First Kiss
First Kiss at the cafe27 total reviews
Comment from amanda98653
It must be a careless mistake. You entered this poem to the wrong category.Please fix it.
The poem overall is nice and beautiful though
AJ
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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It must be a careless mistake. You entered this poem to the wrong category.Please fix it.
The poem overall is nice and beautiful though
AJ
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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thanks
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fixed it, hope you enjoy I'm new to the site
Comment from cinderbella
This is a very nice poem but it is not a 5-7-5.
5-7-5 should have only three lines
5 syllables in first line
7 syllables in second line
5 syllables in third line
If this was not entered as a 5-7-5 for a contest, it would likely give you a higher rating. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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This is a very nice poem but it is not a 5-7-5.
5-7-5 should have only three lines
5 syllables in first line
7 syllables in second line
5 syllables in third line
If this was not entered as a 5-7-5 for a contest, it would likely give you a higher rating. :) Sandra
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
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thanks
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fixed it thanks
Comment from Jose Saic
Is a poem that express the feelings of a dreamer that with faith, hope and prayings is looking and wondering if somebody will accept and like him.
Beautiful, I like it
Congratulations to the author.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Is a poem that express the feelings of a dreamer that with faith, hope and prayings is looking and wondering if somebody will accept and like him.
Beautiful, I like it
Congratulations to the author.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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thank you
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You are welcome.
Comment from Darkhorse555
touching your soul shadows from the very depths in the prayers flickering in the fire you see the light of faith a really beautiful piece
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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touching your soul shadows from the very depths in the prayers flickering in the fire you see the light of faith a really beautiful piece
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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thank you
Comment from adewpearl
You have misunderstood the rules for the 5/7/5 contest and format
Your poem is supposed to be only 3 lines long
The first line should have 5 syllables in it
The second line should have 7 syllables
The third line should have five syllables
You have written your poem with heartfelt emotion, but it does not follow the rules of the contest it is entered into
Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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You have misunderstood the rules for the 5/7/5 contest and format
Your poem is supposed to be only 3 lines long
The first line should have 5 syllables in it
The second line should have 7 syllables
The third line should have five syllables
You have written your poem with heartfelt emotion, but it does not follow the rules of the contest it is entered into
Brooke
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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thanks
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fixed it
Comment from thequeencatalyst
First thing I noticed: the title of your work is Untied, but on the poem is says Untitled before the work begins. That's confusing, because it makes me wonder what exactly is the name of this work? But aside from that, this poem doesn't quite seem to be supernatural. I opened this expecting something about ghosts or perhaps werewolves or anything genuinely supernatural, but this makes me think of a schoolgirl crush.
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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First thing I noticed: the title of your work is Untied, but on the poem is says Untitled before the work begins. That's confusing, because it makes me wonder what exactly is the name of this work? But aside from that, this poem doesn't quite seem to be supernatural. I opened this expecting something about ghosts or perhaps werewolves or anything genuinely supernatural, but this makes me think of a schoolgirl crush.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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thank you for your comments
Comment from Adri7enne
I do like you, swandrh. You write well, with some depth of feeling.
You misunderstood the poetry contest guidelines, however. You need to read them again. This calls for three lines of poetry. The first line should have 5 syllables, the second line, 7 syllables, and the third line have only 5 syllables. You can go back to the poem, edit it, and work it down to only 17 syllables. Good luck with it.
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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I do like you, swandrh. You write well, with some depth of feeling.
You misunderstood the poetry contest guidelines, however. You need to read them again. This calls for three lines of poetry. The first line should have 5 syllables, the second line, 7 syllables, and the third line have only 5 syllables. You can go back to the poem, edit it, and work it down to only 17 syllables. Good luck with it.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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thanks, I
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thank you adri,... I'm new to this site so I'm a little confuse about how it works, but its honestly a great site and i'm really enjoying it thus far. I ain
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thank you adri,... I'm new to this site so I'm a little confuse about how it works, but its honestly a great site and i'm really enjoying it thus far. But thank you so much for your comments.
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thank you adri,... I'm new to this site so I'm a little confuse about how it works, but its honestly a great site and i'm really enjoying it thus far. But thank you so much for your comments.
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Welcome! So many new people make the same mistake in entering their first contest. Just shrug it off. The next one will be easier. Have fun!
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thanks, do u know if a can enter contest without a membership i can't afford one
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You seem to have entered this one. You're already in it. Maybe you have a limited number of contests you can enter, until you buy a membership. Good luck.
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thanks so much, look at your profile you won alot of titles congrats on that.
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fixed the poem
