From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "The shores of my soul."Mostly romance.
28 total reviews
Comment from Kingsland
this is a very nice piece of poetry
and written in your style
there isa nothing that I would suggest to change... John
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this is a very nice piece of poetry
and written in your style
there isa nothing that I would suggest to change... John
Comment Written 29-Jun-2005
Comment from mroby731
A very good poem. I always enjoy your work. I saw no spelling or grammatical errors. The emotion is always present and fulfilling.
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A very good poem. I always enjoy your work. I saw no spelling or grammatical errors. The emotion is always present and fulfilling.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2005
Comment from Bryana
My dear friend, I can feel your sadness as
the time for departure nears. I've been in
this predicament so many times. I feel sorry
for you. I can see the pain in your poem. It is
beautiful but it shows how you feel.
Un afectuoso abrazo.
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My dear friend, I can feel your sadness as
the time for departure nears. I've been in
this predicament so many times. I feel sorry
for you. I can see the pain in your poem. It is
beautiful but it shows how you feel.
Un afectuoso abrazo.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
Comment from AuroraSky
Beautiful picture, hard walk with you. I can feel the clock counting down the hours etc until you say bye (see- no good to add here), to the sweet ones in Scotland.
Such a shame such great times shared are ended by having to leave them, to return home. It would be difficult having them so far away from you most of the time...only to become harder because the pleasure of being with them is right there, pulling at you...saying 'don't leave'.
When going against wishes sux!
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Beautiful picture, hard walk with you. I can feel the clock counting down the hours etc until you say bye (see- no good to add here), to the sweet ones in Scotland.
Such a shame such great times shared are ended by having to leave them, to return home. It would be difficult having them so far away from you most of the time...only to become harder because the pleasure of being with them is right there, pulling at you...saying 'don't leave'.
When going against wishes sux!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
Comment from Lpspider
This was probably one of your best poems' I've read in a while. Very strong with decent imagery and strong, powerful description. Very tight technical-wise as well. You've done a fantastic job with this piece. Excelent. No critism.
Lpspider
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This was probably one of your best poems' I've read in a while. Very strong with decent imagery and strong, powerful description. Very tight technical-wise as well. You've done a fantastic job with this piece. Excelent. No critism.
Lpspider
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
Comment from Black Wren
Another moving and beautifully written poem, though, the poem's theme is bitter and sad as you call out to the one who is slowly fading away.
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Another moving and beautifully written poem, though, the poem's theme is bitter and sad as you call out to the one who is slowly fading away.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
Comment from Jewell McChesney
The pic is fabulous and the poem oh so sad.
I read between the lines and feel an emptiness
waiting to be filled up.
I am sorry. I hope this isn't current.
The sentiment is tenderly saddening.
But this too shall pass....
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The pic is fabulous and the poem oh so sad.
I read between the lines and feel an emptiness
waiting to be filled up.
I am sorry. I hope this isn't current.
The sentiment is tenderly saddening.
But this too shall pass....
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
Comment from Mastery
This is one terrific poem, Pili. I gave it a four only because I believe it needs a couple of small adjustments. You have a lovely picture going with this and your words serve to heighten the mood of it. In the first stanza, "sent" my laments." I am not entirely sure of your meaning here because of the word, sent. Did you mean send, sense or perhaps for smell scent? In any event, if you meant "sent" it definitely tripped me up in the flow as I read it. Also, "Is" raining in my heart" Do you mean It's raining in my heart? Sorry, but that threw me also. This is such a good poem, I wonder if you might not want to take a look at these things I mentioned. Bravo! Bob
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This is one terrific poem, Pili. I gave it a four only because I believe it needs a couple of small adjustments. You have a lovely picture going with this and your words serve to heighten the mood of it. In the first stanza, "sent" my laments." I am not entirely sure of your meaning here because of the word, sent. Did you mean send, sense or perhaps for smell scent? In any event, if you meant "sent" it definitely tripped me up in the flow as I read it. Also, "Is" raining in my heart" Do you mean It's raining in my heart? Sorry, but that threw me also. This is such a good poem, I wonder if you might not want to take a look at these things I mentioned. Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
Comment from suneagle
A nice, strong emotional poem. Well done, Pili.
Is raining in my heart
(It's raining... )
How to express
my sorrow!
(...my sorrow?)
My tremulous
(My trembling)
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A nice, strong emotional poem. Well done, Pili.
Is raining in my heart
(It's raining... )
How to express
my sorrow!
(...my sorrow?)
My tremulous
(My trembling)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
Comment from lavina
T's is a lovely poem. I like the part where the Spirit will depart at sometime and go from this earth. The fact that it has to happen sometime is clearly said. It has a feeling of peace.
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T's is a lovely poem. I like the part where the Spirit will depart at sometime and go from this earth. The fact that it has to happen sometime is clearly said. It has a feeling of peace.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2005
