Step-Mom
Kids run away when their dad remarries.30 total reviews
Comment from steevie
My eyes watered a tiny little bit(says the big tough man that I am)when I read this moving piece. I thought for sure when I started to read, it would be another stepmother horror story, but instead, the stepmom turned out to be a loving and gentle woman. Not all woman are kind and compassionate ...
Well done, Beth
smiles
steve
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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My eyes watered a tiny little bit(says the big tough man that I am)when I read this moving piece. I thought for sure when I started to read, it would be another stepmother horror story, but instead, the stepmom turned out to be a loving and gentle woman. Not all woman are kind and compassionate ...
Well done, Beth
smiles
steve
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you Steve. I like knowing men can feel things enough to shed a tear. I glad you found this piece moving.
Beth
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Beth, your write was terrific
tears are gender neutral as far as I'm concerned and always have been
thank you, Beth
smiles
steve
Comment from Samuel Dickens
I love happy endings. Although my parents divorced when I was young, dad only acquired girlfriends and never married any of them. I'm glad it all worked out for these two.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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I love happy endings. Although my parents divorced when I was young, dad only acquired girlfriends and never married any of them. I'm glad it all worked out for these two.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you Samuel. I appreciate you reviewing this and I'm glad you liked the happy ending.
Beth
Comment from Sueellen11
Excellent entry,, what a story,, but so true many times the babes don't understand when all they want is their mommy and daddy,,, but other children can accept it without a worry,,good luck,,,ueellen
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Excellent entry,, what a story,, but so true many times the babes don't understand when all they want is their mommy and daddy,,, but other children can accept it without a worry,,good luck,,,ueellen
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Sueellen. I appreciate the review and excellent comments.
Beth
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
They know their new mom really cares.
That's all kids want... and what they need more than toys or a nice house and car. If parents would stop working two jobs to buy every new "must have" that is advertised and bought by all their neighbors, their kids might end up a lot happier just by having mom's attention ... instead, it goes to her job, even after work sometimes. Women should NOT have both careers and kids. Jobs, okay, but not careers. THe kids will suffer, and there's no way around that. Call me old-fashioned, but I'm old. I quit working when our child was born. Went back part time when she left for college.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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They know their new mom really cares.
That's all kids want... and what they need more than toys or a nice house and car. If parents would stop working two jobs to buy every new "must have" that is advertised and bought by all their neighbors, their kids might end up a lot happier just by having mom's attention ... instead, it goes to her job, even after work sometimes. Women should NOT have both careers and kids. Jobs, okay, but not careers. THe kids will suffer, and there's no way around that. Call me old-fashioned, but I'm old. I quit working when our child was born. Went back part time when she left for college.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Phyllis. I appreciate the review and you great insight on the best way to raise children. I'm sure you were an excellent mother an segregate mother for the teen age boy you took in. Too bad all mothers are like this.
Beth
Comment from humpwhistle
This is an excellent example of a story/poem, Beth,
and, in my opinion, a strong contender for the contest.
Strong rhymes and steady meter. Plus believe, realistic
characters.
Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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This is an excellent example of a story/poem, Beth,
and, in my opinion, a strong contender for the contest.
Strong rhymes and steady meter. Plus believe, realistic
characters.
Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Wow, Lee. Thanks for the six. This is high praise from someone who has written and wonderful story poem himself. I don't expect mine will be much competition against yours.
Beth
Comment from Mastery
This has to be based on a true life experience, Beth. Right? Either way it is a heartfelt story in a poem and I liked it...especially the outcome. Bob
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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This has to be based on a true life experience, Beth. Right? Either way it is a heartfelt story in a poem and I liked it...especially the outcome. Bob
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Bob. I really appreciate the review. It is more fiction, although my daughter has been a step-mom for nearly two years. She loves the fourteen year old boy and would do anything for him, but although he loves her, she doesn't get the respect she deserves. It is difficult to get respect from any teen ager these days.
Beth
Comment from adewpearl
great pairing of photo and poem
solid use of rhyming couplets
share their Dad - dad
excellent use of enjambment to keep the story flowing from line to line
I love the ending of this story when the children learn their new mom really does care for them :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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great pairing of photo and poem
solid use of rhyming couplets
share their Dad - dad
excellent use of enjambment to keep the story flowing from line to line
I love the ending of this story when the children learn their new mom really does care for them :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much, Brook. I appreciate the comments and help.
I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Cajungirl
Wow! What a great story in a poem. I simply loved it. I was so pleased that you poem had a happy ending for all.
Excellent -- Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Wow! What a great story in a poem. I simply loved it. I was so pleased that you poem had a happy ending for all.
Excellent -- Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments. I'm so glad you liked this.
Beth
Comment from Kingsland
What a delightful story line that was told in an excellent poetic verve. It flows very freely and was an easy to read piece of poetry. I enjoyed reading this poetic story line.it was well written with a very good cadence... John
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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What a delightful story line that was told in an excellent poetic verve. It flows very freely and was an easy to read piece of poetry. I enjoyed reading this poetic story line.it was well written with a very good cadence... John
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much John for the review and nice comments. I appreciate you reading this.
Beth
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Beth, this is a priceless story about a loving, caring and determined step mother. It isn't easy to gain confidence and trust, even when the 'kids' are in their 30's. :-) This is a wonderful story of success, thank God, mine is too.
Nicely done. :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Beth, this is a priceless story about a loving, caring and determined step mother. It isn't easy to gain confidence and trust, even when the 'kids' are in their 30's. :-) This is a wonderful story of success, thank God, mine is too.
Nicely done. :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 28-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you Carolyn. I appreciate the comments. I'm sure it is difficult. My daughter is a step mom. She has genuine love for the child and he seems to love her. She is having more trouble gaining his respect. He came to her at eleven.
Betj
