Chasing Butterflies
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Comment from IndianaIrish
Greg, it's always such a gift to find your writing in my message box. Your free verse is incredible and leaves the reader with spectacular imagery and powerful emotion. I love each line of your poem as it packs such a,powerful gut-wrenching punch. I just wondered if that closet door has a handle ... Maybe it's a sliding door that never really shuts tight.mi love reading your work.
My back lays (lies)flat against the sting of tomorrow... (Absolutely fantastic line!)
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Greg, it's always such a gift to find your writing in my message box. Your free verse is incredible and leaves the reader with spectacular imagery and powerful emotion. I love each line of your poem as it packs such a,powerful gut-wrenching punch. I just wondered if that closet door has a handle ... Maybe it's a sliding door that never really shuts tight.mi love reading your work.
My back lays (lies)flat against the sting of tomorrow... (Absolutely fantastic line!)
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Wow Karyn, this might be the nicest review I've ever received. You're so talented it means a Huge amount to me to hear you say that. I like your metaphor better. Maybe it is a sliding door. I hope it is. I've been pretty sick I'm but I'm getting better. I'm on my way. This truly made me smile, you have no idea how much it means to me. Thank you.
By the way, I have no idea what it is but I cannot get lay and lie right. I Always pick the wrong one! Its so strange. Its. Impossible for me to remember! Haha, thank you. I'm looking forward to being well again so I can write and review at my normal level. Thank you thank you thank you Karyn...did you know that my real name is Greg? My dogs name is Cody. ;)
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I hope you do start feeling better and get back to sharing your talent. I'm sure I'm not the only one here who's missed you. Yes, I remember right when you first joined FS and I jumped on your fan wagon, you told me you were Greg and Cody was your pooch.
Take care of you!
Comment from SteveY
My gosh Greg, you are an incredibly talented poet my friend. Your words drip like honey from the nectar comb of poetic metaphor! Just amazing!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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My gosh Greg, you are an incredibly talented poet my friend. Your words drip like honey from the nectar comb of poetic metaphor! Just amazing!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Wow that's an incredibly nice, and very poetic, compliment! M honored! Thank you, God bless
Comment from Ben Colder
Sounds as a cheap drunk. Be still bed , the closet is moving. I was wondering where you were. I see you are hammering at poetry again. Enjoyed. Just teasing about the cheap.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Sounds as a cheap drunk. Be still bed , the closet is moving. I was wondering where you were. I see you are hammering at poetry again. Enjoyed. Just teasing about the cheap.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Haha I like it! Yes I'm back at some poetry. I just wanted to post one thing while I'm recuperating. I've been pretty sick. Getting better tough! Thank you my friend.
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Sorry to hear you have been sick. Good to see you back in the saddle.
Comment from ravenblack
I've got the same except mine are moths of fear.. And they eat away at more than sweaters. I know sometimes it seems as if the door has no handle, but it does- in writing this you have drawn a handle. Love the lines " it draws laughter from my butterflies- / whispers falling from a trumpet" as that is exactly what a butterfly laughter would sound like. I used to play the trumpet and- sensory overload- I can visualize that sound. Been out of sixes for two days, otherwise this would get one.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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I've got the same except mine are moths of fear.. And they eat away at more than sweaters. I know sometimes it seems as if the door has no handle, but it does- in writing this you have drawn a handle. Love the lines " it draws laughter from my butterflies- / whispers falling from a trumpet" as that is exactly what a butterfly laughter would sound like. I used to play the trumpet and- sensory overload- I can visualize that sound. Been out of sixes for two days, otherwise this would get one.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Thank you. Believe me, your words really do help. I'm just sick right now, on the mend, but its depressing, tough. Ill get better. Hearing stuff like this really does make me feel better I'm so grateful you read it, especially you.
Comment from Gungalo
Symphony of senses left to trick my brain,
as I beg for them to find sleep again
My back lays(lies) flat against the sting of tomorrow...
This door has no handle to hold on to anymore though
Who needs a handle when you have your butterflies? An awesome write Greg and the closet is a wonderful idea for a scenario.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Symphony of senses left to trick my brain,
as I beg for them to find sleep again
My back lays(lies) flat against the sting of tomorrow...
This door has no handle to hold on to anymore though
Who needs a handle when you have your butterflies? An awesome write Greg and the closet is a wonderful idea for a scenario.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Thank you. That is a true compliment. I don't know wht it is about lay and lie. I cannot remember which is which. Seriously its some weird thing in my brain. I always pick the wrong one. Ugh thank you so much for reading and helping. Truly thank you.
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Thanks you.
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Greg always remember you lie down and a chicken lays eggs. LOL
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, gregory, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the pain that refuses to leave and stays locked up inside. i enjoyed reading it
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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this is very well written, gregory, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the pain that refuses to leave and stays locked up inside. i enjoyed reading it
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Thank you! It means a lot from you. I'm so so glad you liked it.
Comment from allborn66
This is an interesting piece. I assume you are referring to butterflies in your stomach. I like the flow and the tone of this piece. I feel they are appropriate to the theme.
Barbara
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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This is an interesting piece. I assume you are referring to butterflies in your stomach. I like the flow and the tone of this piece. I feel they are appropriate to the theme.
Barbara
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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Yes, you know you are the first one o reference that. Thank you!
