Winds of Change
a poem about darkness and light81 total reviews
Comment from Paul Sienicki
Thank you for sharing your creative ideas about the change using a lot of verbs, and my favourite line "a life full resistance", a perfect depiction of your poem. This is really good. I also wrote a poem on change. Cheers.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Thank you for sharing your creative ideas about the change using a lot of verbs, and my favourite line "a life full resistance", a perfect depiction of your poem. This is really good. I also wrote a poem on change. Cheers.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thank so much paul
Comment from rjuselius
i can relate to your bipolar, i have schizophrenia. mental illness at any rate. to turn darkness into light has been one of my struggles.
thank you for sharing such an intimate and delicate piece of poetry!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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i can relate to your bipolar, i have schizophrenia. mental illness at any rate. to turn darkness into light has been one of my struggles.
thank you for sharing such an intimate and delicate piece of poetry!
rebekka x
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thank you
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very good way to write about depression. 'Trying to heal with medication, only covering up the pain' - a good, true line. Five good stanzas in a/b/a/b form giving an account and good advice about depression. Facing up to it after years of resistance. This flows, and rhymes so well, yet does not compromise your message in order to achieve this. Thanks for the read. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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A very good way to write about depression. 'Trying to heal with medication, only covering up the pain' - a good, true line. Five good stanzas in a/b/a/b form giving an account and good advice about depression. Facing up to it after years of resistance. This flows, and rhymes so well, yet does not compromise your message in order to achieve this. Thanks for the read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much dorothy
Comment from lorijean
Difficult thing to get through, and you never really know when it will hit, quite scary, a great poem, thank you for sharing......
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Difficult thing to get through, and you never really know when it will hit, quite scary, a great poem, thank you for sharing......
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thank you
Comment from kiwijenny
You get a six for this my friend . I too have dealt with. Depression. Phil 4:8 Finally, brothers, whatever is true, whatever is honorable, whatever is just, whatever is pure, whatever is lovely, whatever is commendable, if there is any excellence, if there is anything worthy of praise, think about these things.
I meditate on this verse before I put my feet on the floor. Training my mind to focus on good positive Godly things has helped me more than any other thing.
God bless
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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You get a six for this my friend . I too have dealt with. Depression. Phil 4:8 Finally, brothers, whatever is true, whatever is honorable, whatever is just, whatever is pure, whatever is lovely, whatever is commendable, if there is any excellence, if there is anything worthy of praise, think about these things.
I meditate on this verse before I put my feet on the floor. Training my mind to focus on good positive Godly things has helped me more than any other thing.
God bless
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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thanks so much for the high praise thanks so much may we walk in the light together
Comment from elchupakabra
I would change the title because it immediately makes me think of the Scorpions. I even put the song on youtube to review this work lol.
Reuniting with the depths of my soul
Reunites the depths of my soul(flows better in my opinion)
I think you've done a good job capturing your theme here; and I prefer that you've ended on an uplifting note, optimism is generally more helpful. Really great work overall here, the linework is solid, the flow is smooth and the point is made nicely. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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I would change the title because it immediately makes me think of the Scorpions. I even put the song on youtube to review this work lol.
Reuniting with the depths of my soul
Reunites the depths of my soul(flows better in my opinion)
I think you've done a good job capturing your theme here; and I prefer that you've ended on an uplifting note, optimism is generally more helpful. Really great work overall here, the linework is solid, the flow is smooth and the point is made nicely. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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thank you so much for your feed back I really appreciate it.
Comment from emjaihammond
If one suffers like this on a daily basis, I cannot imagine how difficult it must be to hold down a job, or care for a family. It is wonderful they seem to have more natural health choices now, at least they have a foot hold. Great written piece on this.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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If one suffers like this on a daily basis, I cannot imagine how difficult it must be to hold down a job, or care for a family. It is wonderful they seem to have more natural health choices now, at least they have a foot hold. Great written piece on this.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer stays consistent with the abab rhyme scheme. The rhyming is good. The piece flows well as the writer does a good job of not forcing the rhymes The photo fits the piece perfectly as this piece holds my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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The writer stays consistent with the abab rhyme scheme. The rhyming is good. The piece flows well as the writer does a good job of not forcing the rhymes The photo fits the piece perfectly as this piece holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
good use of enjambment to keep ideas flowing from line to line
good alliteration in daily devotions/darkness
and in learning to live
and in past for present
and in success within my sight
You chronicle with genuine emotion the path from depression to hope while explaining how meditation and living in the moment led to a new appreciation of life that medication did not bring :-) It is good to see you posting again :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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solid use of abab rhyming
good use of enjambment to keep ideas flowing from line to line
good alliteration in daily devotions/darkness
and in learning to live
and in past for present
and in success within my sight
You chronicle with genuine emotion the path from depression to hope while explaining how meditation and living in the moment led to a new appreciation of life that medication did not bring :-) It is good to see you posting again :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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thank you Brooke its been a long time trying to rejoin the light
Comment from gaangel62
Very good poem, your rhyming is sound with an easy flow. The subject of your poem is close to my heart, you have an excellent write here....Thanks for sharing...Hugs....Angie
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Very good poem, your rhyming is sound with an easy flow. The subject of your poem is close to my heart, you have an excellent write here....Thanks for sharing...Hugs....Angie
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Thank you Angie
