Step-Mom
Kids run away when their dad remarries.30 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
That's a touching and very endearing story about kids who run away from their new step mom, only to find out that she really care about hem. Excellent poetic format using classic aabb rhyme scheme. Wonderful work!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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That's a touching and very endearing story about kids who run away from their new step mom, only to find out that she really care about hem. Excellent poetic format using classic aabb rhyme scheme. Wonderful work!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and comments. I'm so glad you like this.
Beth
Comment from goompa
I raelly enjoyed your poem. It deals with a very important problem occurring in many families. The rhyme and meter are perfect,and it was easy to relate to since I have four step children.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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I raelly enjoyed your poem. It deals with a very important problem occurring in many families. The rhyme and meter are perfect,and it was easy to relate to since I have four step children.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. I'm sure there are many wonderful step parents out there who care about their children and would do anything to make life better for them. My daughter is a step mom. I know she loves the child.
Beth
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
WOW!! What can I say but excellent in versing, meter and plot. Seems that the 8 beat couplet is becoming popular these days Beth. Well done, enjoyed the rad from start to finish. Deserves a 6 but alas I ran out.
Regards:
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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WOW!! What can I say but excellent in versing, meter and plot. Seems that the 8 beat couplet is becoming popular these days Beth. Well done, enjoyed the rad from start to finish. Deserves a 6 but alas I ran out.
Regards:
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I had it as a quatrain but that is what I always do so I grouped it as eight just to make it different.
Beth
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a skillfully-written narrative poem telling a moving, lovely story--a realistic one because it fits so many families. God bless stepparents who really care for children.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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This is a skillfully-written narrative poem telling a moving, lovely story--a realistic one because it fits so many families. God bless stepparents who really care for children.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you Janice. I really appreciate the review and the wonderful comments.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
What a absolutely lovely poem. Such emotion and such feeling enclosed in the words. I also loved the picture. Is that a real one of your kids many years ago? Well done I loved it. So often you hear the opposite especially in De Facto situations where new "Dad's" reject the children of a previous relationship. Lovely and thanks again
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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What a absolutely lovely poem. Such emotion and such feeling enclosed in the words. I also loved the picture. Is that a real one of your kids many years ago? Well done I loved it. So often you hear the opposite especially in De Facto situations where new "Dad's" reject the children of a previous relationship. Lovely and thanks again
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the review and for the wonderful comments. No, I found that picture on line and wanted to write something so I could use it.
Beth
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Well you did good then
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
It has to be a very traumatic time for children when someone new comes in to "replace" their mother or dad. There has to be a lot of mixed emotions. very nicely done. Gdo loves you and so do we.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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It has to be a very traumatic time for children when someone new comes in to "replace" their mother or dad. There has to be a lot of mixed emotions. very nicely done. Gdo loves you and so do we.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you Evelyn, I really appreciate the review and the nice comments. A child is lucky if the new parent cares enough to break through the wall of distrust that children often put up.
Beth
Comment from Tessa Kay
Didn't know you can change your rating. Will happily do so.
And I know what you mean about reading what you think you wrote. that's why the likes of FanStory is invaluable.
Hope you'll do well in the competition.
Tessa
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Didn't know you can change your rating. Will happily do so.
And I know what you mean about reading what you think you wrote. that's why the likes of FanStory is invaluable.
Hope you'll do well in the competition.
Tessa
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for catching those errors. I when I read it I guess I read what I thought I'd written. I've fixed it now. I hope you'll look again and change the rating.
Thanks,
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
AHHHHHHHHHHH, often the step-mom is a good person and a wonderful mom, but sometimes things go the other way. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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AHHHHHHHHHHH, often the step-mom is a good person and a wonderful mom, but sometimes things go the other way. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Good luck.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you Barbara. I appreciate the rating and comments.
Beth
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I must say I am pleased to see you wrote a poem and a lovely job you did too. It has lovely rhyme and rhythm and tells a great story about love lost and new love found. Good luck in the contest Beth. Nancy
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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I must say I am pleased to see you wrote a poem and a lovely job you did too. It has lovely rhyme and rhythm and tells a great story about love lost and new love found. Good luck in the contest Beth. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the six star rating. I so pleased you liked this.
Beth
Comment from denhagan
This is a beautiful poem, written in octaves with rhyming couplets, that tells a story of two children coming to love their step-mom. Good rhythm and rhyming.
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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This is a beautiful poem, written in octaves with rhyming couplets, that tells a story of two children coming to love their step-mom. Good rhythm and rhyming.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments. I'm pleased you liked it.
Beth
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You're welcome Beth,
Dennis
