The Wait
Waiting to die.111 total reviews
Comment from Jackarrie
I can only say how sorry I am to hear of your condition. You are very brave. I am glad that you are dwelling on the good, and the precious moments. Your writing must be a joy for you to have in these times of uncertainty. It is a real case of one day at a time and an acceptance. I wish you the very best outcome.
dwelling on the good,
those most precious to me
and where I would rather be
time seems to stand still
and yet, flees hastily
as life drains from me incessantly
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I can only say how sorry I am to hear of your condition. You are very brave. I am glad that you are dwelling on the good, and the precious moments. Your writing must be a joy for you to have in these times of uncertainty. It is a real case of one day at a time and an acceptance. I wish you the very best outcome.
dwelling on the good,
those most precious to me
and where I would rather be
time seems to stand still
and yet, flees hastily
as life drains from me incessantly
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you,again. livelylinda
Comment from poeticpatchwork
A very touching poem though I'm sorry to read that it has a basis in reality. I can't imagine having such a serious condition for so long. Have a blessed day!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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A very touching poem though I'm sorry to read that it has a basis in reality. I can't imagine having such a serious condition for so long. Have a blessed day!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your kind words. livelylinda
Comment from Dean Kuch
J can relate completely, for I too have just twenty percent of heart function. They operated on me in September, a year ago, but it's really just a matter of time.
I loved your poem, livelylinda... it really hit home for me!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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J can relate completely, for I too have just twenty percent of heart function. They operated on me in September, a year ago, but it's really just a matter of time.
I loved your poem, livelylinda... it really hit home for me!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Sorry about your heart issues but glad that my little poems touch you. livelylinda
Comment from JM daSilva
I'm very sorry for you and you still find the time to write poetry. You are a hero for those of us on how to face what everybody will finally face one day.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I'm very sorry for you and you still find the time to write poetry. You are a hero for those of us on how to face what everybody will finally face one day.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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It is therapeutic for me to write but I'm not trying to be a hero. If I could possibly help someone else in a similar situation, that would be wonderful. Thanks again, JM
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Welcome. It was a pleasure.
Comment from Suzarb
Yes yes yes! What a wonderful poem about aging. Especially loved first stanza in its entirety; noticed aptly sparse punctuation; so much was said in a short but poignant read. Yay! I stumbled on a good one!!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Yes yes yes! What a wonderful poem about aging. Especially loved first stanza in its entirety; noticed aptly sparse punctuation; so much was said in a short but poignant read. Yay! I stumbled on a good one!!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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This piece is not about aging. It is about being given six months or less to live because of a bad heart condition and waiting to die. There is quite a difference. Thanks for reading. livelylinda
Comment from James Chaima Phiri
The wait is a heartrending story. 17 years is a very long period for one to battle with a disease. I sincerely love and admire the ability and courage to share this story. Allow me to say; "May God be with you in these days when you need Him most!" I hope and trust that I have used the right words to express how I have been touched by this poem without offending the author.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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The wait is a heartrending story. 17 years is a very long period for one to battle with a disease. I sincerely love and admire the ability and courage to share this story. Allow me to say; "May God be with you in these days when you need Him most!" I hope and trust that I have used the right words to express how I have been touched by this poem without offending the author.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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It's o.k., James, you have not offended me in any way. I have reached you with my words and situation and I appreciate your comments. Thank you. livelylinda
Comment from catch22
Hi Linda, this poem saddens me to read and I'm sorry to hear this--for you and your loved ones. This poem had a sense of acceptance behind the words--like you've made peace with your life and just want to live in the moment for as long as you can. Interesting rhyme scheme throughout. The poem flows pretty well overall, but I did stumble on a few lines I'll point out:
have forgiven all the thankless
as life drains from me incessantly
Other than that, it's a strong poem for a strong person. I wish you the best here on earth and wherever you end up in the universe.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Hi Linda, this poem saddens me to read and I'm sorry to hear this--for you and your loved ones. This poem had a sense of acceptance behind the words--like you've made peace with your life and just want to live in the moment for as long as you can. Interesting rhyme scheme throughout. The poem flows pretty well overall, but I did stumble on a few lines I'll point out:
have forgiven all the thankless
as life drains from me incessantly
Other than that, it's a strong poem for a strong person. I wish you the best here on earth and wherever you end up in the universe.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Gail! livelylinda
Comment from barkingdog
YOu did put the state you're in into this poem. I'm sorry things are winding down so to speak.
Very nicely written free verse with good use of enjambment.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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YOu did put the state you're in into this poem. I'm sorry things are winding down so to speak.
Very nicely written free verse with good use of enjambment.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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What is "enjambment"? I am uneducated in proper poem writing. Just do my own thing but like to learn as I go. So, what does that word mean? livelylinda
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The lines that flow smoothly from one to the other without a jolt or hiccough. A nice natural flow from line to line that doesn't feel forced
Comment from Paul Sienicki
Thank you so very much for writing this poem while your life is slipping away from you, and you are still able to express yourself so beautifully and poignantly. I like when you said that "time seems to stand still
and yet, flees hastily". This is a kind of paradox of time we all live in and those who know their limitedness of time they appreciate it the most. I love your work. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for writing this poem while your life is slipping away from you, and you are still able to express yourself so beautifully and poignantly. I like when you said that "time seems to stand still
and yet, flees hastily". This is a kind of paradox of time we all live in and those who know their limitedness of time they appreciate it the most. I love your work. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Paul, for your kind words and six stars. livelylinda
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
Wow this was sure a tough one to read..You sure did well conveying your circumstance it struck home..All the more resaon not wait to follow that dream of yours for one never knows when it may become impossible to travel down highway but the one of silent eturnity
TK
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Wow this was sure a tough one to read..You sure did well conveying your circumstance it struck home..All the more resaon not wait to follow that dream of yours for one never knows when it may become impossible to travel down highway but the one of silent eturnity
TK
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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I already can't travel far, walk to far, etc. Can't follow any dreams now. Taking little steps, planning, being the rock for my children, grandchildren and greatgrandchild. Thanks for reading. livelylinda
