The Wait
Waiting to die.111 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
where does the life and time go you captured perfectly how hopeless it must seem well done my friend and thank you xxgazzagodbodxx
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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where does the life and time go you captured perfectly how hopeless it must seem well done my friend and thank you xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thanks again, "gbod"! livelylinda
Comment from Martin Chan
This poem " The Wait " is a nice poem composed rhyming in three lines six stanzas. The poem describes about the last days of a person waiting to die due to disease . A good presentation based on good imagination.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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This poem " The Wait " is a nice poem composed rhyming in three lines six stanzas. The poem describes about the last days of a person waiting to die due to disease . A good presentation based on good imagination.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thanks for reading. livelylinda
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Linda,
I am so sorry you have to go through so much discomfort and worry. I had cancer when I was 31 years old an was told I had 3 to 6 months to live. I am now a grandmother and I know I got a miracle as there was no way I should have lived. I fought that demon with all my strength and after I lived for 2 years they opened me up again and it was gone. So I know there are miracles out there. Is there a chance you could have a heart transplant? I would defy anyone to read this poem with a dry eye, I know I couldn't. You have used expressive word choices, the flow is smooth and the theme though sorrowful, is well written. Virtual six ****** Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Hi Linda,
I am so sorry you have to go through so much discomfort and worry. I had cancer when I was 31 years old an was told I had 3 to 6 months to live. I am now a grandmother and I know I got a miracle as there was no way I should have lived. I fought that demon with all my strength and after I lived for 2 years they opened me up again and it was gone. So I know there are miracles out there. Is there a chance you could have a heart transplant? I would defy anyone to read this poem with a dry eye, I know I couldn't. You have used expressive word choices, the flow is smooth and the theme though sorrowful, is well written. Virtual six ****** Blessings, chey
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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My cardiologist and I talked briefly about a heart transplant. However, the hearts are difficult to find and since I am at age 65, I would rather one be given to a younger person and give them a chance to live a life as I have already lived. Also, the recovery period would be longer than I have patience. . . This gives me time to be a rock for my 3 daughters, 1 granddaughter, 2 grandsons and 1 great-grandson. Thanks for reading and your kind words of hope. I have not given up, I'm too stubborn! livelylind
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Stay stubborn and don't give up! Hugs, chey
Comment from elchupakabra
Again, I offer my condolences to you and your family, however little comfort they may offer. I appreciate this piece and felt it had no SPAG or flow issues like the other piece I reviewed. The triplet stanzas were well writ and transitioned well. Really great work, and again, the best of luck in your journey into whatever afterlife awaits you.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Again, I offer my condolences to you and your family, however little comfort they may offer. I appreciate this piece and felt it had no SPAG or flow issues like the other piece I reviewed. The triplet stanzas were well writ and transitioned well. Really great work, and again, the best of luck in your journey into whatever afterlife awaits you.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you. livelylinda
Comment from TKField
Funny thing, I just posted a poem on time and the lack thereof a couple of days ago. This one is a lot more serious than mine but basically says the same thing. Loved the bucket list line as well as the poem as a whole. I just turned 55 today, so I'm well on the backside of existence already. I can relate. Check out "On Time" in my portfolio if you get a spare tick. I liked the rhyme scheme of the triplets here, especially good job.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Funny thing, I just posted a poem on time and the lack thereof a couple of days ago. This one is a lot more serious than mine but basically says the same thing. Loved the bucket list line as well as the poem as a whole. I just turned 55 today, so I'm well on the backside of existence already. I can relate. Check out "On Time" in my portfolio if you get a spare tick. I liked the rhyme scheme of the triplets here, especially good job.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you, TK. livelylinda
Comment from pipersfancy
Glad I saved one last 6th star this week - given to this poem for its clear language and intent. Live while you have life.
PF
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Glad I saved one last 6th star this week - given to this poem for its clear language and intent. Live while you have life.
PF
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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My mind is still strong but as my heart weakens, so do I, making it difficult to do all I would like to do. Thanks for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from chasennov
'The Wait.' We do not allow animals to suffer this way, but we will allow people to suffer incredible pain and discomfort and do nothing about that. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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'The Wait.' We do not allow animals to suffer this way, but we will allow people to suffer incredible pain and discomfort and do nothing about that. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thanks for reading and commenting. livelylinda
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You're most welcome, livelylinda.
Comment from mermaids
I wish you comfort at this time. Your words reflect how you feel and the tiredness of living with an illness. Excellent poetic form of the last two line rhyming.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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I wish you comfort at this time. Your words reflect how you feel and the tiredness of living with an illness. Excellent poetic form of the last two line rhyming.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your kind words. livelylinda
Comment from dragonpoet
If you feel your life in draining away, your talent isn't. This poem of tercets tell an emotional story of impending death and what needs to be done before you go. It also seems like what cancer patients and their families feel near the time of death.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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If you feel your life in draining away, your talent isn't. This poem of tercets tell an emotional story of impending death and what needs to be done before you go. It also seems like what cancer patients and their families feel near the time of death.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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My 17 years of coronary artery disease has changed to congestive heart failure. I could die at any time, six months maximum is their guess. I have chest pains almost every day. As my heart weakens, so do I. Thanks for reading and commenting. livelylinda
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You're welcome, Linda. The site will miss you.
Joan
Comment from Gungalo
dwelling on the good,
those most precious to me
and where I would rather be
time seems to stand still
and yet, flees hastily
as life drains from me incessantly
Don't think of the negative girl, it's bad for you. Look on the bright side and how many days you have come.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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dwelling on the good,
those most precious to me
and where I would rather be
time seems to stand still
and yet, flees hastily
as life drains from me incessantly
Don't think of the negative girl, it's bad for you. Look on the bright side and how many days you have come.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much. I am the rock for my entire family. My tears are hidden. livelylinda
