Another sonnet - Aussie Style
The iambic pentameter conquered!42 total reviews
Comment from FrannyG
As a fellow Aussie, I really appreciate this sort of send-up poetry and also appreciate the extra effort it takes to put it into sonnet form. I can tell you really enjoy doing it. I didn't find this one as funny or as clever as the first one but it's nevertheless very good.
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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As a fellow Aussie, I really appreciate this sort of send-up poetry and also appreciate the extra effort it takes to put it into sonnet form. I can tell you really enjoy doing it. I didn't find this one as funny or as clever as the first one but it's nevertheless very good.
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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No - I dashed this one off with considerably less thought, just to answer my critics! Glad you enjoyed it anyway!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hah, you are amazing, tfawcus, these Aussie style sonnets are a hoot! I appreciated you definitions you've so graciously included in your author's notes, but did not need them as I began guffawing less than halfway few this hilarious piece!
Thanks for another great laugh on an otherwise boring Sunday night, my friend!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Hah, you are amazing, tfawcus, these Aussie style sonnets are a hoot! I appreciated you definitions you've so graciously included in your author's notes, but did not need them as I began guffawing less than halfway few this hilarious piece!
Thanks for another great laugh on an otherwise boring Sunday night, my friend!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Glad you enjoyed it. Dean! I thought I'd better include a few definitions as there was an alarming number of people who didn't know what 'shouting a drink' meant in the first sonnet. They wouldn't manage very well here, Down Under!
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Pro'bly have no clue what Vegemite is, either, LOL...
Comment from denhagan
I thought this was a delightful English sonnet written Aussie style, with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem. Nice picture to go with the poem.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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I thought this was a delightful English sonnet written Aussie style, with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem. Nice picture to go with the poem.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thanks Dennis
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You're welcome,
Dennis
Comment from michaelcahill
here in California Laugh & Gaff rhyme perfectly. lot & shop require two ounces of any cheap liquor which is always no problem. this is an excellent sonnet then. filled with pathos and longing. Shakespeare himself would rise from the grave in praise if he wasn't still drunk. I say more, more, more! mike
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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here in California Laugh & Gaff rhyme perfectly. lot & shop require two ounces of any cheap liquor which is always no problem. this is an excellent sonnet then. filled with pathos and longing. Shakespeare himself would rise from the grave in praise if he wasn't still drunk. I say more, more, more! mike
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your review, Mike, and for your plea for an encore! I suppose that the Immortal Bard will just turn in his grave if he's too drunk to rise up from it!
Comment from Spitfire
I admit, I don't bother to check the mechanics but take it for granted you did it right. Four iambs are easy, but the fifth will drive you to drink. LOL
Perfect couplet to top off this effort.
They're sure to drop us down at least one star.
Oh shit! Let's do it for the bleeding laugh
You got it. Thumb your nose at the critics. :-)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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I admit, I don't bother to check the mechanics but take it for granted you did it right. Four iambs are easy, but the fifth will drive you to drink. LOL
Perfect couplet to top off this effort.
They're sure to drop us down at least one star.
Oh shit! Let's do it for the bleeding laugh
You got it. Thumb your nose at the critics. :-)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thanks Spitfire! A kind review for a coarse sonnet!
Comment from boxergirl
Well the dog with the beer bottle in his mouth had me from the start. So cute!
en I love how you defend your Aussie sonnet with sarcasm and wit. well done and congrats on your win!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Well the dog with the beer bottle in his mouth had me from the start. So cute!
en I love how you defend your Aussie sonnet with sarcasm and wit. well done and congrats on your win!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thanks Boxergirl. It's a great picture, isn't it? We have a Golden Labrador that always has a gift in his mouth, a foolish grin on his face and a tail that wags like a scythe, knocking over everything in its path. He's never brought me a beer though! Don't know why I put up with him really!
Comment from Dawn Munro
HAHAHAHAHAHA! OH GOOD HEAVENS, WHAT NEXT? I love your sense of humor, as well as this very irreverent sonnet, you bastar-#@!&^. HAHAHAHAHAHA!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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HAHAHAHAHAHA! OH GOOD HEAVENS, WHAT NEXT? I love your sense of humor, as well as this very irreverent sonnet, you bastar-#@!&^. HAHAHAHAHAHA!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Sound as if you got a good laugh from this one, Dawn! :)
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Nah, it was okay. (HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! I love the picture, too. GOOD dog.)
Comment from ruminative scribbler
Congratulations on your victory mate!
Thoroughly enjoyed this and it fair made me guffaw - fair dinkum :D
...So did your author's notes - hilarious! I have always loved the word, 'strewth' but was completely ignorant as to it's origination until now - thanks for sharing :)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Congratulations on your victory mate!
Thoroughly enjoyed this and it fair made me guffaw - fair dinkum :D
...So did your author's notes - hilarious! I have always loved the word, 'strewth' but was completely ignorant as to it's origination until now - thanks for sharing :)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Glad you enjoyed it and that it gave you a bit of a laugh! Thanks for the kind comments.
Comment from vapros
Go 'head on, Tony! This is a lot of fun, but the author notes are all needed, and you skipped one - scansion. Does it have something to with the meter, the cadence? In my country, bush-whack is another phrase for 'ambush'. Anyway, this is a fine poem, and I enjoyed it.
v
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Go 'head on, Tony! This is a lot of fun, but the author notes are all needed, and you skipped one - scansion. Does it have something to with the meter, the cadence? In my country, bush-whack is another phrase for 'ambush'. Anyway, this is a fine poem, and I enjoyed it.
v
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Many thanks for your review, v. Delighted that you enjoyed the poem. I didn't include scansion in the author's notes as it isn't specifically an 'Australianism'. Wikipedia defines it thus:'Scansion (verb: to scan) is the act of determining and (usually) graphically representing the metrical character of a line of verse.' It is a reasonably common term used when analysing poetry.
Comment from krys123
Thank you very much for sharing this poem with fans, myself another reader/writer's. I enjoyed your poem very much about the writing of your other piece. The rhymes in this particular, neither strained, labored or forced. The my thought was quite well all I can say that it was iambic pentameter all the tempo seem to work very well. all the rhythms combined with the ridings made it very easy for me to read your poem. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for sharing this poem with fans, myself another reader/writer's. I enjoyed your poem very much about the writing of your other piece. The rhymes in this particular, neither strained, labored or forced. The my thought was quite well all I can say that it was iambic pentameter all the tempo seem to work very well. all the rhythms combined with the ridings made it very easy for me to read your poem. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your comments Krys
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You are so welcome.
