Haiku (Succulence)
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Comment from mystery poet
The art from your studio is exquisite...
I see patience and feel the casual dew drops
as they drip and saturate the lovely rose...
A gorgeous poem and presentation.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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The art from your studio is exquisite...
I see patience and feel the casual dew drops
as they drip and saturate the lovely rose...
A gorgeous poem and presentation.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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thank you mystery poet!
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LOL::}} Joyce
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Hi Joyce!!
Comment from Jokerswild
Nicely written Haiku. The picture really draws you into the writing and helps emphasize the emotion of the piece. I really loved the play on dew in the 2nd line. I broke out into chuckles when I read it.
Jackie
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Nicely written Haiku. The picture really draws you into the writing and helps emphasize the emotion of the piece. I really loved the play on dew in the 2nd line. I broke out into chuckles when I read it.
Jackie
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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awww another six? thanks a ton!
gotta love a play on words!
Comment from NadineM
Delicate and very special are both this picture and poem. Love the overall presentation and how it made me smile! Thanks for sharing this with me!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Delicate and very special are both this picture and poem. Love the overall presentation and how it made me smile! Thanks for sharing this with me!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Now you know how I love to make you smile. As you do me, my friend. This photo result was such a treat for me.
Comment from 9999pool
This pink rose slowing bloom in persuasion by the sunshine and rain.
Soon it has to bid farewell and with the dew moistened and her day is done, she bids farewell almost reluctantly to fade away.
Succulent once but demise soon to come and she withers slowly.
Great write, and well penned in a haiku of nature.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :)) Hugs.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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This pink rose slowing bloom in persuasion by the sunshine and rain.
Soon it has to bid farewell and with the dew moistened and her day is done, she bids farewell almost reluctantly to fade away.
Succulent once but demise soon to come and she withers slowly.
Great write, and well penned in a haiku of nature.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :)) Hugs.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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thanks
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Welcome, cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from Nichola
This is a very sensual poem and very human. Your photograph complements your poem nicely. Thank you for sharing your poem and artwork.
Nichola
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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This is a very sensual poem and very human. Your photograph complements your poem nicely. Thank you for sharing your poem and artwork.
Nichola
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thank you Nichola.
Comment from Spitfire
what a perfect picture to compliment the haiku. Excellent satori line with its double meaning. Good alliteration with the "s" sound; assonance with signs and time. As with any great poem I can read another message between the lines--a love moment. :-)
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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what a perfect picture to compliment the haiku. Excellent satori line with its double meaning. Good alliteration with the "s" sound; assonance with signs and time. As with any great poem I can read another message between the lines--a love moment. :-)
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Love must be the energy I'm emitting lately. Others found romance in my Welcome poem too. Maybe I'm trying to attract it. But the inspiration was the photo I took and how beautiful it displayed itself. :)
So glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from judiverse
Very lovely, and the artwork is certainly dazzling. You have your syllable count of 5-7-5 down perfectly. I like your play on the word "dew." The poem does has a sensual quality about it, suggestion sexual flirtation. Great use of the words saturation and persuasion. judi
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Very lovely, and the artwork is certainly dazzling. You have your syllable count of 5-7-5 down perfectly. I like your play on the word "dew." The poem does has a sensual quality about it, suggestion sexual flirtation. Great use of the words saturation and persuasion. judi
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, very clever wordplay in this lovely haiku, and it's so easy to visualize too - absolutely beautiful, and the picture you have chosen couldn't be better.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Ah, very clever wordplay in this lovely haiku, and it's so easy to visualize too - absolutely beautiful, and the picture you have chosen couldn't be better.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thanks my friend!
Comment from denhagan
I thought this was a very beautiful and succulent--especially when accompanied by the picture--haiku poem. Had the correct number of syllables. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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I thought this was a very beautiful and succulent--especially when accompanied by the picture--haiku poem. Had the correct number of syllables. Nice poem.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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thanks. There are several forms of haiku with less syllables too, correct?
I am SO appreciative of this Excellent review. Wow. thank you!
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You're welcome,
Dennis
Comment from rjuselius
"saturation comes
signs of gentle persuasion
falling in dew time"
exquiste piece of poetry and i love the satori and its double meaning! very well done!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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"saturation comes
signs of gentle persuasion
falling in dew time"
exquiste piece of poetry and i love the satori and its double meaning! very well done!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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THANK YOU!!
