The Animal Doctor
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Comment from CR Delport
Quite an interesting read. Just a few suggestions. If you dont like them, just ignore:
"He's just jealous caused I'm better looking," Lawerence answered, --- Lawrence ???
"Oh! That would be me...my good man," Lawernce said, --- Lawrence ???
Cher Ami fournd himself in a thunderstorm of bullets. --- Cher Ami found himself in a thunderstorm of bullets.
the gallent bird kept flying, --- gallant ???
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Quite an interesting read. Just a few suggestions. If you dont like them, just ignore:
"He's just jealous caused I'm better looking," Lawerence answered, --- Lawrence ???
"Oh! That would be me...my good man," Lawernce said, --- Lawrence ???
Cher Ami fournd himself in a thunderstorm of bullets. --- Cher Ami found himself in a thunderstorm of bullets.
the gallent bird kept flying, --- gallant ???
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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I like your suggestions very much and will make those corrections. Thank you CR.
