Step-Mom
Kids run away when their dad remarries.30 total reviews
Comment from mrskristinball
Beautiful story with a happy ending; I wonder how many step moms truly feel loved and appreciated by their step children? Or if the tragedies of life leave room for bitterness and resentment to grow? I like your version-joyful and positive:-)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Beautiful story with a happy ending; I wonder how many step moms truly feel loved and appreciated by their step children? Or if the tragedies of life leave room for bitterness and resentment to grow? I like your version-joyful and positive:-)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm sure there are many step-moms who never get the love and respect that would like to have. So many see what seems as disloyalty to their birth parent.
Beth
Comment from barleygirl
This is an adorable poem that I love on so many levels! I love the rhyming & rhythm, the word choice, but most of all, the lovely circuitous route that the story takes, all conveyed so believably & also with great imagery & feeling. Excellent job! I entered this contest, too, but I know I'm getting beat by you! *smile*
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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This is an adorable poem that I love on so many levels! I love the rhyming & rhythm, the word choice, but most of all, the lovely circuitous route that the story takes, all conveyed so believably & also with great imagery & feeling. Excellent job! I entered this contest, too, but I know I'm getting beat by you! *smile*
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the six star rating and the lovely comments. Don't be too sure your getting beat by me. You poem is very good.
Beth
Comment from webfoot
this is a very touching poem. I liked the rhyme scheme, it suits it well.
the story aspect of the poem is good because it takes us on a small journey through time.
I liked the happy ending of the journey
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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this is a very touching poem. I liked the rhyme scheme, it suits it well.
the story aspect of the poem is good because it takes us on a small journey through time.
I liked the happy ending of the journey
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
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you are welcome
Comment from T. White
This was very meaningful to me as my children have had a step-dad in their lives. The beginning is always hard and in time children learn that step-parents, at least some of them do love and care for them.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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This was very meaningful to me as my children have had a step-dad in their lives. The beginning is always hard and in time children learn that step-parents, at least some of them do love and care for them.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the six star review and the comments. Yes, I think it is usually hard when a new member is added to the family. Thanks for sharing your experience.
Beth
Comment from MAMONIA
This is quite sad, but so true. It is so difficult
for children to understand when Dad marries again.
Who is this person if not their mother?
It reminds me of the movie StepMom. This was done
so well and has a real moral at the end. Accepting
is not easy for kids, but eventually they do come
around.
A very enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
Marie
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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This is quite sad, but so true. It is so difficult
for children to understand when Dad marries again.
Who is this person if not their mother?
It reminds me of the movie StepMom. This was done
so well and has a real moral at the end. Accepting
is not easy for kids, but eventually they do come
around.
A very enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
Marie
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I especially appreciate that it was the 26th review so that means it will be a Best of the Best rating.
Beth
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That's great!
Comment from expressions9
Ah.. that is such a lovely story, Beth :) The flow was great all the way and the rhyme and rhythm excellent. What a story! It's not easy for kids to have to adjust to a stepmother (I know from experience), but I'm glad the story had a lovely ending. Perfect matching photo - thanks for sharing and all the best!
God bless,
Christine
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Ah.. that is such a lovely story, Beth :) The flow was great all the way and the rhyme and rhythm excellent. What a story! It's not easy for kids to have to adjust to a stepmother (I know from experience), but I'm glad the story had a lovely ending. Perfect matching photo - thanks for sharing and all the best!
God bless,
Christine
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the wonderful six star review. I 'm glad you thought this worthy of such a rating. I usually find the picture first and let it inspire the poem or story.
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You're welcome :)
Comment from Belinda
An interesting and soothing story (humorous too) in a poem. I like the way the plot runs. I do hope this story of Cindy Sue and Danny Ray will win the contest... :)
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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An interesting and soothing story (humorous too) in a poem. I like the way the plot runs. I do hope this story of Cindy Sue and Danny Ray will win the contest... :)
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comment and good wishes for a win. Much appreciated.
Beth
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
This meaningful poem succeeds in telling a story. Its rhythm renders it easy to read and enjoyable.
A story in a poem gives me a better idea of how to write a poem that tells a story. I've entered a few, but wasn't sure whether or not I measured up.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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This meaningful poem succeeds in telling a story. Its rhythm renders it easy to read and enjoyable.
A story in a poem gives me a better idea of how to write a poem that tells a story. I've entered a few, but wasn't sure whether or not I measured up.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you Don, I appreciate the review and comments. I need to check out what you've been writing lately.
Beth
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Other than writing poms for fanStory contests, Beth, I've not written anything separate. For over two weeks now I've been contacting publisher and literary agents. I have what seems to be an ideal prospect for agenting my book of memoirs. But unlike most agetns, he asks for attachig the submission rather than pasting it into the body of the email.
What complicates matterss further is that Google, my server, made a change a few months ago. Whereas I could find "Edit," then paste my document into the body, I can no longer find those tools on Google. I've been trying through Internet exlorer, with success only with two pasted into the body of the email. I can't find any way to attach because it can't locate my dcuments. I think these ae on C file.
Any ideas?
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If it is things you've posted on FanStory they would still be in your portfolio and you could copy them from there. That is why I try to post everything I write in case my computer loses them.
Beth
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Thank you, Beth.
I did succeed years ago in copying a post of mine from portfolio to use elseqhere.
But a while after that, when I tried to copy a piece I failed. I thought they've chaged policy or something and I gav up on that.
I'll try again.
Comment from Spitfire
What a sweet story. You certainly have a way with rhyme, couplets in this case. The only flaw as I see it-stanza one indicates a search for adventure. Later on, I get the impression they want to escape Step Mom
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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What a sweet story. You certainly have a way with rhyme, couplets in this case. The only flaw as I see it-stanza one indicates a search for adventure. Later on, I get the impression they want to escape Step Mom
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the review and comments. At first I had escape routes lay beyond the yard. I think you are right that adventure isn't what the kids were looking for. I've changed it back.
Beth
Comment from AprilShower
I guess all it took was knowing that their step-mother really cared about them. This would be an adjustment for little ones. First their mother dies and then, they get a step-mother.
This is well written, Beth.
April
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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I guess all it took was knowing that their step-mother really cared about them. This would be an adjustment for little ones. First their mother dies and then, they get a step-mother.
This is well written, Beth.
April
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you April. I really appreciate your review and comments.
Beth
