Winds of Change
a poem about darkness and light81 total reviews
Comment from Kidlike101
I like this one, I've been fighting depression for the past three years and I can sympathize with the message in the poem.
You can never truly go back to the time of innocence after that but if you learn to let the past go and move on time will start again for you.
Here is a six!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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I like this one, I've been fighting depression for the past three years and I can sympathize with the message in the poem.
You can never truly go back to the time of innocence after that but if you learn to let the past go and move on time will start again for you.
Here is a six!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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thank you my friend glad you can relate thanx for the positive
Comment from Tina McKala
This was really very well written, the embrace of the light was strong here. The tragedy about bi-polar is that the other side is also as intense, but this poem captured the nicer side of it, full of hope, energy and will to fight all obstacles. Expressed this well within a poem might be the guiding light when the depression knocks on the door.
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This was really very well written, the embrace of the light was strong here. The tragedy about bi-polar is that the other side is also as intense, but this poem captured the nicer side of it, full of hope, energy and will to fight all obstacles. Expressed this well within a poem might be the guiding light when the depression knocks on the door.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
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thanks so much Tina have an awesome day
Comment from visionary1234
Well bravo for you! You capture so well the ups and downs - mostly the downs - and the agony - of this disability. I love it that your piece is imbued with hope and courage. Not so fond of your use of 'efface' as a noun though - it seems to 'force' the rhyme a bit? Also if you're writing in abab rhyme scheme, you set up the expectation of a regular meter - but your meter is definitely rather bumpy in places. I think if you worked on it, though, you'd have an extraordinary piece which would be VERY inspiring to many, many people.
Blessings,
Sharyn
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Well bravo for you! You capture so well the ups and downs - mostly the downs - and the agony - of this disability. I love it that your piece is imbued with hope and courage. Not so fond of your use of 'efface' as a noun though - it seems to 'force' the rhyme a bit? Also if you're writing in abab rhyme scheme, you set up the expectation of a regular meter - but your meter is definitely rather bumpy in places. I think if you worked on it, though, you'd have an extraordinary piece which would be VERY inspiring to many, many people.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
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meter is hard for me dear any suggestions are always welcome it is a work in process i am definitely not a meter master just a man with a message
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Pal
This is such a moving poem. It mirrors my life in so many ways. Had I not got my new meds in 2001, my body would have shut down. I am alive and happy to be alive. Thanks for reminding me of how blessed I am
Bear
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Hey there Pal
This is such a moving poem. It mirrors my life in so many ways. Had I not got my new meds in 2001, my body would have shut down. I am alive and happy to be alive. Thanks for reminding me of how blessed I am
Bear
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
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awesome glen i am glad you are doing better
Comment from DALLAS01
Thanks for sharing. I start every day with six daily meditation books. They are a great way of getting centered.
A different perspective can really move one forward.
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Thanks for sharing. I start every day with six daily meditation books. They are a great way of getting centered.
A different perspective can really move one forward.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much
Comment from denhagan
I thought and felt this was a beautiful poem, and one with deep meaning. It was a very inspirational poem about overcoming. Read well with good rhythm and rhyming.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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I thought and felt this was a beautiful poem, and one with deep meaning. It was a very inspirational poem about overcoming. Read well with good rhythm and rhyming.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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thanks so much for your review
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You're welcome,
Dennis
Comment from tbacha58
My God what an amazing soul in your poem, such a fighter with an abnormal strength, so strong and deep, beautiful, God loves you to offer you a pen so rich. Bless you Terry xoxo
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My God what an amazing soul in your poem, such a fighter with an abnormal strength, so strong and deep, beautiful, God loves you to offer you a pen so rich. Bless you Terry xoxo
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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thank you Terry that means so much to me
Comment from madhatter1977
I can relate very well to the message of this poem and it's very powerful. Writing can help in the struggle of life I find. And having a purpose and an open rather than closed mind. Beautifully written and very powerful. Thanks for sharing this exceptional poem! Best wishes, Pete :)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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I can relate very well to the message of this poem and it's very powerful. Writing can help in the struggle of life I find. And having a purpose and an open rather than closed mind. Beautifully written and very powerful. Thanks for sharing this exceptional poem! Best wishes, Pete :)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Thank you Pete have an awesome tomorrow
Monte
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Believe it or not it already is tomorrow where I am Monte! Have an awesome one too. Look forward to reading more of your work.
Pete
Comment from Irish Rain
i so connected with the message in this...my sister's life could have been this poem...it is too late for her, but hopefully your poem will touch others....blessings to you!
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i so connected with the message in this...my sister's life could have been this poem...it is too late for her, but hopefully your poem will touch others....blessings to you!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much
Comment from Dean Kuch
Excellent writing here, Monty. Depressingly sad, melancholy, with just a hint of sarcasm infused into the message.
Depression is a disease, just as much so as cancer, AIDS, and typhoid fever. Those who say it's not have never been there, wriggling, under it's suppressing thumb of oppression.
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Excellent writing here, Monty. Depressingly sad, melancholy, with just a hint of sarcasm infused into the message.
Depression is a disease, just as much so as cancer, AIDS, and typhoid fever. Those who say it's not have never been there, wriggling, under it's suppressing thumb of oppression.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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thanks so much dean
