your love at a far off place happened to be totally disjoined by the same barrier which you can't cope up. So you end up in a nice manner...

Gently I shut my eyes
and dream of you
the one asleep,
far, far away... Gautam :o)

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2005

Comment from EmileJP

Excellent

I sense someone is home sick and you depend on your dreams to bring you back to home and heart. The ocean torches all shores and provides a connection to places and times separate by distance and tears. The lure of your words are soothing and reassuring calming the soul and preparing the ground for fruitful dreams to take root. A little melancholy with a slow pleasant pace that entraps the reader into your emotional flow and enlists sleep and thereby dreams.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2005

Comment from suneagle

Good

Very nice, Pili, and couples well with the picture.

that encircles the earth,
(I suggest a semi-colon ---
that encircles the earth; )

or know any
(or knowing any)

and dream of you
(You need punctuation ---
and dream of you; )

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2005

Comment from Zenbud

Excellent

This one begged to be read over and over. Nicely done with images and the ocean (love the sea) and longing. Such longing in this piece. Well done. Zen

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2005