Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from c_lucas
Demons in a real life situation would throw investigators for a loop. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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Demons in a real life situation would throw investigators for a loop. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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They haven't a clue what they're dealing with. I'm convinced the police should consider spiritual oppression more often. But that's just me. Thanks so much for continuing to be so supportive, charlie. I appreciate it. Warmest regards, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
Comment from Adri7enne
Freaky twist, Bev. So Debra Paget had a hairball in her stomach. If I recall correctly, the killer works in the morgue, doesn't he? How handy for him, playing with the evidence as it surfaces. Looks like things are heating up.
The demonic connection is being developed. I'm eager to see how you handle the exorcism, or if you do. Good reading, Bev. Good writing.
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Freaky twist, Bev. So Debra Paget had a hairball in her stomach. If I recall correctly, the killer works in the morgue, doesn't he? How handy for him, playing with the evidence as it surfaces. Looks like things are heating up.
The demonic connection is being developed. I'm eager to see how you handle the exorcism, or if you do. Good reading, Bev. Good writing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Adrienne, thank you for this superb review. You even developed a possible plot twist for me LOL. Oh, there'll be an exorcism of sorts LOL. Again, thanks my friend for your support.
:0) Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Reporters are a pain in the butt. This is moving along very nicely. You are doing a great job with this. I can't wait to see where it goes from here.
The priest interrupted. "Wasn't that Monsignor Flaherty's parish (comma after interrupted)
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Reporters are a pain in the butt. This is moving along very nicely. You are doing a great job with this. I can't wait to see where it goes from here.
The priest interrupted. "Wasn't that Monsignor Flaherty's parish (comma after interrupted)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
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Barbara, thank you so very much for this gracious review and spotting the spaggie. I appreciate it! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from judiverse
This is getting spookier and spookier. The occult is definitely at work here. There's the matter of the missing hair ball that was found in Debra's stomach. The lacerations on Buell's body resembled a cross. And his wounds appeared to have been made by an animal claw. Skeets is right not to trust Danika. She's capable of playing all sides just to get her story. It's very revealing that Father Northrup says Father Brian has had experience in performing exorcisms but hasn't told the Sheriff. The meeting between the sheriff and Father Northrup should be exciting. judi
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This is getting spookier and spookier. The occult is definitely at work here. There's the matter of the missing hair ball that was found in Debra's stomach. The lacerations on Buell's body resembled a cross. And his wounds appeared to have been made by an animal claw. Skeets is right not to trust Danika. She's capable of playing all sides just to get her story. It's very revealing that Father Northrup says Father Brian has had experience in performing exorcisms but hasn't told the Sheriff. The meeting between the sheriff and Father Northrup should be exciting. judi
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much, Judi. I appreciate the support! :0) Bev
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You're so welcome. I'll really be interested in what the sheriff finds out from Father Northrup. If someone hasn't got to the exorcist first. judi
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Hmm... you've been peeking?! hehehehe
:0) Bev
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You've certainly enticed the reader with the element of the occult involved and I'll be excited to read more. judi
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Thanks, buddy. XX
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You're so welcome. I do enjoy suspense! judi
Comment from Sankey
Wow, gory, yucky and definitely a strange murder mystery. Thanks for all the drama. maybe I might have to come back and go through some of the previous chapters. Good work.
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Wow, gory, yucky and definitely a strange murder mystery. Thanks for all the drama. maybe I might have to come back and go through some of the previous chapters. Good work.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Hi, Sankey. Thank you for taking time to read my chapter. I appreciate your insights and generosity! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Bev,
Sure glad I am reading this before nightfall! Crazy people and boy does this one creep me out. Exceptional writing in this one my friend. It has such intense imagery that this story goes into areas so gray and devilish it scares me senseless even as fiction.
I've watched enough documentaries on this topic to remind me fiction can sometimes be truth. This packs a punch and has me wondering how many more twists and turns you are creating for us.
My last six to you.....this is a work that holds the reader captive, as the unknown becomes the known and the reality is rocked by demonic actions/imagery.
Exceptional and I read it without a pillow covering my eyes. LOL - that is a big deal indeed:)
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
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Dear Bev,
Sure glad I am reading this before nightfall! Crazy people and boy does this one creep me out. Exceptional writing in this one my friend. It has such intense imagery that this story goes into areas so gray and devilish it scares me senseless even as fiction.
I've watched enough documentaries on this topic to remind me fiction can sometimes be truth. This packs a punch and has me wondering how many more twists and turns you are creating for us.
My last six to you.....this is a work that holds the reader captive, as the unknown becomes the known and the reality is rocked by demonic actions/imagery.
Exceptional and I read it without a pillow covering my eyes. LOL - that is a big deal indeed:)
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Maureen, thank you so much for your very encouraging and generous review. Your words really lift my spirits. Thanks for reading, thuogh the subject matter is definitely intense in this one. Your support means a lot to me, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the reports find that each victim had animal parts on or in his person
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the reports find that each victim had animal parts on or in his person
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks so very much, sweet. :0) Bev
Comment from Rondeno
Oh, goody! I love exorcism, Bevuccini! Your story just gets better - and what a fabulous line to end your chapter on! More, please!
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Oh, goody! I love exorcism, Bevuccini! Your story just gets better - and what a fabulous line to end your chapter on! More, please!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Hi, buddy. Thank you for this awesome review! More spooky stuff to come... XXX Bev
Comment from Darkhorse555
The pictured snake was breath taking walking through the morgue father Brian in the excoriates an amazingly beautiful read
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The pictured snake was breath taking walking through the morgue father Brian in the excoriates an amazingly beautiful read
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for reading my chapter and offering your insights. Very generous of you! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from JB Lynn
Great exchange of dialogue between the characters. The conversations flow and feel natural, and I wasn't confused about who was speaking or when.
"She tell you how much they've got?"
"From what I could gather, just about everything. Which leaves us with zip for a bargaining chip..." - This was one of my favorite patches of dialogue. The language sounds real and believable for these characters.
Your transitions through this chapter worked very well for me.
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Great exchange of dialogue between the characters. The conversations flow and feel natural, and I wasn't confused about who was speaking or when.
"She tell you how much they've got?"
"From what I could gather, just about everything. Which leaves us with zip for a bargaining chip..." - This was one of my favorite patches of dialogue. The language sounds real and believable for these characters.
Your transitions through this chapter worked very well for me.
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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JB, thank you so much for noting what you liked in the chapter. I really sweart bullets over my dialogue, so it's very rewarding to know it worked for you. I really appreciate the encouragement and support. Warmest regards, Bev
