For Those Who Take a Minute
Blessed are the Slackers205 total reviews
Comment from Alan K Pease
Writing poetry and reading others can be beautiful points in our lives. Appreciating the world around us is a pause that reveals our inner feelings and is a stepping stone for inner peace. Sawyer doesn't look too uncomfortable - a little awkward perhaps and a bit puzzled. Your poetry is never awkward Brooke.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Writing poetry and reading others can be beautiful points in our lives. Appreciating the world around us is a pause that reveals our inner feelings and is a stepping stone for inner peace. Sawyer doesn't look too uncomfortable - a little awkward perhaps and a bit puzzled. Your poetry is never awkward Brooke.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Alan, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Benny Beeharry
What a message. Fits exactly where I am in London.
Where most are only too keen to stay away.
This poem is short but says a great lot from top to bottom. I certainly read more of your poems soon.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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What a message. Fits exactly where I am in London.
Where most are only too keen to stay away.
This poem is short but says a great lot from top to bottom. I certainly read more of your poems soon.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Benny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Peter@Poole
A lovely poem eulogizing the world's workers. I've simply sought to regularize the syllabification of stanza one, lines 1 and 3, with the other two stanzas. It has to be a six nevertheless! I just hope my markup is transmitted correctly.
(If) Work is lauded, Praised and Paid, [Allit of p]
and certainly deSERVEs it --
(so) blessed are those who spin the wheels,
who move the world and SERVE it. [Rhyme of erve]
But there is Something to be Said [Allit of s]
for those who take a minute
aWay from Work to see the World [Allit of w]
and all the joy within it. [Rhyme of in-it]
So Sing the Song of induStry [Allit of s]
and join the daily labor,
but when life's Beauty Beckons you, [Allit of b]
emBrace what you Should Savor. [Near rhyme of labor/savor]
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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A lovely poem eulogizing the world's workers. I've simply sought to regularize the syllabification of stanza one, lines 1 and 3, with the other two stanzas. It has to be a six nevertheless! I just hope my markup is transmitted correctly.
(If) Work is lauded, Praised and Paid, [Allit of p]
and certainly deSERVEs it --
(so) blessed are those who spin the wheels,
who move the world and SERVE it. [Rhyme of erve]
But there is Something to be Said [Allit of s]
for those who take a minute
aWay from Work to see the World [Allit of w]
and all the joy within it. [Rhyme of in-it]
So Sing the Song of induStry [Allit of s]
and join the daily labor,
but when life's Beauty Beckons you, [Allit of b]
emBrace what you Should Savor. [Near rhyme of labor/savor]
Comment Written 17-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Peter, how delightful to wake up and see your name. :-) I hope you are well. I certainly appreciate your thoughtful reading of this poem, my friend. Thank you for your generous sixth star. Let me know how things are going :-) Brooke
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Peter, how delightful to wake up and see your name. :-) I hope you are well. I certainly appreciate your thoughtful reading of this poem, my friend. Thank you for your generous sixth star. Let me know how things are going :-) Brooke
Comment from 3boysrule
Brooke - I don't know how you do it. I really love your poetry. A great piece to be reminded to just stop and smell the roses. Excellent!
Dee
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Brooke - I don't know how you do it. I really love your poetry. A great piece to be reminded to just stop and smell the roses. Excellent!
Dee
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Dee, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Selina Stambi
The little guy sure is growing up fast. I imagine he eats all his veggies nicely.
Love the little message in this sweet piece - life is too short not to pause and sniff the roses, isn't it?
xxx
Sonali
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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The little guy sure is growing up fast. I imagine he eats all his veggies nicely.
Love the little message in this sweet piece - life is too short not to pause and sniff the roses, isn't it?
xxx
Sonali
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Sonali, thank you so much. He is going through a fussy period where he pretty much only likes fruit, cheese and crackers LOL He's driving his mother crazy :-) Brooke
Comment from MelReyn
Awwww... Sawyer is growing up, and so darn cute too!
I like this poem. Makes me want to go outside and take in a super deep lung-full of air. And the pictures you use never fails to be delightful. :)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Awwww... Sawyer is growing up, and so darn cute too!
I like this poem. Makes me want to go outside and take in a super deep lung-full of air. And the pictures you use never fails to be delightful. :)
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much, Mel :-) Brooke
Comment from pbroussard209
What a little cutie. His relaxed stance goes very well with the theme of your poem. We should all stop and smell the roses once in a while.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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What a little cutie. His relaxed stance goes very well with the theme of your poem. We should all stop and smell the roses once in a while.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much, pbroussard :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
One of the things about your work that I marvel at more than all the others is that you produce such wonderful work in what seems to be effortless endeavor. I guess this comes from being a master writer. Do not even bother to argue, your body of work offers conclusive proof that you are indeed a master writer. I will arm wrestle anyone who tries to deny it. LOL. Great work Brooke.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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One of the things about your work that I marvel at more than all the others is that you produce such wonderful work in what seems to be effortless endeavor. I guess this comes from being a master writer. Do not even bother to argue, your body of work offers conclusive proof that you are indeed a master writer. I will arm wrestle anyone who tries to deny it. LOL. Great work Brooke.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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nomi, thank you so very much. I truly do appreciate your encouragement. And I do wish my writing were effortless. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from TXANG1128
Love it..
So brilliant and descriptive.. the cadence allowed an effortless read. Thanks for sharing your work and heart. We should all slow down a bit.. Here's to all the writers who do just that!
I love the image.. the poem.. and the idea..
Blessings and Smiles
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Love it..
So brilliant and descriptive.. the cadence allowed an effortless read. Thanks for sharing your work and heart. We should all slow down a bit.. Here's to all the writers who do just that!
I love the image.. the poem.. and the idea..
Blessings and Smiles
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Txang, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from zanya
Let's all say a resounding 'yes' to this sentiment ;
'when life's beauty beckons you,
embrace what you should savor'.
There may even be a very slight movement on the planet towards this very idea.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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Let's all say a resounding 'yes' to this sentiment ;
'when life's beauty beckons you,
embrace what you should savor'.
There may even be a very slight movement on the planet towards this very idea.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
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zanya, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
