Pale Sisters
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi Bill,
Your story is moving along very well. I really enjoyed this chapter. Your introduction to Libra and her creative gifts is well done. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Hi Bill,
Your story is moving along very well. I really enjoyed this chapter. Your introduction to Libra and her creative gifts is well done. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Rosalyne, for hanging with this story. Bill
Comment from denhagan
This was a very interesting short story to read. It held my attention from the beginning to the end. Had a nice appropriate picture to accompany the story.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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This was a very interesting short story to read. It held my attention from the beginning to the end. Had a nice appropriate picture to accompany the story.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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This is chapter 16 of the story Pale Sisters. The other chapters are short and worth 52 cents to 1.00.
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You're welcome. Thanks,
Dennis
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I'm confused. Did Linda enter Emily's body? If so, where is Emily herself? They told her she'd be okay but where is she? Dead? Are these actually the children of a Kolk?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I'm confused. Did Linda enter Emily's body? If so, where is Emily herself? They told her she'd be okay but where is she? Dead? Are these actually the children of a Kolk?
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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EmiIy has joined Sophia with the Kolk. The Kolk become the soul of and respond to the individual entity's identification.
Comment from Dustybones
Hello Bill. I have only read this chapter. Jumping into the story took me back some not knowing it was about the supernatural. Your writing is spot on.
I am sure that the name eh eebwa is part of the nether world, I like the name!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Hello Bill. I have only read this chapter. Jumping into the story took me back some not knowing it was about the supernatural. Your writing is spot on.
I am sure that the name eh eebwa is part of the nether world, I like the name!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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The other chapters are all worth money and are quick reads.
Comment from joneau2
Very well done. The continuation of your story maintained my interest throughout. However, I'm still puzzled about the Kolk. They appear to be protective, but of what you haven't made clear. Also, why do they kill so indiscriminately, and apparently without remorse. I guess I'll just have to read on.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Very well done. The continuation of your story maintained my interest throughout. However, I'm still puzzled about the Kolk. They appear to be protective, but of what you haven't made clear. Also, why do they kill so indiscriminately, and apparently without remorse. I guess I'll just have to read on.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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The Kolk are not necessarily good guys, especially when it comes to taking out the Magfas.
Comment from lindalcreel
This is my first look at your writing and I was very impressed. I had no idea what was happening and now you have piqued my interest enough to go back and look at other chapters. This was well written. The dialogue of the child was adorable. Great pace, lots of suspense and lots of questions prompting the reader to wait for more. Well done. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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This is my first look at your writing and I was very impressed. I had no idea what was happening and now you have piqued my interest enough to go back and look at other chapters. This was well written. The dialogue of the child was adorable. Great pace, lots of suspense and lots of questions prompting the reader to wait for more. Well done. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for taking some time to check it out. It's no Utopia, but I appreciate the encouragement. Bill
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is interesting in its premise. I see how Libra at age 2 isn't enunciating clearly yet. I guess I am intrigued to see what Linda will do under the guise of Emily with the two girls.
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This is interesting in its premise. I see how Libra at age 2 isn't enunciating clearly yet. I guess I am intrigued to see what Linda will do under the guise of Emily with the two girls.
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank for for taking a look at this one. Bill
