Restoration
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your contest entry made me feel that I was taking this walk with you. Your descriptions were very good, and you have a strong entry. Good luck
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Your contest entry made me feel that I was taking this walk with you. Your descriptions were very good, and you have a strong entry. Good luck
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Barbara. I'm glad you enjoyed the walk by the sea along with me.
Beth
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Beth Shelby, I enjoyed reading your poem. It reads and flows well, and h as good imagery within. Of special note:
I felt the sand beneath my toes,
warm from the summer sun.
Then watching dolphins ride the waves,
I wished that I was one.
(Very good imagery)
Beth, ahh, the power of the sea and putting life into perspective. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Hello Beth Shelby, I enjoyed reading your poem. It reads and flows well, and h as good imagery within. Of special note:
I felt the sand beneath my toes,
warm from the summer sun.
Then watching dolphins ride the waves,
I wished that I was one.
(Very good imagery)
Beth, ahh, the power of the sea and putting life into perspective. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and lovely comments. I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
Beth
Comment from forestport12
I liked the cadence of this poem and how it had lovely rhythm and beat. I always love poems that compare human nature to nature itself and thinking of what the tide brings in and how you worded everything made my thoughts go further than you may have interpreted it. Stan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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I liked the cadence of this poem and how it had lovely rhythm and beat. I always love poems that compare human nature to nature itself and thinking of what the tide brings in and how you worded everything made my thoughts go further than you may have interpreted it. Stan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you Stan. I appreciate the review and lovely comments. I'm glad you liked this.
Beth
Comment from zanya
Yes is it any wonder we all want to rush to find the sand between our toes at the first hint of summer- therapeutic and restorative. The happy rhythm reflects the theme.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Yes is it any wonder we all want to rush to find the sand between our toes at the first hint of summer- therapeutic and restorative. The happy rhythm reflects the theme.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and lovely comments. Yes the sea is very relaxing.
Beth
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
A good poem about nature, Beth. It seems you've met the conditions for tehe writing prompt.
I'd guess the inspoiration for this beach poem must indicate close to where you live or vacation frequently.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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A good poem about nature, Beth. It seems you've met the conditions for tehe writing prompt.
I'd guess the inspoiration for this beach poem must indicate close to where you live or vacation frequently.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review. Unfortunately I don't live near water anymore. When we lived in New Orleans, we walked along the lake a lot and often drove over to Pensacola Beach or Gulflport but not it's only the Tennessee River.
Beth
Comment from Samuel Dickens
Excellent. I don't know how it goes, but there's an old Mexican saying about "being near water", and it's ability to heal and rejuvenate. Maybe because our own bodies contains so much of it, but there really does seem to be something to the notion.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Excellent. I don't know how it goes, but there's an old Mexican saying about "being near water", and it's ability to heal and rejuvenate. Maybe because our own bodies contains so much of it, but there really does seem to be something to the notion.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you Samuel. I've never thought of it that way but it is true that a walk along the water seems healing.
Beth
Comment from strandregs
I read it I enjoyed it very much.
I felt the rhythm suffered from the 'the'.
warm from' the'summer sun.
Warmed by summer's sun.
Warmed by smer sun.
A sunny warm delight.
A sun made warm delight
A sun bath warm delight
Etc...
Best. And good luck.Z.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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I read it I enjoyed it very much.
I felt the rhythm suffered from the 'the'.
warm from' the'summer sun.
Warmed by summer's sun.
Warmed by smer sun.
A sunny warm delight.
A sun made warm delight
A sun bath warm delight
Etc...
Best. And good luck.Z.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the review and for all the suggestions. I need six syllable to maintain the rhythm.
Beth
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Beth, I found myself strolling right by your side. The gulls, the treasures you found, the sand beneath your feet and the wishes to be a dolphin, (maybe just for a little while) were very easy to feel and see. Good luck, Carolyn
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Beth, I found myself strolling right by your side. The gulls, the treasures you found, the sand beneath your feet and the wishes to be a dolphin, (maybe just for a little while) were very easy to feel and see. Good luck, Carolyn
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you Carolyn. I'm so glad you enjoyed this enough to come along for the stroll.
Beth
Comment from djsaxon
Hi Beth. Wonderful deswcription of a 'healing' stroll. The imagery is strong, as is the flowing scansion. The language is all the more effective for being simple, the rhymes very natural and never forced. Well done, and good luck with the prompt. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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Hi Beth. Wonderful deswcription of a 'healing' stroll. The imagery is strong, as is the flowing scansion. The language is all the more effective for being simple, the rhymes very natural and never forced. Well done, and good luck with the prompt. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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I so pleased that you have read and commented on three of the things I wrote in a row. I really appreciate it.
Beth
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ur welcome :)
Comment from Charlene0513
To BethShelby,
Seagulls are not my favorite bird but if it pretty hard to neglect them as you see them and so many others fly south.
But getting to enjoy the last warm breezes of the year is welcoming.
I liked your metaphor of:I picked up treasures from the sea
the tide had left behind.
Charlene
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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To BethShelby,
Seagulls are not my favorite bird but if it pretty hard to neglect them as you see them and so many others fly south.
But getting to enjoy the last warm breezes of the year is welcoming.
I liked your metaphor of:I picked up treasures from the sea
the tide had left behind.
Charlene
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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Thank you Charlene. I appreciate the reveiw and the your comments.
Beth
