Pale Sisters
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16 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Bill. Another great chapter. I like that this one explains something else unknown in the story line and unexpected. I believe this is going to be a wonderful book. Good luck. xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Hi Bill. Another great chapter. I like that this one explains something else unknown in the story line and unexpected. I believe this is going to be a wonderful book. Good luck. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Deborah, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Rasmine
Okay, cool, I am confused, but this is kind of cool. Where did you ever come up with the name Cancer?
Keep writing and I need to read more. :)
Have a good week. :)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Okay, cool, I am confused, but this is kind of cool. Where did you ever come up with the name Cancer?
Keep writing and I need to read more. :)
Have a good week. :)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Sophia's aunt Amanda named the children after their horoscope signs. Virgo, Libra, and Cancer.
Comment from Ulla
Bill, I have to concentrate hard to follow who's giving birth to who. But I think I'm just about hanging in there. I actually like the story a lot. Well written. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Bill, I have to concentrate hard to follow who's giving birth to who. But I think I'm just about hanging in there. I actually like the story a lot. Well written. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Sophia gave birth to Virgo and Libra, and Diana had Cancer, Amanda has claimed them all so they are the Pale Sisters.
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Thanks a lot. That helped.
Comment from nomi338
This story it seems, Is taking a somewhat dark turn, bodies are piling up all over the place. I sense that a major battle is looming on the horizon. The winner will probably turn out to be someone I had not expected, which makes it all the more enjoyable. I hate it when I can figure out the outcome of a suspense story.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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This story it seems, Is taking a somewhat dark turn, bodies are piling up all over the place. I sense that a major battle is looming on the horizon. The winner will probably turn out to be someone I had not expected, which makes it all the more enjoyable. I hate it when I can figure out the outcome of a suspense story.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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One might say that the bloody, ritual sacrafices during forced fertility, murder, and general take-over-the-world mindset would be strong indications that the darkness was all about. (yukyukyuk)
Comment from apky
>>The vehicle pulled away and was followed off the estate by a white paneled van. In the van were two men, two guns, and two shovels. <<
Well this sounds rather foreboding to me.
On the other hand the story leaves off at a real cling hanger which makes me want to come back and read how the story evolves further.
Apky
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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>>The vehicle pulled away and was followed off the estate by a white paneled van. In the van were two men, two guns, and two shovels. <<
Well this sounds rather foreboding to me.
On the other hand the story leaves off at a real cling hanger which makes me want to come back and read how the story evolves further.
Apky
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Good. Thanks for reviewing, apky.
Comment from JDRBAR
Now I'm confused. Sophia Pale gave birth to the first two infants. Diana gives birth to the third and is referred to as Mrs. Pale. And, Amanda Camp, Sophia's Aunt claims all three children as being hers.
Didn't Sophia just meet Diana in prison?
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Now I'm confused. Sophia Pale gave birth to the first two infants. Diana gives birth to the third and is referred to as Mrs. Pale. And, Amanda Camp, Sophia's Aunt claims all three children as being hers.
Didn't Sophia just meet Diana in prison?
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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There is a lot of information in each chapter and it's easy get confused. Sophia Pale gave birth to Virgo and Libra. Diana Camp gave birth to Cancer (who is Kolk). Amanda Pale has claimed all three as her children. The Pale Sisters.
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Okay, that helps. Thanks
Comment from Curly Girly
Ooh, this was a grisly read. Plenty of ritualistic rape, murder and deformity going on here. Breeding a disastrous orgy of illness and death. Science fiction horror in all its gory glory. Not my favourite bedtime reading but others may dig it...
In the van were two men, two guns, and two shovels.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Ooh, this was a grisly read. Plenty of ritualistic rape, murder and deformity going on here. Breeding a disastrous orgy of illness and death. Science fiction horror in all its gory glory. Not my favourite bedtime reading but others may dig it...
In the van were two men, two guns, and two shovels.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Thanks, CG, for the excellent review. I think the doctors may have made a final house call.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Your story is becoming very intriguing. I'm used to reading your excellent humor. This is equally good. You are multi-talented.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Your story is becoming very intriguing. I'm used to reading your excellent humor. This is equally good. You are multi-talented.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Thanks, Thomas, for the terrific review. I still have a backstory for the Magfas and Kolk to push in here before we get these girls too far into their deal.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a well written chapter. I think you do an excellent job with dialogue. This sounds like a doctor! The development of the chapter, although short, was strong and sets up the chapters to follow well. Great job.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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This is a well written chapter. I think you do an excellent job with dialogue. This sounds like a doctor! The development of the chapter, although short, was strong and sets up the chapters to follow well. Great job.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Michael, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
How frightening is this..
the doctors decide they should
go to the authorities, and then
disappear - never to be seen again.
such an intriguing story, Bill -
must try to make time to read more.
Margaret
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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How frightening is this..
the doctors decide they should
go to the authorities, and then
disappear - never to be seen again.
such an intriguing story, Bill -
must try to make time to read more.
Margaret
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the enthusiastic review, Margaret. Bill
