Another sonnet - Aussie Style
The iambic pentameter conquered!42 total reviews
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I am fast growing to like your poems my friend. I have had several Aussie friends. I am Scottish and Irish by birth. So I understand the humor. I will be looking for you my friend.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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I am fast growing to like your poems my friend. I have had several Aussie friends. I am Scottish and Irish by birth. So I understand the humor. I will be looking for you my friend.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Jill. So glad that you are enjoying my poems! I'm originally from the south of England - many years in Wiltshire!
Comment from teafor2
tfawcus--This is splendid! A bit gratuitous perhaps, but poets,
wordsmiths and the like have been known to use their
wit and wit at once to bring respite or as a retort for
some perceived slight or because his/her muse sorta pushed
in a particular direction.:) Anyhow an uplifting humorous
constraint that makes for an excellent read. teafor2
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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tfawcus--This is splendid! A bit gratuitous perhaps, but poets,
wordsmiths and the like have been known to use their
wit and wit at once to bring respite or as a retort for
some perceived slight or because his/her muse sorta pushed
in a particular direction.:) Anyhow an uplifting humorous
constraint that makes for an excellent read. teafor2
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Teafor2. This was just a flippant response to one or two wise critics who had the honesty to chide me! I perceived no slights! It is refreshing that there are people on this site prepared to say it as they see it. That's what criticism is all about!
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U R welcome, but my badd on your motives.
Thanks for graciously bailing me out.:)
Comment from pipersfancy
Loved the first instalment... loved this second enactment just as much, if not more. Your fine notes serve us well in translating your 'Aussie vernacular'.
When can I expect the third in the series?
PF
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Loved the first instalment... loved this second enactment just as much, if not more. Your fine notes serve us well in translating your 'Aussie vernacular'.
When can I expect the third in the series?
PF
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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I'm saving up for another carton of beer.
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If it's a charity fund you're needing for inspirational spirits, I'll organize one and start it off by throwing a "toonie" into the pot. (That is Canadian vernacular.)
Keep writing, man! Keep writing!
PF
Comment from kiwijenny
We had a friend who had a Galah...it was a very raucous parrot.....I digress...I like your poem have never really cared for iambic pentameter .i like your Aussie twang.............kiwi that I am laugh doesn't rhyme with gaff, more like scarf.......but you cannot write to please every body ....Please yourself .
God bless
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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We had a friend who had a Galah...it was a very raucous parrot.....I digress...I like your poem have never really cared for iambic pentameter .i like your Aussie twang.............kiwi that I am laugh doesn't rhyme with gaff, more like scarf.......but you cannot write to please every body ....Please yourself .
God bless
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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Thanks Jenny! The laugh/scarf was a deliberate gaff - just for the laff - and to make sense of the closing couplet!
Comment from harmony13
This poem made the reader laugh! The author's poem was creative, thought provoking and detailed! The reader found the poem funny and enjoyed the read. The artwork was great and complimented the poem. Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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This poem made the reader laugh! The author's poem was creative, thought provoking and detailed! The reader found the poem funny and enjoyed the read. The artwork was great and complimented the poem. Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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Many thanks! I'm delighted to hear that you were in harmony with this one!
Comment from ravenblack
This is why I avoid sonnets- can't teach my dog to fetch me a brew. Great wit, love all the Aussie style words. Galah- never heard that one. I know you know you are succeeding with each one and they are so enjoyable to read that I implore you to keep trying.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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This is why I avoid sonnets- can't teach my dog to fetch me a brew. Great wit, love all the Aussie style words. Galah- never heard that one. I know you know you are succeeding with each one and they are so enjoyable to read that I implore you to keep trying.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2013
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Thanks again, Ravenblack, for your kind review! I may see if I can pull another rabbit out of the hat! Come to think of it - rabbits might be just the right theme!
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. I like the lighthearted tone with the serious form. I felt the meter in this one. I really enjoyed this poem.
Barbara
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. I like the lighthearted tone with the serious form. I felt the meter in this one. I really enjoyed this poem.
Barbara
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Barbara. Good fun writing this one!
Comment from AudreyRose
This was wonderful, It put a smile on my face. What a way to put a light air on learning from your mistakes. You did a great job here.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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This was wonderful, It put a smile on my face. What a way to put a light air on learning from your mistakes. You did a great job here.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thanks, AudreyRose. So glad you enjoyed it. This one was fun to write!
Comment from Righteous Riter
This poem stays consistent with the Sonnet rhyme scheme. Good perfect rhyming with form/norm. Good proximate rhyming. Nice sooth flow as the photo along with the message adds humor to the piece. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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This poem stays consistent with the Sonnet rhyme scheme. Good perfect rhyming with form/norm. Good proximate rhyming. Nice sooth flow as the photo along with the message adds humor to the piece. Good job.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your affirmative review, Righteous Riter. This one was dashed off without much thought but seems to have turned out all right. Just a bit of idle amusement!
Comment from Ducorse
Well done.
To offset all the purest, whose slings and arrows you will surly have to bear, I grant you these six stars.
The authors notes are almost as humorous as the poem.
Thanks for another great read.
Thanks for a wonderful read.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Well done.
To offset all the purest, whose slings and arrows you will surly have to bear, I grant you these six stars.
The authors notes are almost as humorous as the poem.
Thanks for another great read.
Thanks for a wonderful read.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Many thanks for your review and six-star rating! Much appreciated!
