Winds of Change
a poem about darkness and light81 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Anyone who has been through some form of depression will be able to empathize completely with this poem.
I love the hope and the positive ray of light that sneak gently in as the stanzas unfold, with a promise of light at the end of the tunnel.
If this is biographical, my love and thoughts are with the writer.
I don't think we've bumped into each other before - nice to meet you, Ew. :)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Anyone who has been through some form of depression will be able to empathize completely with this poem.
I love the hope and the positive ray of light that sneak gently in as the stanzas unfold, with a promise of light at the end of the tunnel.
If this is biographical, my love and thoughts are with the writer.
I don't think we've bumped into each other before - nice to meet you, Ew. :)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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same to you my friend i have been away awhile
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem was thought provoking and creative. The author did a great job with the words
reflecting the theme and title of this poem. The artwork was perfect and enhanced the read. Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Excellent Poem! The poem was thought provoking and creative. The author did a great job with the words
reflecting the theme and title of this poem. The artwork was perfect and enhanced the read. Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much
Comment from costellsgirl33
Oh wow, this was amazing. I've actually never thought how life is through the eyes of a depressed person. This was very good writing, very descriptive and emotional and right from the heart. You gave a lot of insight and opened the door to your world (or the one of a depressed person). I can't even imagine how that much feel but reading your poem gave me a small shadow of how it is. I love the line "Trying to heal through medication only covering up the pain". That was awesome! Thank you
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Oh wow, this was amazing. I've actually never thought how life is through the eyes of a depressed person. This was very good writing, very descriptive and emotional and right from the heart. You gave a lot of insight and opened the door to your world (or the one of a depressed person). I can't even imagine how that much feel but reading your poem gave me a small shadow of how it is. I love the line "Trying to heal through medication only covering up the pain". That was awesome! Thank you
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much yes it is about my journey have a wonderful tomorrow thanks for the awesome review
Monte
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You are so very welcome! Your poem was wonderful my friend
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Simply symphonically worded the value and essence of living in the twists and turns of depression and the days of embracing the light in course of living to achieve the dream destination thru light. 10/827
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Simply symphonically worded the value and essence of living in the twists and turns of depression and the days of embracing the light in course of living to achieve the dream destination thru light. 10/827
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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thank you
Comment from Mastery
Hello, Earthwriter. It sure has been a long time since I've seen a post by you??? I liked this offering a lot. I remember you as a very fine poet.
"Learning to live in the moment
not letting the brain control
Trading the past for present
Reuniting with the depths of my soul"
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Hello, Earthwriter. It sure has been a long time since I've seen a post by you??? I liked this offering a lot. I remember you as a very fine poet.
"Learning to live in the moment
not letting the brain control
Trading the past for present
Reuniting with the depths of my soul"
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much Bob
Comment from Norbanus
An excellent message from your poem.
but it could be more powerful with a consistent meter and by tightening the lines. It looks like seven syllables per line would work well. If you prefer iambic the eight syllable would fit. Consider something like this:
A life time of resistance
feeling alone in the dark
Live bipolar existence
Search for a magical spark
Trying through medication
covering over up the pain
new hope through meditation
life seems worth living again
Avow adverse emotions
putting them into their place
Learn to relax with devotions
efface the darkness with truth
Learning to live in the moment
Don't let the brain grab control
Trading the past for present
Reconcile depths of my soul
A life filled with gratitude
be thankful and be happy
rejoining the precious light
new success is in my sight
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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An excellent message from your poem.
but it could be more powerful with a consistent meter and by tightening the lines. It looks like seven syllables per line would work well. If you prefer iambic the eight syllable would fit. Consider something like this:
A life time of resistance
feeling alone in the dark
Live bipolar existence
Search for a magical spark
Trying through medication
covering over up the pain
new hope through meditation
life seems worth living again
Avow adverse emotions
putting them into their place
Learn to relax with devotions
efface the darkness with truth
Learning to live in the moment
Don't let the brain grab control
Trading the past for present
Reconcile depths of my soul
A life filled with gratitude
be thankful and be happy
rejoining the precious light
new success is in my sight
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thanks for your advice
Comment from Razz
Beautifully expressed.
Wonderfully written.
So soft,yet raw.
Photo says it all.
Great writing.
May God bless and kkep you.
Razz
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Beautifully expressed.
Wonderfully written.
So soft,yet raw.
Photo says it all.
Great writing.
May God bless and kkep you.
Razz
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much
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You're quite welcome.
Razz
Comment from wadamani
An insightful look into the circus that is living with bi-polar. It is a compassionate and heartfelt poem that merits the recognition it has been receiving. Well done
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An insightful look into the circus that is living with bi-polar. It is a compassionate and heartfelt poem that merits the recognition it has been receiving. Well done
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thank you
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Monty you have penned a fine poem. You asked me if I could help you with the flow. () means delete
A life time (full) of resistance
(and) feeling alone in the dark
Living a bipolar existence
searching for a magical spark
Trying to heal through medication
(only)covering up the pain
Discovering new hope through meditation
life seems worth living again
Acknowledging negative emotions
putting them in their place
Learning to relax with daily devotions
embracing darkness with true efface
Learning to live in the moment
not letting the brain control
Trading the past for present
Reuniting with the depths of my soul
A life filled with (thankfulness) (and) gratitude
new found happiness, rejoining the light
(A) changing of (both) perceptions and attitude
each new day, success is within my sight
By deleting the words I marked it will tighten up the lines and make it read smoother. I hope this helps and if you disagree that is fine too. chey
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Hi Monty you have penned a fine poem. You asked me if I could help you with the flow. () means delete
A life time (full) of resistance
(and) feeling alone in the dark
Living a bipolar existence
searching for a magical spark
Trying to heal through medication
(only)covering up the pain
Discovering new hope through meditation
life seems worth living again
Acknowledging negative emotions
putting them in their place
Learning to relax with daily devotions
embracing darkness with true efface
Learning to live in the moment
not letting the brain control
Trading the past for present
Reuniting with the depths of my soul
A life filled with (thankfulness) (and) gratitude
new found happiness, rejoining the light
(A) changing of (both) perceptions and attitude
each new day, success is within my sight
By deleting the words I marked it will tighten up the lines and make it read smoother. I hope this helps and if you disagree that is fine too. chey
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much Chey i so appreciate you
Comment from Iese
Just what another poet ordered phenomenal work. I love inspiring poetry. I too hop you can come and be embraced by my work. Love this: A life filled with thankfulness and gratitude
new found happiness, rejoining the light
A changing of both perceptions and attitude
each new day, success is within my sight
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Just what another poet ordered phenomenal work. I love inspiring poetry. I too hop you can come and be embraced by my work. Love this: A life filled with thankfulness and gratitude
new found happiness, rejoining the light
A changing of both perceptions and attitude
each new day, success is within my sight
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thank you so much
