From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "The shores of my soul."Mostly romance.
28 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
A very dramatic write!! I got all caught up in this, Pili:
It's raining in my heart
as I mourn
knowing all of you
will be left behind,
that my being
inevitably
will slowly disappear
from this Earth.
Sigh, parting is such sweet sorrow!!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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A very dramatic write!! I got all caught up in this, Pili:
It's raining in my heart
as I mourn
knowing all of you
will be left behind,
that my being
inevitably
will slowly disappear
from this Earth.
Sigh, parting is such sweet sorrow!!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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It is a few moments sometimes my sweet friend, but not too often. Thank you so much Gungalita.
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Sigh ...
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I hear it, LOL.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem, Pili Pubul. It is cleverly written and well thought out. It sounds a bit lonely and sad, especially the last verse.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem, Pili Pubul. It is cleverly written and well thought out. It sounds a bit lonely and sad, especially the last verse.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much.
Comment from MelissaBickel
I love this free verse poem. Writing it as such has allowed the feeling of departure to be even more intense, the feelings deeper. Nice to read! Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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I love this free verse poem. Writing it as such has allowed the feeling of departure to be even more intense, the feelings deeper. Nice to read! Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from purrfect tale
I'm not a poet so I don't know or understand the rules about meter or rhyme. But this poem really spoke to me. The very first stanza captured my attention and drew me in!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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I'm not a poet so I don't know or understand the rules about meter or rhyme. But this poem really spoke to me. The very first stanza captured my attention and drew me in!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Very meaningful comment , thank you.
Comment from Cheryl In Minnesota
Oh, this is beautiful. Very powerful and touching. There is a real depth of sadness and loss. I really like the way you added "of my being" after "from the Earth." Do you want to capitalize Earth? I can see how you might not want to in this particular metaphorical instance. Nice, nice work.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Oh, this is beautiful. Very powerful and touching. There is a real depth of sadness and loss. I really like the way you added "of my being" after "from the Earth." Do you want to capitalize Earth? I can see how you might not want to in this particular metaphorical instance. Nice, nice work.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Thank you my friend I capitalized Earth !
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Sure. Just yesterday, someone reminded me to capitalize Barbies :)
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LOL
Comment from The Stranger
I am sensing the legendary ships that pass in the night scenario whilst reading this poem, as two souls slowly drift apart forever
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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I am sensing the legendary ships that pass in the night scenario whilst reading this poem, as two souls slowly drift apart forever
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much my friend.
Comment from Denise S
Your words were nicely used to display your feelings here I think. Your title was quite interesting too and you wrote about it well
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Your words were nicely used to display your feelings here I think. Your title was quite interesting too and you wrote about it well
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from amaranthblue
From the title to the end I was entranced within your words... This held so many amazing phrases "Leave me
by the shores
of my soul," and "
It's raining in my heart " simply breathtaking...
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From the title to the end I was entranced within your words... This held so many amazing phrases "Leave me
by the shores
of my soul," and "
It's raining in my heart " simply breathtaking...
Comment Written 06-Jul-2005
Comment from Graceheart
Oh Darling Lady, If only I might venture to those waiting shores, your arms would be filled and bliss would be yours. Heaven would find you near the samds of your heart, two lovers in rapture never to be apart! I don't know where that came from but it sure sounded good! Loved this piece, sehow it inspired me! It took me to a place of hearts Paradise where longings are real and love is too! Loved this one so much my awesome friend!
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Oh Darling Lady, If only I might venture to those waiting shores, your arms would be filled and bliss would be yours. Heaven would find you near the samds of your heart, two lovers in rapture never to be apart! I don't know where that came from but it sure sounded good! Loved this piece, sehow it inspired me! It took me to a place of hearts Paradise where longings are real and love is too! Loved this one so much my awesome friend!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2005
Comment from clhutchinson
Through the well matched metaphors coupled with the deep expression of thoughts, the pain of departure comes through with vivid imagery and well felt painful emotions. Free flowing as always.
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Through the well matched metaphors coupled with the deep expression of thoughts, the pain of departure comes through with vivid imagery and well felt painful emotions. Free flowing as always.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2005
